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Ok guys I know we all want desperately that vikram should leave and never come back, and I know cvs will never allow him to do as such.. so me doing this behalf of all of u..

this is my first attempt, so please be kind, me was very hesitate, but komal,   helped me and say its nice so me daring... so please tell me how is this..Embarrassed  

* bhul-chuk, leni -neni maf kar dena* Wink

       

So in my story vikram decided to move out now, and before leaving he want to say some thing to all '

He calls to everybody in the hall.. 

MT asking'vikram tumne hum sab ko yanha kyo bulaya hai.. ?

Vikram'kuch kahna tha aap logo se,  * suddenly rattan comes and say " malik ek admi ye ticket de gya hai..

MT'ticket , kaise ticket tum kanhi jar he ho vikram ?

Vikram- haa,

Mt'kanha ?

V'bas ja rha hoo,aur mat poochiye kyoki mai khud bhi  nahi janta'

MT'par kyo aur kyo nahi btana chahte ?

V'isliye kyonki mai bas kuch din akela rahna chahta hoo,, nahi chahta ki  koi jane ki mai kanha hoo aur kya kar rha hoo..

MT'shocked* , achanak tumhe kya ho gya hai vikram ? aaisi ajeeb si bate kyo kar rhe ho..?

V'achanak nahi maa, achanak nahi.bhut soch-samjh kar hi ye faisla kiya hai maine..

MT'par kyo ?aaisa kya ho gya hai..?

V'aaisa kya ho gya hai ? agar aapko maa hokar bhi ye samjh nahi aa rha hai,ki kya ho gya hai to mujhe lgta hai ki mera jane ka faisla bilkul sahi hai..

MT'vikram'???

V'haa maa, jo huaa hai, aap sab log jante hai, jo kuch bhi huaa accha nahi huaa aur agar mai yanha rha to shayad isase bhi bura ho sakta hai..isiliye jaa rha hoo..

Bas jane se pahle sabse kuch khan chahta tha..

BN__ par apna sab kuch chodkar apna poora pariwar' akele

V'pariwar ? apne.. *smil* '. "Yeh na puchcho kis kis ne dhokhe diye, waranaa aapno ke chehare uttar jaayenge" ' khair

 mai sirf jane se pahle kuch kehna chahta tha, aap sab se mafi magna chahta hoo , mujhe aaisa lagta hai,ki  pichle dino mujhse kuch galtiya ho gayi hai., * staring to both backstabber*.. to mujhe lagta hai ki apni galtiya mujhe man leni chahiye..

MT ' galtiya par tumne kya galtiya kee hai ?  aur agar ho bhi gyi hai to tum ek thakur ho, ye sab to chalta hai, aur humei nahi lagta ki tumne koi galti ki hai, tumne apni sari jimeddariya bakhubi nibhai hai..

V' haa hum thakur hai par humne is bat ka fayda udhane ki kabhi koshish nahi ki,humesha apne aapko dusro se bdha nahi samjha, na dusro ko chota.. sabko brabar hi samjha hai,isiliye mujhe lagta hai,pichle dino jo mujhse huaa wo nahi hona chahiye tha.. humei lagta hai ki jimedari nibhane me hum peeche rah gye, agar nlbhai hoti to mafi mangne ki jarurat nahi padhti' aur na yanha se jane ki..

MT'tum adi aur sug ki wajah se ja rahe ho  ?

V'nahi mai apni wajah se ja ha hoo..

MT' *moving towords both* adi dekho ,tum dono ki wajah se vikram ja  ha hai..

ADI'maine kya kiya,  maine to wahi kiya, jo sahi tha..

V'maa rhne dijiye, usne kuch nahi kiya jo kiya ,maine kiya sara dosh mera hai, 

 

 sab kuch jante bujhte jo kuch bhi kiya maine kiya, sari galti meri hai, * every body shocked and surprised

V'haa aaj mai yanha apni galtiya manne hi to aaya hoo.. meri sabse bdhi galti ye thi ki mai is gawn me aaya, bina kisi khas wajah ke.. usse bhi bdhi galti ye thi ki main eek aaisi ladki se pyar kiya jo pyar ka matlab hi nahi janti thi.. , *sugni is furious*..  sabke samne mujhe ye manne me koi hichak nahi hai, ki maine us ladhaki se dil ki gahraiyo se pyar kiya tha, meri galti bas itni thi ki jab mujhe rewa ke jinda hone ka pta chala, to maine ye bat use nahi btai,isliye nahi ki mai uuse dhoka dena chahta tha,blki isliye kyonki, mai use bta nahi paya,kyonki usne mujhse kaha ki wo apni jann de degi, aur mai use khona nahi chahta tha,us khusi ko khona nahi chahta tha,jo brso bad mere jeevan me aai thi..  .. aur rewa ke sath mai kitna khush hoo ye aap sab jante hai par mante nahi hai..  

