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ArHi Tales:Dhadkanein *Thread One* (Page 124)

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Posted: 19 April 2013 at 7:55am | IP Logged

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A beautiful and touching story of two lonely souls finding love and true companionship! Arnav's and Khushi's meeting and conversations reminded me of Erich Segal's 'Love Story'!

In two places you mention Cambridge, instead of Harvard... could that possibly be an error or is there a Cambridge in USA too, given their penchant for appropriating names of places in England?

Loved the very beginning of your story giving us a glimpse of how content Khushi was with her life and its simple joys till, that is, she was smitten by ASR... the glimpse into the world of ice hockey was nice... made me nostalgic about all the ice hockey I used to watch as a kid... though I prefer the grace and elegance of the Russians in the late1970s to the rough body tackles and slams of the Americans today!

Khushi's infatuation with and dreams of Arnav and her attempts to cure herself of it by giving herself a strong talking to are all endearing! She drooling over a bare-chested Arnav and he feeling her presence was cute... so, looks like their sixth sense is in full working order... am pleased with the character of Arnav here: studious, focused on his passion for ice hockey, aware of the fascination he holds for the female population at Harvard yet indifferent to it all... being chivalrous, and indifferent to his wealth and family name are a bonus!

...her face shining with unadulterated joy. He felt his breath catch in his throat. He couldn't remember looking or feeling that happy ever. She positively glowed with suppressed excitement... a beautiful description of what it is about khushi that drew him to her! Must say your descriptions are masterly' The leaves had just begun to turn and the air had had a slight nip in it. The sky had become an unbearably bright blue and everything had smelt like apple cider and pumpkin and harvest. I felt as if I were looking at a picture postcard, one with the scent permeating it. [if such cards are available, that is]. Also, it's almost as if the scene is being played out before one's eyes: A girl stood talking to another one who had her back to him, laughing merrily at something. Arnav had never seen anyone laugh with such abandon and joy. The late afternoon sun glinted on the smooth waves of her nut-brown hair and on her long lashes which hid sparkling hazel eyes. The creamy skin of her cheeks were flushed and a beautiful natural pink. The striking red jumper she wore lent a warm glow to her entire presence. Somehow, the sight of that uninhibited, joyful laughter had given him a strange sense of peace and had been imprinted in his mind. One gets the feeling that Arnav's life is so regimented and bound by his family's expectations that he hasn't had much fun in life and the only joy and peace he's experienced is on the ice or on hearing Khushi laughing with such abandon. Her uninhibited joy is infectious, no wonder Arnav wants to bask in its warmth!

Your twist to the whole anklet adorning episode in IPKKND is awesome, especially the latent feelings and desire lurking just below the surface! Am a fan of the asides that you pepper your stories with' they are infused with wit an humor and give us an inkling of what's going on in the person's mind! That's it. He is a mind-reader. NO NO NO! That means he knows all about my not-so-appropriate-thoughts in his direction! RED ALERT! RED ALERT! HE'S NOTICED ME AT HIS GAMES! WAIT WHAT? HE'S NOTICED ME AT HIS GAMES! 'Kill me now. That was the WORST justification EVER. Come on Khushi. This was the best you could do? Harvard is going to expel you and then you'll be deported. That's it. It's all his cologne's fault. I should have recognized the trouble he spells from a mile away. Sanka Devi is back with a bang!

Arnav's unholy glee and smug satisfaction at the thought that Khushi has a crush on him, then setting out to fluster her further into a confession, juxtaposed against her attempts at backpedalling, is heart-warming! They were moving together in a beautiful symphony as she stepped forward and he stepped backward at the same time' a premonition of things to come? One thing I noticed in the show was that whenever Khushi was in Arnav's arms, her eyes would immediately zoom in on his lips, and that's what happens here too, yippee! The gentleness and the innocence that permeates their first kiss make one go awww! Nice to see Khushi not holding anything back and being an active participant in that scorching kiss, to the extent that she manages to surprise the more experienced Arnav' the manner in which they cleared things up between them is damn cute

In a nutshell, a beautifully moving story that leaves us with a wide smile on our faces!



Edited by Maddy1270 - 19 April 2013 at 7:57am

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Posted: 19 April 2013 at 7:56am | IP Logged
nice twist... loved the role reversal... too good..

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Posted: 19 April 2013 at 8:02am | IP Logged
A role reversal of "sorts"? This was a personality swap, and I enjoyed it so much. He is a glutton and she's the diabetic. He wants happily ever afters and she doesn't believe in marriage.He likes the little things in life, she's too busy on her phone to see the sun .  I  love the rain hug, both in the show, nd in this story. Just love it. Obviously, your Arnav is much nicer, since he isn't being  a prick. And I really thought that in the show, at  that moment , Arnav looked like he wanted to kiss her, and she just looked very confused and shocked, co she couldn't understand what was happening to her. Oh Aman pulled a Khushi , hahaa. Sugar grains in her fuel tank. Waiting for Semanti now!

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Posted: 19 April 2013 at 8:06am | IP Logged
OMG, it was an awesome update, starting from teh rain, her broken car, him giving the lift, instead of the GET OUT's, a novel change, him trying to make the conversation, and she giving in only straight answers, so much interchange of characters, he being always want to catch a glimpse of her, she being diabetic, well the possessiveness there, bravo..., he wanted to find out more about her and not the other way round, and all the feelings that he goes thru when he drops her off at the airport were amazing..., I would have never guessed Cherry Blossom, and now thanks for reminding me of my allergies, Smile , claritin time..., She runs away from him knowing who he is, and comes back as even she wants to be herself.

Anjali dear no need to tell Khushi who he is, she is a stock broker, she knows more about Arnav's assets than you would, I liked the part where the couple played the cupid and put sugar crystals, i could not help but LOL. 

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Posted: 19 April 2013 at 8:09am | IP Logged

Absolutely loved it, the role reversal of  their personalities, situations and the setting of the FF, They hardly knew each other not even their names but yet felt something so strong.. We did not even know their names and you could have easily misled us, but one could just sense who the characters were...

Ever faithfully Aman as Arnav's BIL was adorable. So when Khushi saw the picture in his wallet she realized who he was and that Anajli was the owner of the winery where her sister had just got married! All the scenes from the show were blended in meticulously, along with dialogues given new perspective ..I did not miss the other characters from the show...and no cliffhangers... you rock...

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Posted: 19 April 2013 at 8:17am | IP Logged
amazin...jus wow...

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Posted: 19 April 2013 at 8:21am | IP Logged
this was so awesome and undoubtedly beautiful juhi...Big smile the writing was serene...simply awesome...Smile

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Posted: 19 April 2013 at 8:25am | IP Logged
Great tale!!!  Loved the role reversal, I enjoyed a strong and well educated Khushi.
 
The car ride, the rain, the connection between them, the chemistry...uff   You just know how to paint the perfect picture Juhi!
 
I loved imagining Arnav as a painter, that seems like something he would do, since he likes solitude, silence and is a deep thinker. 
 
Great twist of how he had a loving family environment and she was from a broken home.
 
The last line when they finally exchange there names and he says "Not for long" just gave me goose bumps!
 
Thank you for starting this Juhi and Semanti!  You have kept the soul of IPK alive and kicking.


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