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Posted: 30 March 2013 at 9:47am | IP Logged
very interesting.. sorry could not comment on part 5  but this is getting better with every chapter, well done.
Thanks for sending the PM

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Posted: 30 March 2013 at 10:26am | IP Logged
interesting and nice,
sorry couldn't comment before but i do read it Thumbs Up

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wow its getting damn exciting!!! please update soon.. you write brilliantly!!! Big smileThumbs Up thanks for the PM! Smile

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Ohh, waiting to know abt the kidnappers- seems interesting!! Cont sooon!!!

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Grt job

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i found this ss now and read all the part,
loved how kiran and all the family members accept prithvi...

ptithvi will definitly find a way to save both of them

please pm me when you update...

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Hello ji !! LOL
I am back!!! 
Since I took a lot of time to update( Kya karoon, too busy and very less free timeTongue)
My dear readers,
here is chapter 7 and bonus chapter 8. Big smile 


Realisations and Retaliations
Chapter 7

Sudha walked back to the living room of haveli, Prabha with her. Keeping the bowl containing curd on a nearby charpoy, sudha engaged in a conversation with Prabha.
Kalki walked iin.

"Ah, Look who's here!," kalki sneered.
Prabha turned and Sudha stood up. Walking past Prabha, she stopped in front of Kalki.

"You wanted to say something to me?" asked Sudha with a stern face.

"Ohhh, why are you back? After so many years? You are not needed here. Live your life alone. Go"

"Kalki, you have no right to question my decisions and the reasons behind my decisions," Sudha said in a domineering tone.

"How dare you! First you leave your husband for God knows so many years and then suddenly return and ask for your rights!?" Kalki said,  her voice rising.

Sudha could no longer control her anger. Her rising anger took over her mind and she blurted out something which caused much problem.

"First take care of your husband and then talk about others!" Sudha blurted out loudly.

Prabha's eyes grew wide as she heard what Sudha had said, realising the complexity of the situation. She qiuckly rushed to Kalki and held her. Kalki was shaking uncontrollably.
"No, Sudhaji, you should not have said that" said Prabha.

Sudha knew Kalki's husband was deranged, but she didn't know the real fact, for she was back in barahgaon after so many years. That he was no more.

Kalki was over ridden by emotions and anger. Her eyes were wet and tears threatened to flow anytime.

"DON'T YOU SAY ANYTHING ABOUT MY HUSBAND. HE IS ALIVE. HE IS!"
Kalki shouted, being hysterical and angry. 

Tears flowing uncontrollably, she stormed out of the room, muttering.
Sudha's eyes were wide with shock.

"WHAT DOES SHE THINK SHE IS?!"
"Jiji, please calm down. You don't know some facts," said Prabha who was doing her every bit to calm down Sudha.

After sometime, Prabha explained to her jiji that Kalki's husband was no more. He had been deranged, no doubt, doing all sorts of dangerous things. And that insanity had drowned him in the river. He was now no more.  But, Kalki was still adamant and was not ready to accept the fact. She still thought he was alive.

Sudha was now very much shockd about these happenings. She was back in Barahgaon nearly after twenty years. There was no way she could know this. 

Now she felt bad at Kalki's condition. She must have endured a lot.

xXx

Meera was now fully aware of the impending danger her family was facing. She had just realised and known the biggest truth.

Lakhan.

She had no clue that lskhan was so close to prithvi's mother. She needed to tell Prithvi everything, But how? She had no answer.

Just then, she remembered something. Something very important. She still had her mobile phone. A feeling of fear and excitment surged through her.

She was wearing a yellow kurti paired with blue jeans. She had the habit of keeping her mobile in her pocket. It was on silent mode. 

Kidnapped she was, no doubt, but these amateur kidnappers had just taken 

away her purse. She still had a chance. A flickering hope.

xXx

(Flashback)

Over scenic verdant trees, the birds chirped happily. In the idyllic village named Barahgaon, a girl, probably in her early twenties, was busy putting up wet clothes to dry in the courtyard of her small yet cosy house.

She had been living alone for the past seven years as she had lost her parents to an  disease unidentifiable at that time. She was now accustomed to living to living alone and earning her living by working as a house help in the haveli.

Pramila was still bust putting up clothes when she heard a familiar voice called out to her.
She turned to see a boy, barely twelve years old, grinning at her. She smiled.
"Good morning , didi," the boy said, with a big smile.
She walked over to him and ruffled his hair.
"Ah, Lakhu. Don't you have school today?"

"Ofcourse I do, didi. I came to meet you before going to school!"
Pramila smiled.
"You know what didi, we are going to attack chintu's shop today," said lakhan, a mischievious grin forming.
"Not again!"

He laughed. She smiled. She really like this boy.He was the kind of brother she never had. She had someone to talk to, have fun with, share talks. He felt the same.

"Chalo Lakhu, you are getting late for school"
"Yeah didi. I'll have to run. I will be here after school. Keep some parathas ready," saying he grinned.

