Keeping that box of tissues handed, although only dobby needed one! and a little one for snape.
I like how arnav started this one..
"I question my uncharacteristic urge to pen my thoughts"
It is usually not him to think calmly, no? And who doesn't want to explore this side of him..
So this arnav is going to fight..! YAY. And pretty much in 3 sentences you told us, all we need to know about ASR, by telling us about why he fought against her. This is his defence, of sorts.
His description of her eyes. Juhi! again you take every minuscule detail and put it your stories. And throughout this chapter the eyes..his, hers and the devils. super effective.
This has to be my favourite part..
"Why am I only concerned with my feelings and my preferences?"
No matter why we are writing a diary, we always tend to slip into the I want mode. ASR is no different.
And there's our juhi dramatic as always..
"That eerie stillness that is never a good sign."
You wrote the whole assault part with great sensibility towards everyone involved.
I liked Arnav's commentary on Shyam:
"Shyam Jha had lost it completely.He had gone off the deep end."
But Khushi, I like the fighter you have made her. I would have expected that of her.
Then THIS JUST MAKES ME WANT TO SCREAM OUT IN FRUSTRATION:
"The stairs across the other side of the pool, how had I forgotten that?"
Now I realise why the bleep, Arnav needs a diary to think clearly! But I can't get too angry at that.
As one can never really know how they will act in a situation like that..unless they have been in it, you know. And so its all cool to say she and he could have done this, that. But you kept it realistic, just the right amount.
That "Arnavji" and everything you wrote after that..I dont think I have it in me to comment.
But I liked the fact that the family did come! Unlike the show where they turn a blind eye to most things.
Blurry haze of events was great..and you inserting those tiny snippets of just how angry/guilty arnav is at himself.."hear the result of my own mistakes.."
NK one character we always poked fun at. I like the way you made him here. He really was a great friend to Khushi always. He is the hero of this story, I am assuming. And now I realise being Arnav in this story..is what it truly means to be the anti-hero of a story.
So NK and his news? And khushi waking up?!
ps. Didn't think I could possibly write these long comments here..or rather comment on it at all.