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'A Dare!'---- An AsYa OS. (Page 3)

Enchantress IF-Dazzler

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Posted: 31 March 2013 at 10:04am | IP Logged
Hey dear, 

Such a sweet OS. Amazing. I love najma for the dare she gave her. I m just loving the entire confession and the entire OS. Not to forget Zoya's shyari was superb too. 

So, you'll not update the SS tomorrow . Its okay , I do understand and off course this OS compensated it and I loved to the fullest but still don't be that late. Hope to see you soon.


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enrique IF-Rockerz

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Posted: 31 March 2013 at 10:05am | IP Logged
Awww it was brilliant

Love najma

Beautiful os

Simply cute wala .

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Eternal1234 Goldie

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Posted: 31 March 2013 at 10:06am | IP Logged
This was awesome loved it!!!!!

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_Sadaf_ Senior Member

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Posted: 31 March 2013 at 10:07am | IP Logged
Originally posted by Laila2009

Excellent first attempt. Totally well done! You have beautiful comic timing in this OS. It's hard to believe this is your first one. Here are some of the strengths in this OS:

Grammar, descriptive writing, sentence structure - all of these were bang on and made the whole story easy to read and follow...

No unnecessary background information; again made it fast, great to read, and not a drag.

Wonderful friendship shown between Najma and Zoya. That she shared her feelings with Najma who embraced her - all added an endearing and touching quality to the comedy. 

Asad and Zoya's conversation and his comment "this is not a dare" were sweet. I would have had him actually kiss her on the lips and then say something to her beyond the peck on the cheek...she might have got it but his silence and is not saying anything beyond getting her a pizza left me a bit unsatisfied as a reader; I wanted a passionate kiss with - and this is not a dare...and then a wink...and then Zoya's reaction that he indeed felt for her.  

The sharyai was a wonderful closing element. 

Overall, this is one of the better OS I have read; you should write more...and you can even do a second part to this one...where Zoya and Asad decide to pull a prank on Najma for having dared herWink

Thank you so much and I thought to make him kiss on her lips but that would be too fast according to the story so yea..
And I loved it how you mentioned everything about the OS. Thanks for all the appreciation...
I didn't think about the 2nd chapter of this one. If I do then I'll consider your idea of playing a prank on Najma and also I'll consider your other wish that is AsYa kiss, I'll show that too :) Thanks again for your long review... Made me feel nice... Thanks a lot.
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Posted: 31 March 2013 at 10:09am | IP Logged

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havokhotline Goldie

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Posted: 31 March 2013 at 10:09am | IP Logged

This is the cutest AsYa OS in the universe! :D I loved the entire concept and all. :)

Wonderful! Please write more. :D

And the fact that this is your first writing attempt is unbelievable because this is so professionally written.

Great job!

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Prizi IF-Sizzlerz

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Posted: 31 March 2013 at 10:10am | IP Logged
Loved it...

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mahimarewari Newbie

Joined: 11 May 2011
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Posted: 31 March 2013 at 10:10am | IP Logged
Good one Khan... Loved it sachi... Everything was perfect...
Wink ClapHug

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