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Posted: 06 July 2013 at 10:06am | IP Logged
Dear,what to say..Again u just rocked with u'r poem..I just loved it..A perfect awakening poem and topic..I like u'r title name "Unaware of power"..And u just extracted the main issue,the problem of todays world..Rape and Victims are very serious issues and they are increasing day by day..So i just loved the way u maked such a wonderfull topic and most above,its beautifully written in u'r way..Keep it up..

Loved the begning part where u showed the amazing powers of female breed..Then u showed the comparision with a males breed..Loved the way u showed the dirty brains of a peoples behind friendship..I loved all the lines..and specially i loved last two lines of Challenging..Great work..
It was perfect POV description of female breed in the way of POEM..
Commendable..!!

Thanx for PM  

Prateek

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Posted: 06 July 2013 at 10:09am | IP Logged
fabulous...!
ur amazing...!

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Posted: 06 July 2013 at 10:11am | IP Logged
It juz tore through my soul

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Posted: 06 July 2013 at 10:20am | IP Logged
Originally posted by crazy-nut

Yes women hv to stand up united against the atrocities against them & I'm sure God will be with us.  


GOD is always with us dear...the thing we should do is to know our own power,that's hidden.
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Posted: 06 July 2013 at 10:24am | IP Logged
Originally posted by Sohad3fan

Originally posted by surprising

Unaware of power

 

I'm a girl,not a man;

God has made me so,

Mother Nature lulls me as so,

They find beauty in me

So give me opportunity to be fitted in every relation-

Friend,mother,wife,daughter & so on .

 

Did he commit a sin??

 

I've everything that belongs to a man

 I too have a heart having appeal

Two eyes shining with longing to know more

Two hands no less diligent than men

Two legs on tenterhooks to run

 

But the genital properties differ..

 

And that's my fault...

My appeal that offers purity & friendship,

Steals their dirty attention

They treat me just as an element to enjoy.

Their polluted hands undress me...from everything!!

 

...They snatch my virginity...

 

I'm an inseparable part of God

I give birth to civilization

I spread my wings everywhere in the universe

I've tremendous power that's devastating

I'm the source of force in heaven.

 

Then why am I so helpless??

 

The demons culture blood-seeds

They increase time to time like grass

But now,I WILL NOT RECEIVE MAN'S POWER

I will gather my own lady shoulders.

A drop of water can form vanquishing rain if united.

 

Who gives you right to dire us??

 

WE ARE CHALLENGING YOU MEN

Spread your dirty arms...WE WILL BREAK IT AT ONCE.


Wow...Amazing poem Rumpu...
Loved it..
I fell in love wid ur every poem...
They are just FABULOUS..
Thanks 4 d pm..


thanks Smile
this poem is my best try
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Posted: 06 July 2013 at 10:26am | IP Logged
Originally posted by Roxxy47

One one - Mind Blowing Big smile...
Again the topic was touchy...
I could actually feel what you are trying to say , trying to convey...
N for me this was the best poem that u have written till now Clap...
Loved it Heart


yeah dear
I too think so

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Posted: 06 July 2013 at 10:30am | IP Logged
Originally posted by P4rveen12

Amazing, outstanding and very touching poem,

You wrote the poem exceptionally well and each sentence was written beautifully,

Such a sensitive issue and you portrayed it perfectly, 

Loved the poem, hope men read this and realise the cruelty they do upon woman. 

Thanks for the poem xx 


yeah...this is a vry sensitive issue...so that m suffering from ambiguation that I should post it or not.
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Posted: 06 July 2013 at 10:32am | IP Logged
Originally posted by raniluvsasr

Hey thnxx fr d pm,
dis was fantastic. Soo much depth it had,
excellent.


I don't know how much depth it hs...coz I lack vocaz

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