Sugni'ye bas itani si galti hai ?

V'nahi shayad bhut bdhi galti thi, tumhe samjhne me galti ho gayi, mujhe lga ki   tum mujhse pyar karti ho, par sach to ye hai ki  tumne mujhse kabhi pyar hi nahi kiya..ye meri galt fahmi thi.. mujhe laga tha ki  tum mujhse itna pyar karti ho, humara rishta itna majboot hai ki kam se kam ek bar tum meri majboori samjhne ki koshish krogi, lekin nahi..tumne meri ek galti ko itna bdha bna diya ki uske bad mai  galtiyo par galiya karta gya.. mera ek jhooth tumhe dikhai diya,par apna kiya kabhi nazar nahi aaya'

ADi--- humne kuch bhi galat, nahi kiya.. *loudly*

V'haa adi tumne aaj tak kuch bhi galt nahi kiya tumne wahi kiya jo tumhare khoon me hai, tumne sabit kar diya ki, tumahre khoon ka rang gahra hai,aur meri parvarish ka rang halka, jaise tumhare bap ne meri bahen ko dhoka diya, usi tarah tumne mujhe, pure khandan ko dhoka diya,..

Sug'aap aaise baat nahi kar sakte..

V'haa mai aaise baat nahi kar sakta,kyonki baate karane ka theka to sirf tumne le rakha hai'

Adi'mamaji..

V'please mamaji mat kho , kyonki iska matlab tum jante nahi ho.. kisi rishte ka koi matlab nahi jante ho tum, tumhare jaise gire huya aadmi mera bhanja kabhi nahi ho sakta..

Adi'mai gira huaa hoo aur jo aapne kiya wo kya hai..? bdhkkpapn..

V'haa jo maine kiya wo koi bdhkkapapn nahi tha, par mujhe ye sab karane ke liye majboor kisne kiya.. tum dono ne..fir bhi aaj mai apni galti man to rha hoo,isiliye sabko bulaya hai..   

Adi'hum dono ne aapko jhooth bolne ko kha..

V--  nahi tum dono  ne nahi, bas zindangi me thodhi si khusi pane ki chah ne, kuch der ke liye mujhe swarthy bna diya tha..

Adi'swarthii ? aur uske bad bhi mai gira huaa hoo..

V'haa adi, kyonki hum sab swarthii hai,apne aapko dekh lo, tum dono apne aapko sahi aur mujhe har keemat par galat sabit krna chahte ho, uske liye kuch bhi karne ko taiyar ho ye swarth  nahi hai ?  apne aapko mahan sabit karne ki zid bhi ek swarth hi hai'nahi hai kya ?  maine jo kuch bhi kiya mere pass uski ek wajah to thi,      

 par tumne ? jo  tum dono   ne kiya uski koi wajah mujhe nazar nahi aati mujhe kya kisi ko nazar nahi aati..

Sugni'aap kabhi samjh nahi sakte..

V--  haa nahi samjh sakta, koi kaise samjh sakta hai ki ek ladhki jisne bhgvan ke mandir me ek aadmi ko apna pati mana tha, ek din bina kisi wajah ke usi aadmi ke bhanje ke sath shadi kar leti hai, jis ladhke ko apne bete  ke roop me dekhna chahiye that use apna pati maan leti hai.. phir bhi wo sahi aur mai galat  hoo,      ek aadmi jo apne mama ko apna pita kahta hai, ye jante huye ki wo insane ek ladhki se pagalo ki tarah pyar karta hai, usi ki peedh me khanjar ghop kar usi ladhki se shadi kar leta hai, aur apne aap ko mahan kehta hai .. jis aurat ko maa ke rup me dkhna chahiye tha use hi apni biwi bna liya, par wo mahan aur mai galat hoo great.. mai nahi samjh sakta ki koi  kaise itna nirdayi ho sakta hai ?

Jis  ladhaki ke liye maine duniya ki parwah nahi ki, usi ladhki ne mere hi bhanje se shadi karne se pahle ek  bar bhi nahi socha' ki mujhe kaisa lagega..  aur mera bhanja jiski har khwahish mene bachpan se lekar aaj tak poori ki wo meri  sirf ek khwahish poori nahi kar paya..aur apne aapko mahan kahta hai' wow

Kya galti thi meri adi, sirf itani mai thodi si khusi chahta tha jo mujhe kabhi nahi mili, aur tumane mujhse mere jeene ki wajah chin li, kyo .. sirf isliye ki tum apne aapko mahan sabit karma chahate the..

