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Posted: 27 May 2013 at 11:06pm | IP Logged
Guys here comes the next part. Enjoy reading and don't forget to provide your valuable comments.Embarrassed

Part 1: http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=3602989

Part 3: http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=3607977

Part 4: http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=3620342

Part 5: http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=3623287

Scene: It is dawn and Amita is sleeping blissfully on the bed. Amit just wakes up from his sleep.

Amit goes near the window and slowing pushes the curtains. The enchanting sun rays stealingly enters their room. He feels the cool breeze on his face and breathes the fresh morning air. Hears chirping of birds and sweet cooing of a koel. The dew-drops on the leaves appears like tiny little pearls. The green valley seems like a beautiful shy bride who has draped herself with a veil of mist. With passing time, the bridegroom (SUN) is slowly removing the bride's veil using his hands (sun rays). Due to her shyness she is unable to gaze directly into her beloved's (SUN) striking eyes. Amit is pleased and delighted to see this tranquil environment and enjoys the chill weather.

Amita is sleeping
blissfully. She looks absolutely lovely in her baby pink night gown. Her face looks very serene and she has a slight smile on her face. He admiringly gazes at her. She has cuddled her pillow like a small child cuddles its dolls. Slowly he removes a strand of hair which was lying on her face. She stirs slightly but doesn't wake up. He is awestruck by her natural beauty and wonders why haven't I noticed this before? Was I so blind because of my ego?

BG: "Chaudahavin ka chaand ho, ya aafataab ho
jo bhi ho tum, khuda ki qasam, laajavaab ho
chaudahavin ka chaand ho
"

 After some time Amita slowly opens her eyes and sees Amit working on his laptop. She checks the time.

Amita: (Eyes are wide open) Dus bujgaye ! Aur aapne muje utaya bhi nahi. Pata nahi baki sab kya soch rahe honge!
Amit: Koi hoga tho sochega na. Sab log Shivji ke mandir gaye hain. Aap jaldise fresh ho jayiye,mein aapkeliye breakfast lata hun.
Amita :  (Nodes and smiles) Accha Amit, kal shyam ko muje aise laga ki mein kuch badbadda rahi thi.(Keeps her hands on her head and tries to recollect) meine kya kaha?
Amit: (Amused) Kuch nahi, aap keh rahi thi muje jaldi se ghar jana hain.
Amita: (Confused) Achaa?? (Nodding) Shayad yehi khaha hoga!
Amit : (Hides his laughter and glances at her sweet expression)

Amit gets breakfast for her and asks her to take rest. The next few hours are uneventful. Afternoon other members of the Shah family return after seeking blessing from their deity.

Kirit : (Facing Amita) Beta ab kaise lag raha hain.
Amita : Papa, ab tik lag raha hain.
Kirit : Dawayi tik se khalena aur Amit jara bhi tang kare tho muje batana. Acche se khabar lunga uski.
Amita : (Looks at Amit , blushes. Smiles and nodes obediently)
Kirit : (Faces Amit)Amit tum jara bhahar avo.
Nani : Amita,beta tumne khana kha liya na?
Amita : Ji Nani.
Nani : Yeh lo prasad. Shivji sab kuch tik kar denge.

Kirit and Amit are in another room and are discussing few matters related to the business.


Kirit : Office se phone aya ki woh naya client kal hi Germany ja raha hain.Aur kal subha hi deal sign karna chatha hain. Agar mein aur Phalguni abhi nikalege tho raat tak pahunch jayenge. Tum log ek-dho din reh ke aaram se aajana.
Amit : (Anxious)Agar etani important meeting hain tho hum sab ek sath hi nikalthein hain.
Kirit : Nahi Amit. Tum bus Amita ka khayal rakho. Mein aur Rohan sambhal lenge .
Amit : (Reluctantly nodes)
Phalguni : (Faces Baa and Nani) Accha nikal rahi hun. (Faces Amit) Amita ka khayal rahkhna.

Kirit and Phalguni leave in their car. At dusk, Nani and Baa have an early dinner.

Nani :  Amita, samdhanji ko davayi khani thi esliye hum dono ne jaldi khana kha liya. Tum bhi jaldise khalo.
Amita: Tik hain nani. (
Anxiously searches for Amit ) Nani aapne Amit ko kahin dekha hain kya?
Nani : Nahi tho.Mobile pe try karke dekhlo.
Amita: (Smiles and nodes)

Eagerly waits for Amit. Amit enters the room like a burglar and he keeps turning his head and peeping behind him. Amita is puzzled and amused.

Amita : Kabse mein aapki raah dekh rahi hun?

To quieten her Amit keeps his fore-finger on her lips. Amita is shocked by this unexpected act .She skips a heartbeat and goes numb. Completely dazed, she raises her eye lashes and meets his eye. Sees mischief and a twinkle in his eyes. They share a long eye lock. They both get lost in each others eyes.

