Swaron~OS...rose day updated pg3

hello evry1..
ths my frst os...i hv nvr wrttn ...any such thing before...
i ws jst inspired by ppl of IF..so wntd..to try..i knw i cnt match the lvl of u ppl..bt jst wntd to c hw bad i cn write
so here it:

some intro:
-sharon nd swayam r couple..only rey knws abt it..
-its rose day..boys hv reached the venue...nd girls r taking tooo long to get ready..
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sharon...hw long wil u take to reach..i cnt bear a second without u..swayam said..
swayam..it takes time to get ready..kya koi aur ladki aa gyi h..no na..c vicky he isnt calling neha nd disturbing her agn nd agn..evn u shld..w8..she ws shouting on swayam(bt she ws nt angry..she ws jst in a mood to tease her love..nd she ws actlly enjoying it..)
whn rey saw swayam..in a corner..laughing..nd his phn in his hand..he ws nt listening..wht othr person ws speaking..
he wnt near him..nd asked thrgh actions..whts d mttr..swayam..??
he said controlling his laughter..ary kch nhi siren on..rey gave a smirk..nd placed d phn on his ear..nd went frm their..
and tht ws al..she hs heard..wht he jst said...
fun soon turned into anger..
wait a second wht did u jst cal me...??
Siren...
no no no..sharon...hw cn i cl u tht..
u toh r my princess...my love..my swtheart...(boys r too gd..in it..chnging d tpc)
she blushed hard..
thn wht ws tht..siren on h..she questioned him...??
ary vo toh mai rey ko bol rha tha...
oh..accha byee...nw let me get ready.
byee..princess
sharon...to whm vr u talking...?? nd y were u blushing so hard..?simmi questioned..
neha asking d same..
sharon...oh no..hw cn i tell thm..tht i nd swayam...v r a couple...no i cnt..(agn blushing)
sharon...simmi brght hr bck..frm hr thghts..
nthng nthng...i ws jst saying...
wow..simmi u look pretty..saying ths..she wished to change d tpc..
nd ys she succeed..
nd wht abt neha..neha questnd..
ys ys u too..luk gorgeous..
expct simmi..evry1..forgot...fr whom sharon ws blushing..
she ws luking at her with those suspected eyes...
thy al finally gt ready..nd lft fr their destination...
precap:
sharon reached d venue..nd saw swayam surrouned by 10 girls..nd accpeting roses..
how ws it guyzz...??
too bad..?..bt plz cooperate..my first
wrtting..plz..
imp note:
pg 2- http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=3287488&TPN=2

Edited by ambuja4 - 13 November 2012 at 1:11am

Cute start though this part was really small

But it was quite funny, especially the siren bit

Do continue and PM me wen u do


Edited by Neeti96 - 12 November 2012 at 8:50am

nice start ...

[QUOTE=Neeti96] <font face="Comic Sans MS, Times, serif" size="3"><font color="#9900CC">Cute start though this part was really small</font>

<font color="#9933CC">But it was quite funny, especially the siren bit</font>

<font color="#9966CC">Do continue and PM me wen u do</font></font>
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thnq...
vl try to make nxt part long..

Nice one but its chota update its fun when he called siren . Next update should be big one please

thnq..
ya vl surely..infrm u..!!

thnxx...
ya nxt 1 vl b a big one..!!

That one was really funny when both Swayam and Sharon were changing the topics to avoid falling in a trap. And the precap seems interesting with Swayam accepting the roses like really?
Update soon and PM me