Originally posted by Amii90
<font color="#6600FF">First thing first, I read this OS before going to sleep and I don't think it was great idea solely because of the content of the story- kinda left me with a heavy heart!! But besides that there is no doubt that it was one of the brilliantly written OS :)
detail you have put in this OS is just AMAZING, Pj!!!! One could easily
form vivid image of everything they read and feel those emotions in the
same way if one was to watch it on screen. The concept becomes
different due to its treatment; your take and how you have outlined
everything makes it refreshing to read and manages to glue its readers
till the very end! You have portrayed Jeevika beautifully- her actions, her turmoil, her emotional setback, her aggitation, etc- makes it all very REAL and genuine at the same time without any exaggeration!
Viren, Manvi, and Virat were depicted nicely too; especially with Viren's anger and disappointment in himself of failing to protect Jeevika was brilliant- relates to the Viren in the show too as we saw in the case of Karan and Jeevika's video footage!
Its not easy to write such content; requires you to be lot more diligent with what you play around and how you project the entire idea, but like always you have a done superb job, Pj :)
Thank you Ami for your comments. Reading this before bed, may not be the best idea.
You have to be very careful with the words you use and how say it. I tried something different I did have some help from a show that showed a similar situation.
Thank you for saying that it is written well as I can see many things wrong it - mainly wording or little issues. Without exaggeration! I know I tend to keep things underplayed so worry if it comes how I intend to. Detail? Really, not limited detail. I'll stop playing devil advocate now.
Dear Ami, I don't know what to say. I'm really glad that you enjoy different emotions of everyone but especially Jeevika's as getting those right is important otherwise it wouldn't come off right. After we saw Viren after he saw that footage, of seeing how Jeevika was treated by Karan, you can see how that's come across.