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Omoraboti IF-Sizzlerz

Joined: 09 February 2012
Posts: 10207

Posted: 12 May 2013 at 5:14am | IP Logged
Did you really have to start the update with him getting his clothes from the wardrobe? LOL


And then again you have to tell us how the white cotton shirt looks on him? Evil woman! And the low hanging, faded, ripped jeans .. I think you know which image crossed mind! Source of inspiration, huh? LOL And then you have to write .. Untamed. *dead* The next paragraph hardly made any sense during the first read and I had to re-read after smacking my head. LOL


Really loved the small touches you added – Arnav wanting to make Khushi a cup of coffee. That small "hands up" and "mouth zipping" gesture of Arnav. Khushi's backward count to control her anger. Arnav Singh Raizada walking barefoot .. does that tell me something? Yes. Great touch, sweety. You know how much I love you knack for detailing. It does not only make it a good read with visuals but also tells us a lot about the state of mind of the character.


This chapter was like a turning point in this story. And it was all about how the tables have turned. Khushi wants to take a cold shower. He debates where to sit. She starts the conversation while he is sort of scared how to face it. He reacts to her words half-hearing her and she is the one demanding "Let me finish".


I loved how open Khushi was about her entire thought process, starting from her reaction at the news. And you brilliantly penned down the transition of her thoughts – she will not jeopardize her marriage; neither will she jeopardize her dream.


Arnav explained his thoughts clearly too but for me it all came down to, "I would never, ever, risk damaging our relationship for anything, and that includes business." That was it.


So they are up for a challenge outside their bedroom. And they are determined to not let it affect their marriage. The road is not going to be easy. Both are stubborn. Both have temper issues. Both wants to win. And then again .. both love the other bit too much. It would be a treat to see how things turn out.


Brilliant chapter! Starting with biology class to break the ice .. leading to a poignant conversation of business & relationship .. ending up in the couch with a man undressing himself. If you still have any doubt, darling, let me assure you, Masterclass rocks.


In the whole chapter my favorite dialogue was Arnav's "I missed you Baby". Even if you have not explained, I would have known what he meant. Smile


After their marriage, when you said this story is far from over, I wondered what you were planning. I have read a handful of FFs and hardly any managed to keep the pace of the story after their marriage and all that was there were negative roles, nasty twists, past linkups or accidents. You have no idea how happy I am to realize what you have in your mind. I am so looking forward to see them on the table. Big smile Bring it on, lady!


PS: Thanks for using the banner! Hug The other one is my personal favorite Wink .. But after reading this update, this one seems rather apt!


PPS: Indecent. You are using that word a lot lately. What's up? Wink

Edited by Omoraboti - 13 May 2013 at 6:43am

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ranogill IF-Sizzlerz

Joined: 12 September 2012
Posts: 18221

Posted: 12 May 2013 at 5:19am | IP Logged
hi naina...once again you proved that you are a master of taking our class...and i fell in love with khushi and arnav again...their decision to keep their  work problem at work is the best one and increased our interest how they go about their boardroom fight and keep their bedroom fight hot ...loved it 

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Kritianya IF-Dazzler

Joined: 14 October 2010
Posts: 3967

Posted: 12 May 2013 at 5:30am | IP Logged
nice part
hope ki arnav & khushi keep the business deal out of their relationship
but for how long???
cont soon

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Posts: 5341

Posted: 12 May 2013 at 5:30am | IP Logged

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shubhi15 IF-Dazzler

Joined: 18 September 2012
Posts: 3992

Posted: 12 May 2013 at 5:36am | IP Logged
Awesome update...
Loved their wonderful conversation...

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OmNaMaSteOm IF-Sizzlerz

Joined: 09 April 2005
Posts: 21008

Posted: 12 May 2013 at 5:40am | IP Logged
Why again a war between ArHi. What is the guarantee that marriage will not be affected ?

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sanjanaseth1994 Goldie

Joined: 28 March 2013
Posts: 1775

Posted: 12 May 2013 at 5:41am | IP Logged
very nice chapter... loved it!!!!
it was amazing dear... please do continue soon!!! Smile

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Nkayani Goldie

Joined: 21 June 2012
Posts: 1820

Posted: 12 May 2013 at 5:43am | IP Logged
Nice update.
Cant wait for mr raizada vs mrs raizada now that will be fun. Wonder who will bag the deal.
Loved the end part that was soo hot. Loved how arnav noticed kushi needed him in that way. He knows her so well.
Cant wait for the next part

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