Adi'mai apne aapko mhan nahi sabit karna chahta hoo

V'to aur kya kar rahe ho.. mere aur rewa ka ghar bchane ke liye jo natak kiya, wo kyo kiya jabki tumacchi tarah jantethe ki ye ghar kabhi ghar tha hi nahi..

Adi' mai sugani se pyar karta hoo..

V ' pyar * laugh* "suna hai wo bhi mahbbat ka shouk rakhne lage, jinhe kuh khabar hi nahi wafa ke bare me"..

 iska matlab bhi tum dono jante ho, ? agar ye pyar hai to amrita ke sath kya kar rhe the.. majak.. jo use itni aasani se chodh diya..

Adi'mai usse pyar nahi krata tha..

 V'aur isi liye usse chodh diya.. wow, par agar mai rewa ko   chodhna chahta tha, to tumhe manjoor nahi tha,  kya doglapan hai.. *clap*

Adi tum dono pyar ka matlab bhi nahi jante ho.. agar tum dono ko mouka mile to tum dono kisi se bhi  pyar sakte ho..

Sugni ' aap humari beizzati kar rhe hai ..

V'beizzati unki hoti hai jiski izzat ho, aur wo tumne apne hatho se gawa di hai humesha ke liye .. tum dono kitna gir gai ho,  tumhe andaja bhi nahi hai..

Sugni'aap'

V'basss'   yanha mai hisab-kitab karne nahi aaya hoo ki tumne kya kiya,maine kya kiya, mai bas jane se pahele sab ko bta dena chahhta  tha ,ki mai ja  rha hoo, aur kyo ja   ha hoo , aur jane se pahle tumse kahna chahta tha,ki sugni mujhse sachmuch galti ho gayi jo maine tumse pyar kiya, tum is layak kabhi thi hi nahi.. please mijhe maff kar do.. tum adi se pyar karti ho na jisne chand din pahle tumhe sare aam beizzat kiya, dhakke mar kar ghar se nikal diya.. aur aaj tum usi aadmi ke gun ga rahi ho,, aur maine tumhe humesh izzat di ,mann diya par tum mera ek jhooth maf nahi kar pai.. apne ghamnd,apne ahankar me itni andhi ho gai,ki mujhe samjhne ki kabhi koshish nahi ki'

 iske bad bhi tum sahi ho ,aur mai galt hoo, kyonki maine tum par bhut bharosa kiya tha,kya socha tha aur tum kya nikli' "tub hi bharm na rakh saka apne khuloos ka, humko to tujh pe nazz khud se bhi badhkar tha"..

Haa sugani mai galat hoo, maine tumhe samjhne me galti kar di, iski saza to mujhe milni hi chahiye.. ek ladhki jise sahi aur galt ki samjh hi nahi hai,jo  galt ko sahi aur sahi ko galt sabit    karna chahti hai kisi bhi tarah se, ..ek aadmi ne tumhe bar-bar beizzat kiya, par tum uske kadmo me padhi ho uske liye apni jan dena chahti ho,aur mai tumhare liye apni jan de sakta tha,par tumne  mujhe jite jee mar diya, aaisi ladhki ko pane ke liye maine apna sab-kuch daanv par laga diya, itna bdha gunah ho gya mujhse, to saza ka huqdar to mai hoo.. mere sath jo koch bhi huaa, mai isi ke layak hoo..  

   MT'vikram bas kro kahi jane ki jarurat nahi hai.. agar kisi ko jana hoga to adi chala jayega apni patni ke sath..

V'nahi maa, ab mai nahi ruk sakta, mai jana chahta hoo, isi me sabki bhlai hai..

MT'sabko chodhkar jane se kya bhlai ho jayegi ?

V'maa mai apne aap se khush nahi hoo, jo kuch bhi huaa ya jo kuch bhi maie kiya, wo sahi nahi tha , mai apne aap se bhut naraz hoo. Mai uss vikram ko miss kar rha hoo jo yanha aane se pahe tha..

mera dum ghut rha hai,mai ynha rha to mera sans lena bhi muskil ho jayega.. 

MT'thik hai agar jana chaahte ho to kuch dino ke chale jao.. par humesha ke liye kyo..

V'kyonki mai apne sath apne purane jeevan ka kuch bhi nahi le jana chahta., bas yu samjh lijiye purana sab kuch chodkar ek nai shuruaat krna chahta hoo, '

MT ' aur rewa ?