Amit quickly removes his finger, takes a scarf and ties her eyes. She is amused. He takes her to the roof top garden of their farm house and removes the scarf. The whole roof top is decorated with white heart balloons, beautiful lanterns and small tiny lights. She is uncertain whether she is floating in the sky or if the stars from the night sky have descended to their rooftop. In the center, there was a table with dinner and candles. Amita is totally awestruck and astonished. She is unable to differentiate between dream and reality.

Like a thorough gentleman, Amit kneels and gives her a bouquet of red roses.

Amit : Amita , yeh gulab aapke liye.
Amita: (Accepts with a shy smile)
Amit: Mein har uss bathke liye mafi magna chahtha hun jisse aapko chot pahunchi ho! Amita aap hame maff karengi na??? (She sees guilt and regret in his stunning brown eyes)
Amita : (Is touched by this lovely gesture. She gathers her nerves and manages to utter a single word) Yes
Amit : (Hands over a gift to her)
Amita : (Opens it) It is a beautifully carved golden watch. The dial has their wedding photo and diamonds studded in it. (She is totally fascinated )

She doesn't have words to express her delight and joy. They have their dinner. Later Amit gets her favorite ice-cream.

Amita : Aapko yaad tha!
Amit : Yeh baat mein kabhi bool sakta hun kya??
Amita : (Excitedly digs into her ice-cream, then stops and gazes at Amit)
Amit : Koi baat nahi. Aaj khalo. (Gives her a charismatic smile)

Smiles and lowers her eyelids as she is unable hold his gaze any longer. She is delighted and relishes her ice-cream. Amit signals that some ice cream is sticking near her lips/chin. She tries to wipe it but is unable to do it perfectly. Amit offers his help and this time Amita doesn't turn down his offer. She is totally captivated and shyly stares at him. The moment he touches her lips she has butterflies in her stomach and she closes her eyes. Slowly and steadily he wipes the extra ice cream with his thumb. Amita feels if he continues this action for one more moment then she would melt down faster than the ice cream. He is perturbed by the sensation and effect that his touch is making on her. He is equally effected but continuous this action. She freezes and even the moment comes to a standstill.


BG: Mera mann Kehne laga
Paas aake na tu door ja..
Chhoone de Honth tere
Zara saanson mein
Apni basa aa.. a..Embarrassed


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Posted: 28 May 2013 at 12:06am | IP Logged
awww...dat was amazing dear
Loved it to bits

hayee...Amit kitna romantic haiEmbarrassed
kaash ye sab serial mei hota...Day Dreaming

Loved the terrace partHeartHeartHeart
The red roses...the watch...ICECREAM!!!

It was so beautiful 
Totally loved it dear

Tanx for this lovely OSHug


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Posted: 28 May 2013 at 1:42am | IP Logged
"chirping of birds and sweet cooing of a koel. The dew-drops on the leaves appears like tiny little pearls. The green valley seems like a beautiful shy bride who has draped herself with a veil of mist. With passing time, the bridegroom (SUN) is slowly removing the bride's veil using his hands (sun rays). Due to her shyness she is unable to gaze directly into her beloved's (SUN) striking eyes. " so beautiful detailing...Clap

"Slowly and steadily he wipes the extra ice cream with his thumb. Amita feels if he conitues this action for one more moment then she would melt down faster than the ice cream. He is perturbed by the sensation and effect that his touch is making on her."
hyeee... can't wait for this moment to happen in the serial... Day Dreaming

lovely FF... Hug

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Posted: 28 May 2013 at 3:31am | IP Logged
@ emeraldeye...Thanks for yet another mind blowing O.S.I'm mesmerized by your description of nature & the romantic scenes!!Thumbs Up Once again I felt my presence in the plot. Sach kahu...agar main Amita ki jagah hoti to Amit ke chhute hi...melt hoke mar hi jati..Embarrassed. This story made my day.
This song is dedicated to 2 in my admiration of your O.S.

Main Wari Jawan
Main Wari Jawan
Sathhoya Ki Ho Ek Sur Re
Main Wari Jawan
Main Wari Jawan
Dil To Hoya Majboor
Main Wari Jawan..
Main Wari Jawan

Chuliya Tune Lab Se Ankho Ko
Mannate Puri Tumse Hi
Main Bari Jawan

Tu Mile Jahan Mera Jahan Hai Waha
Rounke Sari Tumse Hi

Chuliya Tune Lab Se Ankho Ko
Mannate Puri Tumse Hi
Tumile Jahan Mera Jahan Hai Waha
Rounke Sari Tumse Hi.
Piya O Re Piya...
Piya Re Piya Re Piya..
Piya O Re Piya...
Piya Re Piya Re Piya..
In Duriyo Ne Nazdiki Yose
Sauda Koi Kar Liya
Ho..O..O
Chupke Nigahone Dil Se Isk Ki Ka
Wada Koi Kar Liya.
Main Vari Jawan
Main Vari Jawan
Satho Ki Hoya Ek Sur Re
Sau Sau Tarose Bhar Ke Ye Daman
Le Chal Mujhe Kahi Dur..

