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Posted: 08 January 2013 at 2:06pm | IP Logged
Originally posted by shine123

first of all sry 4 commenting so late...
Brilliant OS...
jeevika hiding from the family not wanting to upset them...keeping everything to herself...nicely written...
manvi and Virat worried for Jeevika...
Viren's helplessness of not being able to be with her, protect her...
Manvi and Viren's reaction not over but just assuring...brilliant...

Brilliant os...



Thanks Shaina for reading and I'm glad that you liked it. Your not late at all and you read it do that's a bonus for me. I'm flash you liked the different emotions of each person and hopefully it all made sense in the scenario.

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I had read story over and over again it just brilliant protray the emotions of jeevika just real I feel pain will read 10 time before bed will look forward next part pls pm me thanks


Thank you for reading the story and I'm glad that it was written in a way that could could feel it. If I do continue which I am unsure if I will. I will on you.

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Originally posted by RiDz_rox

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sorry Pj for commenting so late.. this is an awesome piece of writing... you have explained everything so beautifully hats off... Jeevika as usual was brilliant.. her pain was so well expressed... Manvi, viren, virat were great in their parts.. all standing with jeevika... lovely OS ...
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Thanks Ridz for your comments. Don't worry about being late, we are all late at some point. In glad that you liked it and that it all seemed to work in terms of Jeevika and the others.

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Hey all, now I wasn't going to continue this Os. However here I am. I'm not going to bore you all with the housekeeping, if you have ever read my work, you know it by heart. 

Part three

Viren threw this files on the floor. It scattered across his office floor. Virat came in hearing all the commotion. Viren was bubbling with rage, he continued to throw things from his desk. 

"Bhai! Bhai! What happened?" 

Virat grabbed his shoulder to stop him, Viren looked at him and sighed, "There not going to prosecute!" Virat looked at him with confusion, according to him everything was in place to prosecute this guy. "Even though Jeevika has identified him in her statement, we haven't got the evidence!" He banged his fists onto the table and kicked the chair.

"But Bhai doesn't Bhabhi statement not mean anything. I mean..."

"It does, but it doesn't when he has a apparent alibi. His partner was at the party as well and claims to be with her at the time and they have... I still cannot believe it was someone who we let into our home. He was someone we knew and trusted."

Viren left the room enraged. He needed to leave and get away from everyone. Virat was going to go after him but knew he should just leave him alone. After finding out the truth, Viren's entire focus was not just on Jeevika but prosecuting the person responsible for her state.

He left the house and took a taxi. After a few minutes, he stopped the car, paid the man and got out. He wondered along the streets, when he found himself in a pub. He sat at the bar, waved the bartender down and downed a shot. He closed his eyes and saw Jeevika's face after she had been attacked, he downed second shot. He closed his eyes again and could envision that man on her, touching her everywhere - he took third shot. He heard Jeevika cries and thought how he wasn't able to give her the justice she deserved. He downed the fourth shot. He was Viren Vadhera, a renowned lawyer who has battled in court and provided justice too many and put those criminals away, yet he could not deliver justice for his own wife! He downed his fifth, he was incapable for living up to his words, the shots kept coming and Viren drank them all.

The pub was empting out as last call was looming. Viren gathering his keys and phone and tried to stand, he stumbled for a second and used the bar to steady him. As he managed himself another man, barged straight into him.

"Oi! Watch it!" Viren went to grab the person but fumbled. The man turned to leave whist muttering to his friends. "If he can't handle his liquor, then he shouldn't drink," they laughed. Viren who was maybe completely drunk at this time, heard his snide remarks. He walked over to him.

"Do you wanna say that again?" He pushed up against the guy, showing him his attitude and anger. The man was reluctant to argue with him because of the state Viren was currently in. Viren kept on enticing and taunting him, until he got him to throw the first punch. Viren fell back and attempted to punch him but he couldn't, and he didn't want them to stop. The man continued even though Viren was flat on the floor, he grabbed Viren by his collar to lift him slightly off the ground and continued to punch him in the face. Unexpectedly, someone touched the man's shoulder and he stopped, dropped Viren. He fell back onto the ground, and spat out blood on the side. As he looked up, Virat was standing above him. Virat put his hand out and lifted his brother off the ground. Viren used Virat's body as support, putting his arms across his waist and shoulders. Virat guided him out and put him in the back seat of the car. 

