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Posted: 27 January 2013 at 5:08pm | IP Logged

Loved it.

This is how the story in actual IPKKND should have been.Like the strong payal and the way you have described events.

Great work :)

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Posted: 29 January 2013 at 6:48am | IP Logged

CHAPTER 7

 

                Devyani raizada was a strong woman. She had gone through lots of ups and downs in life. She had held herself sanely through major losses like her husband who had groomed her into the strong person she was today and also her precious daughter that she had loved to the core.

But as time went by, the losses and the loneliness started creeping upto her. Who could she share her troubles and fears with? Her Arnav?,Anjali?, hadn't they had their share of pain and sorrows to last a lifetime? Her son? family affairs and responsibility of the three kids were better compared to the cartoon of a wife he had to put up  with!

Will manorama be able to be the pillar for him when he might need it? Only time will tell! For now I should be worried about Anjali' oh devimayya! has not my child gone through enough? Plz guide us through this terrible times! It had been a difficult task to smile and pamper the cheat in front of her and she had to take extra care to make sure manorama did nothing stupid in front of him'the time will come and I will have my chance'devyani raizada promised herself wiping away tears'I will take revenge for what he did to my child even if thts the last thing I do'..

 

"Well then'.lets hope everything moves as planned'good bye" saying that payal cut the call and turned back to the family surrounding her'to say she was tensed was an understatement but looking at her  bauji, she decided she will not let anything come in the way'that disgusting leech will get what he deserves and she will make sure he is punished for playing with their lives' her little khushi..what all she had to bear! Not anymore! she looked at akash as she thought about the next person she intended to hurt'..no its not yet time'she was not sure of how akash would react for what she planned to do to arnav' it might result in the end of their beautiful relationship' but then.. it seemed to be so little compared to what her baby sister had gone through!

 

Akash was still unsure of what he saw'his shy payalji was in a different avatar now..and he smiled inwardly as the picture of durga maa flashed through his mind. He was proud that she was his'yes payal akash raizada and he loved the feel to it'

 

 

 

"khushiji'I repeat!what I want to tell u is a secret! And I don't like her at all! How on earth can she be your friend?and what is with all this chamkeeli calling? Woh aapke thapmaan kar rahi hain! Who is she? Dramaqueen!"

"YOU!!..."

"nahi naheji 'who mere "APMAAN" nahi karrahi ..its just a nickname and I myself asked her to call me that!

"FORGET IT!lavanya shouted.." Khushi I am telling you to throw this 'this' whatever! Out of here so that I can talk to you in private!"

"NOWAY I am leaving her alone!"

"goto hell! How can somebody be soo irritating?!!"

 

Arnav watched amusedly from the poolside as the fight went on and the idiots asked khushi straight to the point as to who was more dear to her. He smiled as he saw his wife dearest stood with both palms on her head afraid it would explode! Time to step in and clear a few doubts'arnav unconsciously called out a silent prayer hoping everything would come out right this time'.

"NK'I want to spend sometime with my WIFE and ALONE"

NK almost burst his brain with all the thinking'what will he do now?

 

PRECAP:

ARNAV WANTS TO KNOW WHY NK IS AROUND KHUSHI ALL THE TIME! WILL HE GET TO KNOW?

AND A PEEK INTO MANORAMAS THOUGHTS

 

End of chapter 7'

 

Hw was it?PLZ COMMENT!



Edited by farhannish - 30 January 2013 at 9:49pm

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Posted: 29 January 2013 at 7:08am | IP Logged
Well I can say I liked the last part nk and la fighting while Arnav and Khushi watching them
And the. Arnav says he wants to spend some time with Khushi alone
Nice
Starting I was little confused what did payal tell to deviyani about Shyam or Arnav
Ok so naniji is worrie about manorama and her son
I liked how akash was proud of payal for her confidence
:)
Continue soon
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Posted: 29 January 2013 at 7:26am | IP Logged
NICE UPDATESmile

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Posted: 29 January 2013 at 11:13am | IP Logged

Taapmaan= Apmaan ... Hilarious:D
Loved your Nk and the update :)

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Posted: 30 January 2013 at 2:12pm | IP Logged

Chapter 8

 

"NK'I want to spend sometime with my WIFE and ALONE"

NK almost burst his brain with all the thinking'what will he do now?

"NO ASR",lavanya interrupted "I have just got here and I want to spend some time with her'so u both are going to shut up and just let me'.and she took khushis hand scowled at NK and walked out of the room'

         

          NKs instinct told him to make a run for it'but arnav being arnav foresaw it, overtook NK and closed the door.

'" I have a few questions and u r going to answer them'."he looked at NK in ASR mode to let him know that there was no way out other than answering him'

    NK gulped visibly "O..KK.. SHOOT.."

 

Arnav folded his hands and gestured towards the couch 

"why r u here back from Sydney ?"

"u know me'I needed a break from work'I am not a workaholic like you" nk retorted'his eyes steady and fearless as he was reminded what he was actually here for'

"u told your mother that u r here to help a friend'.which friend?"

Nk raised his eyebrows 

"so homework has been done'y don't u find out the friend yourself?"

