Originally posted by deepali.rock
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Hi shirley, sorry once again, here u go:
Hey Deepali, Sorry toh ab mujhe bolna chahiye, could not reply to such a detailed and beautiful review of urs since a week almost
CHAPTER 10 REVIEW
Master blaster update is what i would like to call it. Although u were sceptical about it, according to me u have done an impressively commendable job. U winded up the story really well, without leaving any loopholes.
Oh thank you dear
I m glad it was not as bad as i thought
@Bold - i am so glad to hear that - i tell u. when i was opening so many different things at the same time, I was also worried abt closing the loops and koi loop khula na reh jaaye
Coming to this chapter:
-my favourite part being solanki apologizing to ashni again and again. Glad that finally he changed his nazariya towards ashu and now acknowledges and appreciates his love and feelings towards nidhi. Super liked those scenes. Ashu is a gem, pure heart person.
I was afraid that i could not do enough justice to that scene due to time crunch and still, i m glad i could almost get the desired effect.
@Bold - of course - after he is the hero of my ff
-DB also changed. Very good. Actually liked the way u redeemed both of them. That was singlestroke, sort of ek teer se do nishane.
THank you dear, wis i could have included an emotional scene between DB & AshNi, but again, time crunch
-solanki took up ashu's case was great. There's a scene which mentions solanki's subdued tone. Super like for that.I am glad u liked my subtle special effects
-is IK ka kya kare? Felt like strangling him alive. Solanki sudhra to ye apni aukat pe aa gya. (sorry for using that language).
Dont say sorry dear,. frankly thats the reality in courts. Opposition llawyers jitna keechad uchaal sakte hin, they go to the worst limit for that. And I is a part of the 'log' u know
-armaan is too good a friend and super adorable. Getting vicky on board, and coordinating each step. Hats off to him. Always armaan says ashu meri jaan, but would like to use the same phrase for him.
Armaan is my fav. character too. Wish could have focused on his story more, but again
-another thing that crossed my mind was that, although shyama was also good as a lawyer, but her style was different from solanki. She lacked some confidence due to being out of practice.
So, u caught this aspect - i m so glad
-now coming to ashu and nidhi, ashu thinks of nidhi and nidhi of ashu before thinking of their ownself. Ashu worried about nidhi's PCOS matter coming out in the open and nidhi assuring him of her presence. Commendable job.
@Bold - thankyou ji
-court preparation process was nice. Solanki making ashu aware of the questions and possible answers. Another impactful scene was solanki asking ashu ranga names of ashu's patients from the past. Till now only saw an egoistic, hotheaded man in solanki but first time saw him behaving as a sensible lawyer.
I wanted to add a bit of realism to the ff so added that aspect. i mglad i was successful in changing the readers' perspective abt KS
-ashu remembering jagan at the mention of the word baazi was another great one.
Thank u so much
-first wedding anniversary. Nidhi is optimistic as ever. Even imparts her optimism to ashu. Nice one. And the way she makes plans for the day after the hearing was cho chweet. That was just like our nidhi.
Yes, i am glad u liked it. I was afraid ki joote padenge that Ashu's case hearing was on their anniversary.
@bold - exactly. thats why i included the scene
-courtroom scene was pure drama. Totally fultoo filmy types. U intended to project it this way na?
To be frank, i was looking forward to penning te court scene since the day i began this ff, but unfortnately i could not get the desired effect because i was preoccupied with certain other things and had to write in a hurry.
-nidhi saying i m guilty and ashu no i am was filmy but great scene. Both cant see the other undergo any sort of suffering.
I know it was filmy but couldnt help it - that scene was inspired from Dhund (BR Chopra) but unfortunately it ended up being rather silly
-ashu's discomfort at IK's questions regarding mallika was quite natural. Ashu's is so straightforward and clean at heart that he cant even imagine such things.
Yes, I am glad i could bring it out the right way
-suhasini the killer. Omg, that was bang on. And madam to fullproof plan banake baithi thi. But sach to saamne aa hi jaata h. What mallika thot of plotting with ashu was actually stinking. How can she think of doing something with her best friend?
@Bold - of course.@italics - well, that time, she was not in a position to think, she had been thru such a bad traumatic experience, but her one wish was sstill Ashu ko paana so she went ahead with what suhasini suggested. Agar usne zara bhi socha hota, she would have realized that it would never have worked - i mean nidhi would never have believed that ashu cheated on her and even ashu himself would not have believed her the next morning. but suhasini just needed an excuse to make mallika call ashu that day.
-ashni off to private celebrations haan. Too sweet.
This was another masterstroke. U blended everything well.Thank you so very much Deepali
Review for epilogue will be here shortly.