(flashback ends)



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Realisations and retaliations
Chapter 8

It was still early in the morning. Lakhan had escaped to his favourite destination after bidding goodbye to his older brother. He took comfort in sitting on a rock nearby, overlooking a valley. He loved this place.

He didn't understand why, but he was really feeling alone today. He was really missing her. 

(flashback)

It was an early sunday morning and it was some time before sun would cast its rays upon the mighty earth. Lakhan had taken refuge at his didi's house. He was afraid that he might get a severe punishment from his bhabhis due his mischiefs. His sound sleep was disturbed by the constant tugging. Pramila was trying to wake up the boy, but in vain. After a tedious effort, she succeeded.
"Good  morning, Lakhu! Wake up now."
Lakhan yawned and turned.
"Five more minu..."
"Lakhan"
She again called his name, a bit sternly. Lakhan was wide awake.
"Ah, good. Now get ready. We should get going." smiling she said.
Lakhan asked sleepily, "Its not even light yet, didi. Where are we going?" 
"Oh, come on, lazzzy boy. I have a surprise for you"
The word 'surprise' made him feel excited. It was a wonderful moment for him to get something from his favourite sister. Without wasting a second he got ready.
"Didi, lets go!"

After walking some distance, they turned towards a narrow dust road. Lakhan was curious as to where they were heading to before sunrise. He kept asking her questions and every time she told him to have patience. After cutting through a steep path with dense foliage of trees, Pramila announce they were there. All lakhu could see was darkness. The sky had now started changing its colors and was a shade of deep blue. The sun was coming up.

Pramila rushed him to some distance towards a clearing.A smile on her face, she kept silent and let Lakhan take up the beauty of nature. Lakhan's eyes were wide with surprise. He couldn't believe a scene like that could be witnesssed in Barahgaon.

He was standing at the edge of a cliff. A steep valley covered by all the shades of green he could imagine. It was sunrise. He could see the youthful ball of fire coming up behind the mountains and throwing golden rays over the clouds painting the sky amber. At the very bottom of valley, he saw something glittering. A river probably. 



This is how this place became Lakhan's favourite. He admitted to coming to this place often with didi. Or whenever he felt lonely. 

Lakhan had a neglected childhood. His parents were long gone and his older brothers were too busy taking care of their own families than look at him. There were seldom times he would openly talk to anyone in the house. His brothers never had the time to listen to his adventures and achievements. This made him quite agresssive and inconsiderate towards others. 

There was only one person whom lakhan knew. Who would help him, understand him and praise him.

<flashback>

"Didi, I am back!" he shouted.
Pramila came rushing out of the house to find the cause of his shouting, finding none.

"There was no need for you to shout, lakhu" she said smiling and continued "Go, wash your hands first. I made your favourite parathas"
Parathas and that too made by his didi made him jump with joy.
"YES! Here I go and here I come!" lakhan said grinning, ready to attack on his favourite dish.


He had been so happy when he had learned that her didi was getting married to a 'sheher wala' ,a city guy, but he also felt sad that her didi would no longer stay with him. He was just twelve years old to understand anything else. He didn't know what fate had decided for his beloved didi.
She got married to the said city guy. What concerned lakhan was that he could not be seen in the village after marriage, nor did didi go with him as she was pregnant.

That day came. Lakhan remembered that fateful day. He cursed himself.

(flashback)

Pramila had given birth to a cute baby boy. When ever lakhan came to meet her, she would be playing, cradling or feeding her little baby.
Lakhan's circimstances and surroundings had made him quite possessive of her and it made him jealous that so much attention was given to the baby. One day, it all came out finally.
Lakhan had come to meet her and much to his dismay, she was playing with her baby. Watching this made him angry and he shouted.

"YOU DON'T LIKE ME ANYMORE, DIDI!"

Pramila realised what lakhan was going through.
"No Lakhan. What are you saying. You are my sweetest, Lakhu!"
Her efforts to calm Lakhan went vain.
"No you don't. Ever since Prithvi came, you love him more." said lakhan, on the verge of crying, his voice quivering.
She looked at him in shock. What made him think like that? she thought.
Lakhan went on.
"You always play with him. You have no time for me!" lakhan completed, crying.
Pramila just stood there, dumbstruck. Before she could say anything, he ran away.

She had no idea how she was supposed to make Lakhan understand. A tear escaped her eye.


Lakhan looked over the mountains, remembering her.
On that same day, in the evening, when he came back home to find a large crowd. His brother, Ramdhari, with utter sadness had told him the very thing he never wanted to hear. Her didi was no more.

He had asked questions, and he had been answered with livid theories. Something like, she was suffering from an infection and complications due to childbirth. He never understood the real reason behind her death. No one in the village had talked about that day afterwards.

He was sad, when he had remembered how he had talked with his didi that  morning. He felt guilty. He had started blaming himself.

But as time elapsed, he got used to his life, and forgot everything.

All the memories, which had been buried deep in the dark niches of his mind, surfaced. A sense of guilt filled him.

Just when he was about to get going, his phone beeped.

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How was it?? Smile


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