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Hey Pearl! Thanks for your PM! I wasn't able to read through immediately, which is why I'm responding so late. But I got some time today and this newest update is wonderful. Your first paragraph is one of my faves:
He said nothing and just laid down beside her, wondering what has happened to her, she used to be so chilled out, carefree, full of life always living like there is no tomorrow. But then what happened now….she does not react to anybody except kids, does not talk to anyone unless and until it is necessary, always lost in thoughts and when someone calls, she startles every time, the Aarthi he used to know, she is not that, Aarthi. He looked at her, sleeping form, few strands of her hair were on her face, and he could tell that it was irritating her, very slowly; he placed them behind her ear. Her hairs, he always had some kind of liking for them, even in college. College, a smile formed on his face, college was so different and who thought his life would be like this, that one day, he'll be so confused with his feelings for Aarthi that he can't even ask, what her problem is, and Aarthi, he somewhere, always knew she loved him and she still does, well…maybe not. Noticing her behavior from their first meeting 3 months to till now…really made him believe that. Her actions, gestures, and the fear in her eyes…. in their first meeting is still a fresh in his mind and it pricked his heart that day and whenever he remembers, it still does. That day, when they first met, after 6 years...
It has such a bittersweet undercurrent to it, which allows me to better understand Yash's curiosity and his concern about the reasons for what has changed his Aarti and scares her so much. I really enjoy how you explore Yash's attention to her and who she is.
He sighed. This was something new, Yash with addition of ji in it, he didn't like it, this ever growing formality with each passing day and her being distant, only talking with Payal and Palak, Payal ,Palak ,they always had an easy way with her and he always wondered, what kind of a bond, she has with them. In their first meeting, itself, they behaved like they have known each other since ages and as if, as if she was their own mother or his Pari. Aarthi and his angels first meeting was something, he'll never ever forget.
Aw, this paragraph about the Aarti and the kids made me smile so much.
Aarthi, was scared, how in the world, she is going to wake him up?! But whatever it is, she has to do it, no matter what. She slowly entered their room and saw Yash peacefully sleeping. She slowly went ahead and…tried to wake him up, putting a hand on his shoulder, said in a meek voice
"Yashji…Yashji….wake up, its nine, you have to go for office."
"hmmm….let me sleep"
What an ending! I'm looking forward to the continuation.
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