Lakshman's Rekha- An OS- updates on pg 3 & 4 - Page 3

Posted: 11 years ago
wow varali thanks for posting the OS here.this is a awesome storyπŸ‘...wow loved the equation between the two😳..i can feel the spark between the two ..to start with i loved how lakshmana unleashed his anger and realized his rude behaviour next moment...😳 her tears moved him inside...wow he apologized to her😳 though truthfully he hated apologizing.πŸ˜† so true when wedding bells ring, lives change forever πŸ˜†..urmila is a sweetheart..😳..she is such a blabber mouthπŸ˜†..moment back her husband yelled at her but she forgot everything and continue with her chatter...how cute is tht πŸ˜†πŸ˜†πŸ˜†

lovely OS varali...i m eagerly waiting for the next update πŸ˜³
Posted: 11 years ago
Beautiful OS Varaali.. πŸ˜Š
Its a brilliant and cute description of the Lakshman Urmila relation which isnt given much focus usually.. πŸ˜”
We would love u to continue it.. πŸ˜³
Posted: 11 years ago

Parts 1 to 6 here

PART 7 here


PART 8


Holding Urmilla in his hands, as she leaned her head on his chest, Lakshaman was even more confused. Here was a woman who was willing to surrender completely to him. 


And now, how could he just tell her that should a situation ever arise for him to choose between her and  Rama, he, Lakshmana, would unhesitatingly choose his brother? Will she not be upset? Yet, for him, life without brother Rama was unimaginable.


He stood there, unmoving, feeling the weight of her head on his heart. Her earring was pricking him on his chest, but he did not move. After all, it was nothing compared to the pain he was going to give her. At length, Urmilla disengaged herself from his clasp and looking up into his eyes asked "You love your  eldest brother don't you?


" 'Devoted' would be a better word" answered Lakshmana. "People say I am his shadow"


Urmilla continued " So much so that when walking together, your eyes are more on his feet than your own."


"Out of habit, I suppose...I am content to follow in his footsteps. But how do you know?"


"When the two of you, along with Rishi Vishwamitra, were walking down the Royal Avenue in  Mithila. The rishi was pointing out interesting things to both of you, but apart from occasional glances here and there, your eyes never left your brother's feet. You were walking exactly half- a - foot behind your brother, and you were careful not to overstep him, even accidentally.


"You were watching me?" Lakshamana asked, astonished


"Well, all of us had congregated in one of the balconies overlooking the avenue to get a better view of the princes from Ayodhya".  Urmilla answered, matter-of-factly.


She continued " And in the pushpa vatika when your brother was plucking the flowers..."


"Was I still half- a- foot behind him?"


"No" answered Urmilla calmly "you had stepped on to his side and you were anxiously looking at his hands lest he prick himself on an unwary thorn."


"You were observing me all that while?" Lakshmana was dumbfounded.


"Let's put it this way... Your brother was gazing at my sister, you were watching your brother and I was looking at you. We had also come to pluck flowers, remember?"


Urmilla continued "And at night, you cannot sleep until you press your brother's legs, despite his remonstrations."


"How do you know this?" asked Lakshmana, his eyes narrowing in suscpicion


"Remember the maid who kept popping in and out of your room on the first night of your stay in Mithila?"


Lakshmana replied "Yeah...vaguely..."


"That was me" replied Urmilla calmly



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Posted: 11 years ago

PART 9


Lakshmana jumped out of his skin "That was you? Some nerve you have. Why were you spying on us, that too in our room?


"Your room? May I remind you it was my father's palace." retorted Urmilla ingnantly. "And who was spying? In Ayodhya, it may be called spying, but in Miltila, we call it Athithi Satkar" answered Urmilla self righteously.


"Anyway why are you telling me all this now?" asked Lakshmana             


Urmilla's voice softened as she looked down, "Lord, I know that service to your brother is the only aim in your life. Isn't it so?"


Lakshmana nodded.


Urmilla placed her hand on his shoulder and looked up into his eyes "Let it continue to remain so. I hereby promise you..."


"Wait Urmilla..." Lakshmana almost shouted in panic. "Do not take a pledge so easily. Honoring a pledge is paramount for us Raghuvanshis. We will give up our lives but will not renege from a promise we have given. Now that you too are a part of this family...you will also have to uphold the tradition."


