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Posted: 10 February 2013 at 5:22am | IP Logged
The tale of a pain!



The dazzling whiteness is gone. It seems such a significant part is lost. It is so ironic, I had never thought I would miss it when it was still there. It had seemed such a trivial thing - this feeling of loss, however, is acute and I don't want to live like this. Every time I want to eat or talk, the loss makes its presence known. All I can do is gulp everything down to avoid the feeling of pain. But it isn't just pain that I experience, there's always the numbness. Every time I try to touch the part of me that is lost I get lost in something which is like a non-existent. I wish I had listened. I wished I had paid attention to little signs that were always there hinting at me to mend my ways, telling me what I was doing wasn't correct. This tale of pain is insufferable, I wish I would just go to sleep without thinking about it. But that's the time of the day when it is worse than eating or talking. I wish I could just survive by breathing. That's only when I feel somewhat alive, then and when I am drinking. Drinking almost heals me until the time passes over and the glass finishes! Oh, Dr. Dentist, I wish you were not such a bad news to my appetite of sweets. Oh, the loss of a tooth shouldn't be s acute.


A/N - I would be obliged if those who read do comment. Tongue

Deeksha Smile


Edited by -Dee- - 10 February 2013 at 5:17am

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Posted: 10 February 2013 at 3:19pm | IP Logged
The pain in your tale is shown from title to Elaborate to next level. Keep it up. Regards

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Posted: 12 February 2013 at 10:34pm | IP Logged

Beautiful:)

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Again brilliant writing and I'm amazed at your ability to describe a little thing so well...liked the little suspense and the end brought a smile on my face. If I'm not wring it was kind of a humorous take on loss of a tooth right? Correct me if I'm wrong. Tongue
Different, funny and great writing. :))

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Posted: 18 February 2013 at 6:43am | IP Logged
u have got good command in describing lil lil details nicely. good one :)

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