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Virman OS - Party Disaster (Page 8)

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Posted: 12 November 2012 at 10:53am | IP Logged
Originally posted by forever_young

OhMyGosh Gal that was so freaking adorable!! hehe thank u dear!
I loved the concept of it...<33
Haha, their friendship, hatred, possessivenes, jelousy..
it felt so real, i could totaaly imagine it..infact not only them,
but i could imagine myself there... You do?! so sweet!

Beautifully written! i remember when last year in english we had to write stories in the POV of kids,
and oh gosh..it was hard! i know right! damn hard sometimes but u can easily pick it up when u happen to live with oneLOL

But you have seriously carried this out so beautifully!! It is difficult...i think..and u have done a brilliant job!! thannks alot for the wonderful comments Hug 
<333

 

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Posted: 12 November 2012 at 4:11pm | IP Logged
Lovely story, childhood one's

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Posted: 12 November 2012 at 7:05pm | IP Logged
Should I tell you how good this is? I don't need to, I think the comments above says it all. "No Romance" is totally not the barrier to enjoy a story especially when it's on Virman!
You know how beautifully you've portrayed emotions of kids, it's really difficult to think of being their age and writing, but you've nailed it my dear. There are lines that made me crack up like badly and some which me squeal in excitement. This comment may not be the longest comment but you know what, I mean each and every single line of this comment. 

I totally agree that some writings should be only limited to one post, otherwise they'll lose it's charm. This is such kind of it. So, I don't expect a second update to this!
I lurveddd it! Do PM me if you write other os!

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Posted: 12 November 2012 at 11:24pm | IP Logged
Originally posted by Kiekeboe

Lovely story, childhood one's

thanks so much dearHug
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Posted: 12 November 2012 at 11:28pm | IP Logged
Originally posted by ITrustMyHeart

Should I tell you how good this is? I don't need to, I think the comments above says it all. "No Romance" is totally not the barrier to enjoy a story especially when it's on Virman! thanks dear...glad u liked it too
You know how beautifully you've portrayed emotions of kids, it's really difficult to think of being their age and writing, but you've nailed it my dear. There are lines that made me crack up like badly and some which me squeal in excitement. This comment may not be the longest comment but you know what, I mean each and every single line of this comment.  yep! totally ! hehe and about ur comment not being long. it is and love reading them! makes me really happy seeing it

I totally agree that some writings should be only limited to one post, otherwise they'll lose it's charm. This is such kind of it. So, I don't expect a second update to this! thanks yaar. yeah. this should be upto here only hehe. 
I lurveddd it! Do PM me if you write other os! sure dear. though it wont be that soon but il defo PM u! thank u for ur feedbaks Hug

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Posted: 13 November 2012 at 12:47am | IP Logged
Originally posted by Delena-cious

Originally posted by gsrocks

Ohh mine u reminded me of the punishment that i got for beating up a boy in my class when i was small!!! LOLhaww?! omgg!! u are a total sherni arnt ya!  I am not mentioning the punishment!! arre yaar...its bad habit to leave someone guessing Hahaha!! Ok let me come back to the story!! okay!
I am love with it!!! Viraat and maanvi were really possessive haa! And really cute and sweet at the same time. I felt pity for their parents who had to see their kids fighting like this!!every parents must have gone through this phase LOLLOL 
Ohh i want to read it again!! I am totally loving it!! awwhh!! thanks soo much dear! Hug
Keep writing !!
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ok since i loved ur OS i will tell u about the punishment!LOL i bet that boy with my new and cute umbrella as he turned around after telling an ever stupid and idiotic dialogue trying to be smart infact trying to be over smart! so my mom got to know about it and banned me from taking my favorite new purple umbrella to school almost for 3-4 months!Ouch
so that was my punishment!LOL i can tell u more stories from my own experience but for now i dont want u to get bored!!LOL

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Posted: 13 November 2012 at 6:44am | IP Logged
Originally posted by Delena-cious

Originally posted by oriyana

Ha Ha Ha Ha Ha Ha ... Please let me laugh... Ha Ha Ha Ha Ha Ha... ROFL ROFL ROFL okayy..take ur time LOL

You know why I am laughing?? BECAUSE... when you introduced VirMan as children, all I could do was imagine them with a SHORT BODY of 5 and 8 yrs, but the SAME SIZED HEAD, as they have NOW...  ROFL ROFL Please don't kill me for this... Lololzzz LOL LOL LOL OMG nahiii!! now m gonna image them! haha! il kill you! hahahaha!! It's my imagination, can't help myself Tongue

And I relate to this story very well... Big smile I am in my twenties, but still act like a child.. Big smile Not wanting to share my possessions, be it a friend or chocolates or just anything... Yeah but I share it in the last... Tongue Have to do na?? Otherwise I won't be called a GOOD GOOD girl.. LOL yes also if u dont share, youl not go to heaven too LOLOLLLZZZ LOL

It's really nice to read something related to myself... Wink aww so sweet! thank dear Hug You are Welcome!! Smile

It's Superb... You wrote all the things which only 5 and 8 yrs Kiddos can do... LOL






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Posted: 14 November 2012 at 9:37pm | IP Logged
Finally got time to unres.

Loved this one Sia..!HugIs this your first OS!!??ShockedYou are so talented girl...ClapWrite more often...Smile
Loved everything about the OS...Aww...Maanvi and Virat as kids...Big smileDay Dreaming...'

"My name is Viraat Singh Vadhera" he said with his chest puffed with pride. She didn't know how she was going to call him with that long name. so she said. "Nice to meet you Viru"..

This was my fav part!LOLLOLLOL


Their fighting ...Viruboy kissing Maya!And Maanvi fuming!ROFLVirat giving her choclates to Maya!ROFLTheir fighting!LOLAnd you including Karan also!Big smileKaran feeding M choclates and Viruboy getting angry!LOLLOLLOL


I loved the way Maanvi's thoughts about Vadhera members...esp Swamz!Big smileAnd Viren also...Smile


I seriously loved every bit of it girl...HeartHug

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