V'rewa ko jo chahiye wo uske pass hai,uase meri nahi, rutbe ki,jarurat hai, aur wo uske pass hai,mai rhu ya nahi koi fark nahi pdhta..

Rewa--  aap kehna chahte hai ki mai is ghar me rutbe ke liye hoo aapke liye nahi'

 

V'please rewa apne aur mere dono ke upper thodha sa taras khao, yanha natak karne ki koi jarurat nahi hai,hum dono hi jante hai sach kya hai , humara rishta bhut phle hi dum tod chukka hai, accha yahi hai ki hum aaj is mre huye rishte ka antim sanskar kar de, mare huye risto ka bojh duniya me sabse bhari hota hai, aur agar uase na utara jaye to zindgi baas marne lagti hai'  jaisi ki humari, tumhe bhi humesha nai-nai planning karni padhti hai, aur mujjhe bhi ye sochna padhta hai ki rewa ko maat dene   ke liye kya nya karu.. to acchaa yahi hai ki aaj hum dono ek-dusre ko is bekar ke khel se aazad kar de..mukt kar de aur mukt ho jaye..

Rewa'aap ..

V'bass'  ab kuch aur nahi, maine divorce paper sign kar ke layer ke pass chodh diye hai.. jitni alimony chahiye bta dena' dekho rewa shalinta se maan jaogi to accha hai otherwise court se der-saver mujhe divorce mil hi jayega aur tumhe utna hi milega jitna court decide karga ,  tumhare liye ghate ka souda hoga.. mere liye na sahi ,apne liye sahi,ek nai zindgi shuru karo, tumhe bhi koi mil jayega, sugni ki tarah'hoo.. *smil*

Chalta hoo maa..

MT'par vikram

V'ab aur kuch aur nahi maa, please

MT'please vikram yanha sab'..

V'yanha sab sambhal jayega, bhaiya hai,adi bhi hai,phir aap bhi hai..  sab milkar sambhal lege ..

maa jisko jo chahiye tha usse wo mil gya, kuhu ko DV se shadi karni thi wo usne kar li, sugni aur adi ko mhan banna tha  wo ban gye,aapko JT ke yanha rishta jodhna tha,aapne bhi apne mann ki kar li,rewa ko bhi jo chahiye tha,  use bhi wo mil gya, mujhe kya mila, sivay dard,dhoke aur barbadi ke' mai shikayat nahi kar rha hoo jate waqt shikayt nahi krna chahta,  yahi shayad meri kismat thi'bas itna chahta hoo aap sab mujhe bas khusi se vida kar de.. meri apni zindgi par mera itna huq to hai na..  

* he joint his hand*..  chalta hoo,aur duaa karta hoo,ki mere sath jo  bhi huaa wo kisi aur ke sath na ho, mere beete dino ka koi bhi hissa mere samne dubara na aaye' apne jeevan ka jo adhyaye mai aaj band kar rha hoo usse mujhe kabhi dubara na kholna padhe' * he says and goes out silently* .. 

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Edited by croziaxx - 26 January 2013 at 3:30am

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english plz

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Fantastic ONE SHOT mansi Star Star Star Star Star, you are really a good writer komal was right Thumbs Up!!

i loved it.. yahi wo vikram singh thakur hai jise humne pasand kiya tha aur karte rahenge Big smile .. vikram aisa hi hai... zimedar aur  ek  acha  insaan Embarrassed. aditya 7 janam me bhi vikram ke jaisa acha aur niswarth nahi ban sakta aur sugni to kabhi usse samjh hi nahi sakti kyu ki wo nihayti giri hui hai AngryAngryAngry.

thanks for writing this OS ...it was worth reading .. for meEmbarrassed.. and i know others will also love it . mansi you have just penned down the same what was there in my heart .. !!ShockedClap

maine check kiya hai aap se koi bhul chuk nahin hui haiLOLWink

love you Embarrassed

Pankhudi !!Big smile


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Wah Wah Waah ClapClap I love it!!!

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Wow Shocked ! That was awesomeee ! I'm not good at Hindi, but I still read through all of it and loooved it Big smile (although I had trouble understanding the words in red?) I mean I could even hear the characters saying all those dialogues too! ^-^ to me, you got them on the mark, hehe, especially Vikram Embarrassed yaaay! lovely! great writing! do you write stories and such?


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Excellent Mansi
 
It took me while to read it as my hindi skills are weak
 
You are a very good writer.
 
 


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I loved it mansi

Need part 2 after vikram gone what he did 

Keep writing more i enjoyed it


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