Piya O Re Piya...
Piya Re Piya Re Piya..
Piya O Re Piya...
Piya Re Piya Re Piya..

Koi Kami si Thi Jeene Mein
Jana Yeh Humne Kahan
Aise Mile ho Jaise Humpe
Ho Mehereban Yeh khuda

Main Wari Jawan
Main Wari Jawan
Sathhoya Ki Ho ya Sur Re

Rab Di Marzi hai Apna yeh Milna
Barsa hai Hum pe Uska Noor

Piya O Re Piya...
Piya Re Piya Re Piya..

Piya O Re Piya...
Piya Re Piya Re Piya.. Smile



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Originally posted by arnie...

awww...dat was amazing dear
Loved it to bits

hayee...Amit kitna romantic haiEmbarrassed
kaash ye sab serial mei hota...Day Dreaming

Loved the terrace partHeartHeartHeart
The red roses...the watch...ICECREAM!!!

It was so beautiful 
Totally loved it dear

Tanx for this lovely OSHug

Arnie dear, You are most welcome. HugI'm glad you like it. Yeh sab scene hamre AKA mein bhi jarur ayenge ! Woh sorry wala scene kitna passionate tha! Day Dreaming Embarrassed

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Posted: 28 May 2013 at 6:25am | IP Logged
Originally posted by grintson

"chirping of birds and sweet cooing of a koel. The dew-drops on the leaves appears like tiny little pearls. The green valley seems like a beautiful shy bride who has draped herself with a veil of mist. With passing time, the bridegroom (SUN) is slowly removing the bride's veil using his hands (sun rays). Due to her shyness she is unable to gaze directly into her beloved's (SUN) striking eyes. " so beautiful detailing...Clap

"Slowly and steadily he wipes the extra ice cream with his thumb. Amita feels if he conitues this action for one more moment then she would melt down faster than the ice cream. He is perturbed by the sensation and effect that his touch is making on her."
hyeee... can't wait for this moment to happen in the serial... Day Dreaming

lovely FF... Hug
Thanks Aman dear.Hug Embarrassed

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Originally posted by lily.lotus.rosy

@ emeraldeye...Thanks for yet another mind blowing O.S.I'm mesmerized by your description of nature & the romantic scenes!!Thumbs Up Once again I felt my presence in the plot. Sach kahu...agar main Amita ki jagah hoti to Amit ke chhute hi...melt hoke mar hi jati..EmbarrassedLOLNahi !!!! Aise mat karna !!! ShockedThen who would post all those cute off-screen A2 moments ???? And who would give us CV type wale ideas ???? Tongue

This story made my day.
This song is dedicated to 2 in my admiration of your O.S. Awww... I'm honored by seeing your gentle gesture!!! Thankzzz dear!Embarrassed

Main Wari Jawan
Main Wari Jawan
Sathhoya Ki Ho Ek Sur Re
Main Wari Jawan
Main Wari Jawan
Dil To Hoya Majboor
Main Wari Jawan..
Main Wari Jawan

Chuliya Tune Lab Se Ankho Ko
Mannate Puri Tumse Hi
Main Bari Jawan

Tu Mile Jahan Mera Jahan Hai Waha
Rounke Sari Tumse Hi

Chuliya Tune Lab Se Ankho Ko
Mannate Puri Tumse Hi
Tumile Jahan Mera Jahan Hai Waha
Rounke Sari Tumse Hi.
Piya O Re Piya...
Piya Re Piya Re Piya..
Piya O Re Piya...
Piya Re Piya Re Piya..
In Duriyo Ne Nazdiki Yose
Sauda Koi Kar Liya
Ho..O..O
Chupke Nigahone Dil Se Isk Ki Ka
Wada Koi Kar Liya.
Main Vari Jawan
Main Vari Jawan
Satho Ki Hoya Ek Sur Re
Sau Sau Tarose Bhar Ke Ye Daman
Le Chal Mujhe Kahi Dur..

Piya O Re Piya...
Piya Re Piya Re Piya..
Piya O Re Piya...
Piya Re Piya Re Piya..

Koi Kami si Thi Jeene Mein
Jana Yeh Humne Kahan
Aise Mile ho Jaise Humpe
Ho Mehereban Yeh khuda

Main Wari Jawan
Main Wari Jawan
Sathhoya Ki Ho ya Sur Re

Rab Di Marzi hai Apna yeh Milna
Barsa hai Hum pe Uska Noor

Piya O Re Piya...
Piya Re Piya Re Piya..

Piya O Re Piya...
Piya Re Piya Re Piya.. Smile

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Edited by emeraldeye - 28 May 2013 at 6:53am

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awww totally lovedd it Smile superbbb Thumbs Up a thumbs up from me tooo ur awesum writing...cvs sould see thiss...
its just  outstandingHeart

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