Story: Wilted| Chapter 3 Forgotten Puzzles|Page 7 - Page 8

Originally posted by: -Aliya-

"Sometimes she would laugh heartily during the day and let her tears seep into her pillow at night"

This. You would be surprised by how many people find that going to bed in the solace of the quiet night and thinking over the day's events can be quite a tear jerking moment. I guess our beds are magical places where we think about everything and we find that as we think back on our day, we also happen to think back over our whole life..i do anyway. I think that is what triggers the emotions. In that way, Roshni is a character that a lot of youngsters can relate to. Her thoughts, the confusion of them, this identity crisis that every teen goes through where they are just trying to find a place for themselves in the people around them, trying to put an identity to who they are and how they fit into their surroundings. and if they don't fit in then who do they fit in with? Her thoughts are like a web of tangles and it fits so well with the whole 'lost teen' phase. I know that she is 22 in that chapter but in the 2nd chapter (i've only read this far but i couldn't resist commenting on some quotes) she's referred to as the 16year old sister which is why i'm blabbing on about teens. But i guess all youngsters do go through this phase..

"Life was always beautiful just not pretty"

you know, i've never seen someone put it this way. its so simple that it almost mocks the way we still manage to complicate life and it ends up into a ugly mess. I don't know what you meant by this quote but this is what I, personally (emphasis on the 'personal opinion'), get from it: the bigger picture that humans cannot comprehend is beautiful and by beautiful i mean that it all has a purpose, theres a motive behind the ugly stuff in life. The world is wider than our view of it but because we're very limited to what we see, i guess we are selfish beings in that we call life a bitch and ugly and whatnot when we only have a small window view of the whole picture. 'pretty' ...well pretty sounds quite small next to 'beautiful' and i think that signifies that our limited view is so small next to the whole view of life.

ooh i really liked how you wrote that bit on the mother's perspective. it really made me think of my own, very much.

i know i have barely wrote a word about the story so far but i've only read til chapter 2...i'm going real slow 😆

Deeksha! thats your full name! why did i never think to ask? anyway great stuff so far, keep it up 

Originally posted by: Anzie

It was an absolutely beautiful update! <3

Originally posted by: gypsy

So I am done with Chap 1 and 2 and I think I am getting your character "Roshini". She's the protagonist in the story, isn't?

Yes, she's the protagonist.


She's just like any normal girl who looks for happiness in small things. "Birthdays" are meant to be special and she isn't different. I totally agree with the not keeping in contact with old friends. It's True and I am telling it by my experience. You leave school, and a part of you leaves you. You leave college and the same thing happens. The gang of friends you have reduces to just few. But those few are your life-long friends. You can count on them anywhere and anytime.

I like to think that this change is inevitable. Done that many times - as many times I have changed schools.


Her parents view on teaching is not something I agree with. From what I have understood, she had a different goal but then she shifted to this profession and her father isn't very supportive. And the question here is why? If this is what she wants and she's happy doing, her parents should have supported her. Because ultimately she's the one who's teaching not her parents.  But her father views and this statement  "Anyways, that ain't really job."
gets him a negative point from me. 🤢

I think you'll find answers when Roshni does :P

There's a big reason why she's not ready to meet her parents and thus coming up with excuses. This is just the start and I know there's a lot more to come. So I am waiting to see how you unfold her story and her mysteries.

A very good start to the story Dee. This is just for Chap 1, I have read Chap 2 as but I'll post my views in a day or two. BTW, I saw the cover of this story and it's lovely. You should post it on first page as well.

I look forward to your views on Chapter 2 soon or I'll nag! :P

Cheers!!!

P.S. One suggestion- When writing the conversation, don't use paragraph. It makes the convo too jumbled up. Use different lines, it will look clean and easier to read.

I'll try that in the next chapter. I'm glad you told me about this. :)

P.S- With this post I am officially a GOLDIE. 😎But Yellow   

I bow to you for posting your 1000th post here but I don't like this yellow! :P

Love,

Dee