If there is anything worth praising here,that is deffo the way you write.
I mean woah,so nicely expressed,i could actually imagine it in a pictorial way infront of me.
Well done Amiii, read something by you after so long.
I liked the way you kept the talks a bit formal,not spilling the beans in the first few updates,that is exactly what glues the reader till the end.
I am eagerly waiting for you to go further with this story.