"I have my guesses'but I want to hear it from you'"

"iam not saying anything nannav'"

Arnav did not react ..rather with the same straight face he asked next.

"payal called you three days prior to your arrival here, what did she tell u?"

NK looked up in surprise'"why didn't u ask payal?"

"simple'she is not here now"

"well'ask her when she gets back! COZ I AINT TALKING!"

"NK'" the voice was lighter.."its important for me to know..there are things to sort out.."

"I don't care'its not important to me"

"then what is?..or should I ask who is?" Arnav tried to control the venom

"u can ask as much as u want but I aint replying ARNAV!"

it hurt arnav to hear his name though he had hated his friends version from him

With that NK got up and opened the door only to find lavanya at the door'

"nope'u r not leaving without the answers, get back in " with that la pushed him back inside..

"what is wrong with u you woman!" nk cried as he hit his leg somewhere and fell hard on his back.

"lavanya?"

"ASR, I want answers too'what is wrong with chamkeeli?, she is not at all herself!, Did you force her into this marriage? Didn't you propose her and romance her? Or did you make a DEAL out of that too?"she joked with her hand on her hips..

 

"Oh he made a DEAL alright! Tell her AA..S..R..!!, about your six month marriage deal!" NK bit out as he felt his leg going numb..he doubted that he had broken his leg since the pain only seemed to grow..

 

Three people stood openmouthed at his retort'.

 

"A six month marriage!...poor thing!of course what else could she expect from ASR! lavanya could still remember khushi s dreams about her wedding..the rituals'"oh god!"

 

But arnavs thoughts were overspeeding "she told him? Was NK important enough for her to open her secrets?..did they like each other?was tht what brought NK here?""but she wouldn't tell payal would she?aarghh..his head was on the verge of explosion when he heard a voice and he went cold'..

 

 "So its true? huh arnaw bitwa? mamis voice broke through the silence'

 

"how did'but '"so everyone knew! As this realization dawned upon him'.his anger rose'she went about making sure everybody knew..didnt she?he had specifically told her that she shouldn't speak.. but she had defied him'u'll pay for this khushi!..he thought silently.

He looked upto mami once again but she dint seem to want an answer.

 

          Mami swiftly left for nanis room to inform her of the happenings, but not finding her in her room sat down on the bed in heavy thought'..so phatti saree is not  the culprit! She is the victimwa! But damaadji!? Should I inform the others of what I found out? Manorama thought that though she might appear to be a stupid woman 'well.. when put it this way.. she was a stupid woman for not approving of gems like khushi and payal, but it must have been because she saw herself in them.. the rags to riches story'.and she knew what it was like' to feel out of place' she hid it well under her pretense of extreme stupidity but sometimes she just got carried away'she had wanted a better and sophisticated girl for his akash'one he would not feel ashamed to show off ' one who could help him out when he is left out weak and she had seen only a sixteen year old herself in payal until today'.but today she saw was what she had always wanted in akash's wife the manorama raijjadas ""dee-eye-elll"" aka daughter in law'but how could she just drop the facade all of a sudden and she is so used to taunting her that she didn't think she could drop it'on the whole she wont ..it was fun! clapping her hands twice like a child'and she looked upto see nani staring at her as if she had gone mad..

 

"woh kya hain na sasumma'.wo..' ha wo maine sapna dekha ki six month marriage phatti saree ki bajai khoon bari tang aur akash bitwa ke beech main thi aur climax me main use hello hi ke bajay tata bbye bye kar rahi thi!...hihi"she bit her tongue as she saw her saasuma looking at her with pure rage

'"MANORAMA!!""..

forgetting what she had arrived here for she ran off the room scared of her saasumas wrath!

         

 end of chapter 8!


thank u for reading ...plz comment readers...it helps!



Edited by farhannish - 30 January 2013 at 9:54pm

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Posted: 30 January 2013 at 8:19pm | IP Logged
Absolutely loved chapter 5! Hilarious stuff( you have an amazing knack for writing comedy) NK and La are amazing together- usually i HATE their jodi; authors always make it feel like their throwing the left over people together without there being any really chemistry, but with the slow buildup that your working towards, I think I'm going to love seeing these 2 come togetherBig smile

It felt like there was something missing in the first 1 or 2 chapters i cant figure out what yet lol, but you've really established a nice pace to the story. The insight we got to see of Mami ji and her feeling towards her family as well as herself were dead on.
I wana see more of a kick a$s Payal (shes one of my fav character,before the CV turned her into the local fountain)

Arnav is such a typical man-jumping from one thing to another. But the only time men are so suspicious and jealous is when they know they don't deserve something. She to good for him and the poor man knows it, the emotions are just manifest themselves  as jealousy.

when you write dialog can you introduce it in a separate sentence, it gets confusing to read in the middle of a paragraph, I cant tell its its the characters though or a discussion.

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Posted: 30 January 2013 at 9:28pm | IP Logged

Nice update!

So NK is full on in Khushi's bodyguard mode, People know about six month deal and manorama is coming around!

Great work :)


Edited by Anony_mous - 30 January 2013 at 9:24pm

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