As they came home, Virat quietly took Viren to their special room. This room was unknown to the others in the house (well it was known just no one was allowed there except for them.) The brothers had found it many years ago - it was only for them. If they had a fight with someone or just wanted some space, they came to it. Virat laid his brother down on the sofa and tried to clear up some of his wounds, but by that time, Viren had passed out. He was battered and bruised, yet he knew it did not matter to him as what did matter was fading from him.  

Virat knew his brother very well; he knew that he Viren had picked that fight, as he couldn't fight for Jeevika. He knew he wanted to feel that physically pain, that he could only imagine, he wasn't able to do anything so instead he had tried to drown his sorrows.         

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Months had passed since the attack the physically scars were starting to fade but other scars were harder to disappear. Slowly Jeevika was returning to normal, loud noises did not send her into a frenzy anymore. There had been some hard moments especially with Viren but she was trying. 

'Jeevika?" 

Jeevika was sitting on the bed, she was wearing a beautiful anarkali. Maanvi had dressed her an as angel. Viren walked in and was mesmerised but he could sense Jeevika's apprehensiveness. This was the first time since the attack that Jeevika was going out for a function. 

Everything was going well, Viren and Maanvi  stayed by Jeevika's side that night. It was a small office function. There were not too many people.  Suddenly Jeevika  heard a voice, it was deep and very distinct. She could never forget that voice. Un-expectantly, she clung into Viren's arm he looked down slightly shocked.

He was across the room, Jeevika excused herself with a whisper. Viren and Maanvi asked if they should leave or if one of them should come with her. She reassured them that she was fine and stepped out for a few minutes. 

Jeevika come out of the bathroom to see Niall (her attacker) in front of her. Avoiding his glances, she tried walking straight pass him on the opposite side on the corridor. As she passed she could feel his glares on her, simply trying to get through it,  she breathed. Then she felt a hand, he had grabbed onto her hand and trapped her against the wall. She pushed herself off him, but he run his fingers down her face. His touch disgusted her. 

All of a sudden Niall was turned around and was facing Viren, "Maanvi, take Jeevika home I will meet you there," he spoke in a seemingly calm voice; (however he was simply trying to compose himself.) Maanvi escorted Jeevika away, as she was trembling slightly Maanvi wrapped her in the shawl that she had. 

Once Maanvi and Jeevika were out of sight, Viren pushed Niall against the wall so hard that he hit his head. Before Niall could fight back, Viren had grabbed his collar. 

"If you want to fight someone, why not choose someone who will give you a run for your money." He pushed him further as he let go, Niall went in to punch him, Viren dodged out of the way before grabbing his arm and twisting it behind his back. 

"I may not be able to punish you through the courts but if you ever lay a hand on my wife, then I will hunt you down and kill you." He began to whisper in his ear, "I'll be sure that no one will ever find your body, remember I can make sure of it." Viren let him go and Niall fell to the ground.

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First of all, am glad you continue it as This story was promising :) 
   Viren's frustration...the fact that he himself is a Lawyer who had taught people not to take law in Their hands just frustrates him further. Neither can he punish him himself nor Is able to do so by law...
 & to top that Jeevika's insecurities haunting him ...wonderfully penned

Jeevika's moving on, Manvi & Viren being there for her, Virat's caring attitude, bros's spl room...minute but meaningful things & awesomely described 
& finally the anger to see the culprit roaming freely while their lives changed upside down...
  Beautiful update ...

Lolz I almost typed Splendid in the end & then was like yeah the girl is ryt...ROFL



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Amazing!!!
Ur writing is just fab!!
I could actually feel viren's helplessness,it was all so beatifuly expressed!!

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Posted: 12 January 2013 at 11:15am | IP Logged

It was outstanding

Your os are different from others

I could feel Viren's helplessness, and the you expressed it, it was fantastic

Keep the good work up

Thanks for the pm




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