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Posted: 24 March 2013 at 5:04pm | IP Logged

Strong

 

Every night, I hear her crying and I pretend it's from outside.

Sharp, painful sobs make their way from her room into mine and I press my ear closer to my pillow, telling myself that it is my neighbour, locked out of her home again in the middle of the night.

She doesn't need my help, she says. She is strong.

 

* * *

 

He returns, many, many years later and it is as if all her tears are suddenly forgotten.

What mistakes, they ask.

He is your father. He gave you life.

 

* * *

 

He leaves again, of course he does and suddenly, they all disappear.

I don't offer her help this time.

She is strong. She said so herself.

 

* * *

 

I meet a man and he makes me so happy that I hate him. And so I find his weaknesses, the darkness within him that he shows to no one but me and I drive it into his heart until he hates me too.

Finally, I feel safe.

I am strong.

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Posted: 24 March 2013 at 7:13pm | IP Logged
wow what a story.
this is soo short but I still like it
the last paragraph really tells how her father's leaving affected her life..she too turned vicious
keep writing; this is simply beautiful

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Posted: 25 March 2013 at 3:43pm | IP Logged
Thank you! I'm glad you liked it.

Yes, I suppose she is quite vicious in the last paragraph. It's a dangerous form of self-preservation.

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Posted: 26 March 2013 at 10:36am | IP Logged
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I feel for her...
 
What you sow, so shall you reap...
 
so apt here..
 
Fantastic Zarin...

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Posted: 26 March 2013 at 2:55pm | IP Logged
Thank you Avi! :)

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Posted: 27 March 2013 at 6:42am | IP Logged
Felt really bad for the girl and the effect her father's flight had on her. Even bitter is the truth that though the man wronged his wife and daughter by leaving them alone, he was welcomed back with open arms which adversely affected the girl and her outlook towards life...

Really well-written Zarin! Smile

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Posted: 27 March 2013 at 2:29pm | IP Logged
Thank you, Mariam!

Yes, it's a sad truth that there are some people who consider a home with a man - any type of man, no matter how terrible he is, no matter how he treats his family - better than a home with no man at all.

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Posted: 30 March 2013 at 6:50pm | IP Logged
very well written!! Too deep!! I loved it !!

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