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Posted: 30 June 2013 at 8:53am | IP Logged
Originally posted by sweetsampa39

With An Immobile
Galaxy...

God, where do you bring these thots fm???

Loved each and every word of the poem.Great.


thought lies in every moment,every experience,every turn of life.

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Posted: 30 June 2013 at 9:06am | IP Logged
Originally posted by Fleur_de_Lis

Originally posted by surprising

With An Immobile Galaxy...

An awaiting galaxy so far...
With calm weapons in her heart
The mother path blesses with a river-full of confusion.
Do they know what's dream...what's war?


The land hued with yellow that's cute apparent
Calls for whom?
Here,beneath the azure...PEACE...
But within a moment,it'll get covered by ice-rain...
The grey world of sleepy imagination gets in touch of reality!


Blue tears of Chandragupt Mourya
Gets dirty with the touch of delightful light
Emerald of Ashvathama turns into black-hole...
Dream,life-death,war-field get mingled..
Did Karna ever notice
Unstoppable but immobile galaxy??





a beauty ever hold

the myth is retold

such an endeavour

about a galaxy so far

it is really delighting

and without a doubt interesting

here my reply wraps

will be waiting for your scraps




Ex-biology...a world beyond imagination
Has loads of queries in their path
A tearful weapon makes bloody war
Before that kisses an untouched forehead...

Devastating power turns into honourable creator
That snatches all the essence for ever.
But the eternal power can be destroyed never...
Even for moon-beam+sunlight's favour...




Edited by surprising - 30 June 2013 at 12:25pm

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Posted: 30 June 2013 at 9:15am | IP Logged
Originally posted by surprising

Originally posted by prateekdave7

One more..!!! Thats really great..I loved it..
Loved the title name specially..Sounds beautifull "Immobile Galaxy"..
Loved the concept of two different worlds..One is like a immobile Galaxy,A worlds of dreams..
And second one is real world,seems after awakening..Then chandragupta's line was good...
Ashvathama is immortal,like a deadless person just becoz of a cursed by Lord krishna..
Very well written..

Thanx for PM

Prateek


thanks a ton broStar
actually In-born m a mithology-hist-lover Embarrassed
the tragic heroes snatch my all attention

U'r Welcum dear
Hi 5..Same here..I am also history lover,And just a biggest fond of Mythological epics..
I read Ramayana and geeta both..


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Posted: 30 June 2013 at 11:56am | IP Logged
Originally posted by prateekdave7

Originally posted by surprising

Originally posted by prateekdave7

One more..!!! Thats really great..I loved it..
Loved the title name specially..Sounds beautifull "Immobile Galaxy"..
Loved the concept of two different worlds..One is like a immobile Galaxy,A worlds of dreams..
And second one is real world,seems after awakening..Then chandragupta's line was good...
Ashvathama is immortal,like a deadless person just becoz of a cursed by Lord krishna..
Very well written..

Thanx for PM

Prateek


thanks a ton broStar
actually In-born m a mithology-hist-lover Embarrassed
the tragic heroes snatch my all attention

U'r Welcum dear
Hi 5..Same here..I am also history lover,And just a biggest fond of Mythological epics..
I read Ramayana and geeta both..




hand-shake with uClap
Geeta??? didn't till nowDead
bt Ramayana & Mahabharat is doneSmile

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Posted: 01 July 2013 at 12:49am | IP Logged

With an Immobile Galaxy..!!

Excellent poem...!!

Feelings are very well written..

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Posted: 01 July 2013 at 3:20am | IP Logged
superb poem
amazing pen down of emtions
thanks alot for the pmClapClapClapClapClapClap

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Posted: 01 July 2013 at 3:23am | IP Logged
wow so beautiful !!
brilliant job buddy !!!

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Posted: 01 July 2013 at 4:03am | IP Logged
Wonderful! This was the first word that my heart uttered when I read your poetry. Smile
I too am a lover of poetry and have written a few. Your poems are simply amazing and I loved them all.Clap Thanks for the PM Smile

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