ASHA in danger!!!!!(new story @page 34) (Page 3)

aapi agar aap otne sweet ho to mein bhi to sweet hungi naa after all aapki sis hun
Btw did u c d pics i posted in poo disscussion corner

Edited by poorvisinghcd - 21 February 2013 at 6:37am

Hey Poorvi ( Hope I can call you so)

I read your THE HAUNTED FORT story

You have done a

I just want to tell you that please don't post stories in a hurry without checking yaar because I felt lot of mistakes in typing
Want to also tell you dear don't use light bright colour for text it hurts the eyes to read yaar.

For the story it was nice... Woh Winnie the pooh idea
tumhein kaha seh mila mujhey pata hain
I loved villain calling Bachaa
I know even about that idea too

I am confused ki waha 323 log mare theh ki 32?
tumney alag number dia hain

The story plot was quite interesting to the middle
I wish it was more long
just to hold it a suspense

If possible please increase font size

ya phir keep some space yaar

padhney mein kaafi takleef huveeh

Just want to tell you :


for the next coming stories
Thumbs up for ur story + best of luck

Edited by DreamyDeepz28 - 21 February 2013 at 8:30am

aww di soo sweet

call me whtever u like i.e poo, puru, poorvi, srishti srish, pooo or whetever yaar, lol
hmmm u are rite yaar, i did make many mistakes, i corrected a few of them, but then i don't know i was struck by laziness, sorry di i will immediatly edit it and make the corrections, hope u liked my other threee stories as well

winnie the pooh n bachaa wala idea mujhe kahan se mila sab log jante hai
I wish GD reads the story i want to see what she has to say after reading that lol
the bright colour thing even vis di told me
i used a little less brighter colours but if it is still hurting the eyes i will not use the colours, i just use the colours as it attracts peoples attention to it, but if it is hurting the eyes i won't

and i will make the necessary changes n yes everyone told me to write longer stories with more suspense and i will definatly do that for my 5 story pakka

n yes i will definatly increase the font as well as the space

i apologise for those mistakes

btw di what u posted was ur honest opinion thank u sooo much for dat, many people don't do that, one of them later told me that they feel ki i will get upset or angry so one thing i want to clear ki i will not at all get upset yaar, instead i want to know about mistakes so that i don't repeat them again

thanks soo much deepz di n i just love those cute animations yaar, sirf ek winnie the pooh missing he
just kidding thanks again di n i hope u read m next story as well

and i promise it will be more better


Edited by poorvisinghcd - 22 February 2013 at 3:30am

congrax senior member poo.. for award and this THREAD...
Ur stories are awoesome...
sorry I m late here

thanks di
don't worry u not late
there are many who have not even seen this thread

thank u soo much GD
i have been really clumsy this time yaar, everyone has told me about that fort part, wait i will edit the story
i am glad u liked everything else
actually was feeling very lazy towards the end
and
NO MEN EXCEPT THE DCP BECAUSE I WANT TO DO SOMETHING DIFFERENT
EVERYONE WRITE STORIES MAINLY ON THE DUO AND ACP
SO THE GALS ARE COMPLETLY DIFFERENT
AND MAYBE THEIR IMPORTANCE MIGHT INCREASE