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My First Poem - Please Read and Comment

..SaRun..KaSh.. Senior Member
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Posted: 12 December 2012 at 9:42pm | IP Logged
Hello

This is my first poem. I hope you all like it. Please comment!!! Good or Bad...PLEASE COMMENT!!! Embarrassed

Blindness
nothingness,
all around me.
I hate it,
but do I have a choice?
no.
being blind is not a choice.
who would want,
nothingness,
emptiness,
darkness.
and most of all,
blindness.

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Posted: 12 December 2012 at 9:50pm | IP Logged
No Comments!! Is it that bad!! [:'(]
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Posted: 17 December 2012 at 10:34am | IP Logged
as a beginner ...nice attempt !!
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Posted: 17 December 2012 at 12:05pm | IP Logged
Nice one!
Do write more!
kinshukkiaashiq Goldie
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Posted: 17 December 2012 at 5:15pm | IP Logged
 As u say its ur first 1 realli good done !
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