amazing update...asad scared the hell off me, i thought he is gonna kill him...u wrote this part really
well...cont soon nd thnx fr the pm!!!!
Originally posted by: Gurmeet4Drashti
Hey ...
That was mindblowing ...Omg Zoya had an obsessive lover who was stalking her for three years ... :ON even Tannu was damn annoying ... :|She was acting so cheap ...Lol ... Asad didn't even pay attention to her ... :-PFarhaan was disgusting and he literally creeped me out >.<Aha !!! Asad is right there for Zoya !!!He would have actually killed Farhaan if Zoya wouldn't have been there ... :|And yes, I just loved the Zoya is cuddling Asad ;)Asad is just tooo sweet !!!P.S ... I think the guy is none other than Armaan !! :-P
Originally posted by: ..-AsYa-..
Now Asad scared me like hell in this part.One moment I though he is gonna go to jail after killing Farhaan,so there is gonna be AsYa love-track in 'jail'.😆 Asad's reaction in his room one no less than an obsessive passionate lover,but in a good way.Loved how AsYa supported each other.❤️
Ab firse kaun aa gaya?😆 So many guys are after Miss Newyork Hoity-Toity.😆This happens when you are as beautiful as Zoe.😉 Hope the new guy is just a friend.
It was better than my expectation.🤗 Continue soon.👏
Originally posted by: Laila2009
Just read chapter 3 - amazing writing - very romantic. Perhaps one of the best romantic chapters I have read on the forum.
Just touched on Chapter 4 and 5. Advise. Don't make Asad weak; it is important in any romance to keep the male lead strong. If you make him too passive and rona dona, you can kill your story. 😉 Core formula for all romances - do not make the hero so weak in comparison to the female lead - he doesn't have to super strong but his character must be. If he is indecisive, feeble-minded, overly possessive and jealous - you weaken him.
Originally posted by: Rarepearl
oh this chapter was the best. I loved it. i'm glad Asad reached on time to help Zoe. I knew Asad would behave dat way only after seeing his life in danger. he was bound to react like dat. it was so sweet of Zoe to pretend all ok in front of Asad, although she was hurt & broken from within. her screams & cries in her room made me shiver widpain. I cud feel wat the poor soul was going through. I just hope dat idiot of a man dosnt reappear again. n I guess its Ayaan who's come to Khan house, who Zoe has mistaken for dat jerk.
do cont soon sweety.love,Nimra.
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