Urmilla continued as if Lakshmana had not even spoken. "I, Urmilla, daughter of King Janaka, promise you, my Lord, that I will not prevent you from doing your duty whenever you want to. I will not exercise my rights as your wife to hold you back from following your dharma. I will unhesitatingly accept every decision of yours."


There was a slight quaver in her voice as she continued, still looking down "And, Lord, if ever the duties of a younger brother beckon you, you will not find Urmilla in your way."


Lakshmana held his breath.


Urmilla knelt down and placing her hands on his feet said  "This..Lord... is a Raghuvanshi's promise..."


Lakshmana bent down and lifted her and holding her chin made her look up. Her eyes reflected the strength of her character.


Hugging her close, he whispered "Truly Urmilla, you are a worthy daughter of King Janaka. I am indebted to you eternally"


PART 10    here

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PART 10


A few months later.

The royal palace at Ayodhya.

 Lakshmana's quarters


The rays of the late afternoon sun streamed through the windows into the room where Lakshman was seated on a swing, swinging furiously. He looked out at the sun. Brother Rama had informed him that they would leave in the last prahar of the afternoon, well before sunset. 


Anytime now, thought Lakshman. He had already divested himself of all his ornaments and wondered idly whether brother Rama would insist on them wearing clothes of bark.  Prince to pauper in no time, thought Lakshmana wryly. 


He wondered why brother Rama had not yet returned. Rama had gone to surrender the Royal Seal to Arya Sumant . Since there were apprehensions that some sections of the society may rise in revolt, Rama had also gone to meet the army chiefs to ensure that the security arrangements were in place. Typical of brother Rama to worry about the kingdom even when it was no longer his, thought Lakshmana.


He could hear, at a distance, the citizens protesting in the front of the main gates of the palace. News of the king's sudden decision to send Rama into exile and crown Bharata instead had sent shockwaves through the city. 

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PART 11


Lakshmana had been ready to fight on his brother's behalf and was dismayed when brother Rama brushed aside his offer and instead pointed out gently that their father's command was paramount to him. Lakshmana then proposed he would accompany his brother into exile but this too was brushed aside by Rama.  Deeply pained, Lakshmana stormed and ranted and threatened to put 'the old hag' behind bars.


Rama became alarmed. "You should not refer to Manthara like that, Lakshmana" Brother Rama had reprimanded him


"I was not referring to Manthara" Lakshmana had replied sulkily.


"Then who were calling 'an old hag'?" inquired Rama. Lakshmana did not dare to reply.


Comprehension dawned on Rama's face and his look became one of fury. "Lakshmana" he thundered "Is this any way to talk about Mother Kaikeyi?"


Lakshmana mumbled something about "deserves'nothing else'"


"Apologize at once" ordered Rama


"I am sorry, brother'." said Lakshmana meekly.


It was perhaps this incident which may have forced Rama to reconsider his decision.  Maybe Rama felt that to leave Lakshmana loose and unhinged in Ayodhya at such a time would be an open invitation to disaster. Maybe Rama might have thought that it would be safer to let Lakshmana accompany him where it would be easier for him, Rama to keep an eye on Lakshmana. Whatever be the reason, Rama accepted Lakshmana's proposal to follow him into exile.


Mother Kausalya then had come to him to persuade him to change his mind. It was bad enough for her, she said, to let one son go, how can he also think of leaving them? What would she tell Sumitra?  Lakshmana was getting impatient with these sentimental arguments. His place had always been beside his brother, and everyone had been happy with it. Now that his brother was being forced into exile, there was no reason why he should leave his brother's side


The lone sane voice, Lakshmana thought, had come from his mother- Sumitra. On hearing his resolution, she had come to his room - and placing her hand on his head- said, she had expected nothing less. Relieved, he touched her feet in salutation as she hurried out of his room to be back with the king- who was reportedly suffering from a nervous breakdown.


To hell with the king,
thought Lakshmana. He was feeling particularly mutinous towards his father right now and didn't bother to keep himself updated about the king's health. But no doubt, brother Rama will want to take their father's blessings before leaving. 


