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Posted: 12 January 2013 at 9:33pm | IP Logged
you potrayed viren's emotions very well & finally viren found that stupid

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Posted: 12 January 2013 at 11:41pm | IP Logged
its a good story
i liked it
continue soon
pm me plz 
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Posted: 13 January 2013 at 1:54am | IP Logged
amazing update...
Viren's frustration for not being able to do anything
virat's caring attitude and the special room ...nicely  written
then jeevika moving on and Viren and manvi with her ...
then Viren's anger seeing the attacker ...was so  natural ...
Thnx 4 d pm...:)

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Posted: 13 January 2013 at 5:39am | IP Logged

firstly i would like to thank u for continuing this os...u have brilliantally potrayed viren's helplessness and his anger...keep on updating it...thnx for pm

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Posted: 13 January 2013 at 8:06am | IP Logged
Originally posted by nobo

First of all, am glad you continue it as This story was promising :)
Viren's frustration...the fact that he himself is a Lawyer who had taught people not to take law in Their hands just frustrates him further. Neither can he punish him himself nor Is able to do so by law...
& to top that Jeevika's insecurities haunting him ...wonderfully penned

Jeevika's moving on, Manvi & Viren being there for her, Virat's caring attitude, bros's spl room...minute but meaningful things & awesomely described
& finally the anger to see the culprit roaming freely while their lives changed upside down...
Beautiful update ...

Lolz I almost typed Splendid in the end & then was like yeah the girl is ryt...ROFL




Splendid, dude I don't even say that.
Thanks Priya for appreciating this story and thinking it has some promise to it. I know I said I wasn't going to continue it but in the end I came up with something to extend it.

I'm glad you liked the different things in this update. I guess this one was more about Viren dealing with it. His legal frustrations but also that helplessness of not being able to do what he promised and wished.

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Posted: 13 January 2013 at 8:08am | IP Logged
Interesting. Awesome update.
Thx for the PM.

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Posted: 13 January 2013 at 8:13am | IP Logged
Originally posted by Sweety1234556

Amazing!!!
Ur writing is just fab!!

I could actually feel viren's helplessness,it was all so beatifuly expressed!!


Thank you sweety for reading it and liking the way it was written, especially for Viren as this was more about him.

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Posted: 13 January 2013 at 8:27am | IP Logged
Originally posted by Virika11

It was outstanding

Your os are different from others

I could feel Viren's helplessness, and the you expressed it, it was fantastic

Keep the good work up

Thanks for the pm





Glad you liked the Os, I know my os's tend to be different compared to others which is why I don't always think they will be liked.

Thanks for commenting and liking this update.

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