Lakshmana was sure he was not going to fall at his father's feet. Yet, with brother Rama's eye on him, he wouldn't dare not to either. The thought of his father had made him furious once again and he began swinging vigorously
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Posted: 11 years ago

PART 12


Urmilla came and stood beside the swing, holding one of its chains. Lakshman grunted to show he had noticed her.


"Aryaputra'"she began hesitatingly'. "Can I also not... I mean...can't you..." her voice faltered


Lakshman held up his hand to silence her. "We have been through this once Urmilla. I cannot take you too along with me."


"Please, Arya' do not say so" implored Urmilla piteously. "When Sita can accompany her husband why can't I too?"


"What? Is sister Sita  also coming along ?"


Urmilla nodded.


Lakshman ran his fingers through his hair. "All the more reason, Urmilla, you cannot come along. Now I will have to serve both of them. How can I look after you as well?"


"You need not look after me, Arya. I will serve you. I assure you, you will not be put into any trouble because of me."


"No Urmilla. That's my decision and that's final" said Lakshmana firmly.


He paused and continued "Be happy that you will be within the comforts of the palace, and not have to endure the hardships of the forest."


Urmilla was stung to the quick. "Of what use are palatial comforts to me, Lord, when you are not there?" she countered.


 "And just in case, Aryaputra, you think that it will be possible for me to enjoy myself in your absence, I hereby pledge that despite living amidst all royal splendor, my life will mirror yours. The fruits and roots that are going to be your food will be mine too. The comforts that are going to be denied to you will have no place in my life too." Urmilla paused, her voice loaded with indignation.


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PART 13


Lakshman was too stunned to reply immediately. "Urmilla- please don't. I did not mean to hurt you. Take back your pledge"


"I will, Lord- when you return after fourteen years" replied Urmilla.


A distant gong announced it was the last prahar of the afternoon. Lakshmana could sense brother Rama's footsteps outside.


"It's time for me to leave, Urmilla" Lakshmana announced gently.


A sobbing Urmilla fell at his feet. "Fourteen years is a long time, Lord. How can I live without you?"


"As I am going to live without you, dearest" Lakshama replied tenderly, bending down and lifting her. "Duty beckons us now Urmilla. I have to do mine as you have to do yours."


"I have one more request, Urmilla' which will ease all the hardships of the next fourteen years. Will you do it for me?" asked Lakshmana


"Command me, lord" replied Urmilla unable to stop crying.


Lifting her face, Lakshmana wiped her tears with his fingers. "Will you promise never ever to shed tears in the next fourteen years? Of course, I will relieve you once I return and you can cry all you want"


Urmilla's response was to sob harder.


Lakshmana shook his head. He placed his hand on her head by way of blessing and turning around, began to leave.


Urmilla shook herself. What was happening to her? Couldn't she give a better send-off to her husband- something that will relieve him from worrying about her? She hastily wiped her tears and composed herself.


Lakshmana was nearly at the door.


"Aryaputra" she called out. Her voice was still quavering.


Lakshmana froze. He was not prepared to take any more sentimental mush from her.


"Aryaputra" Urmilla began, walking towards him. His back was still turned towards her.


"Aryaputra, I have heard that rakshasis roam around in the forests. They are capable of assuming forms of beautiful women and lure innocent men.  If by chance, some such rakshasi tries to flirt with you, do not forget you have a wife at home."


Lakshmana smiled and turned around.


He put his hand on her shoulder and said solemnly, "I won't. In fact, I will chop off her nose and bring it to you as a souvenir. Happy?"


Urmilla smiled and held back the tears that were threatening to burst.


Lakshmana gave her one last look and was gone through the door.

Edited by varaali - 11 years ago
Posted: 11 years ago

Varaali,

I am sorry I haven't been able to comment before but I loved the way you have presented the story portraying unique two way bond between Ram and Lakshman that everyone knows about but equally devotional and complete surrender of Urmila to her Lord that later on paved for exclusive  tie between Urmila and Lakshman beautifully done perhaps for the first time in history of mythological shows….

Looking forward to more OS from you  

-Aditi

Posted: 11 years ago
did not u write here too varaali, loved it to the core. awesome .. love u for bringing urmla and laxman to meπŸ€—


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