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VIRMAN OS- Kashmir NOTE ON PAGE 6 (Page 4)

hooriaa IF-Dazzler
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Posted: 11 November 2012 at 4:55pm | IP Logged
I Still Dont Believe This Was An OS I Was Like OMG Why Did You Stop
Jus Simply Amazing The Ending Left Me Breathless Lol
Loved It
Unique Idea And How U Brought Army Into It
Fabulous
Thanksz For The PM

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Posted: 11 November 2012 at 5:38pm | IP Logged
Good work again. I love how you captured Kashmir. Being a writer, I always feel a little inept at capturing places. Emotions are more my forte I suppose. Interesting characterizations.. Definitely alot to explore there. Though I have to say.. there's a certain charm to limiting some stories to one-shots. This is definitely one of them. Odd little coincedence though.. Even I can't help but obssess over a story where Virat plays a man in Uniform right now. LOL Completely different premise ofcourse. Maybe I'll actually work on that.

Okay that's besides the point.. sorry. LOL I liked the end alot, 

A small smile played on his lips at the revelation- he had a lifetime to find out now. To figure out the girl that was Maanvi Chaudhary

There was something rather brilliant about this line. Perfect end. Man its good to see some good writing on VirMan. I'm generally too lazy to go through the many FFs over here.. I'm glad I stumbled upon your work. Smile

Maham.
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Posted: 12 November 2012 at 12:05am | IP Logged
Loved it  so much .Beautifully written.Love the way how u make things beautiful and emotions intense with ur words and sprinkle ur magic on them. Thanks for the pmSmile
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Posted: 12 November 2012 at 12:48am | IP Logged
that was brilliantly written! loved each and every aspect of it.
maanvi as a majors daughter and viraat as an army officer. wow! this cant get any better than this! i could almost see this happening right infront of my eyes! beautifully written!

why did u stop there? u should really have continued ! 

beautifully written! loved it! Hug
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Posted: 12 November 2012 at 1:11am | IP Logged
A brilliant os elena! It was amazing, really different an liked the idea of virat as an army officer and manvi as the majors daughter. Thank u for the lovely os's you post
Great job
Thanx for the pm :)
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Posted: 12 November 2012 at 3:24am | IP Logged
nice part.continue soon with another os.waiting for ur updateSmile
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Posted: 12 November 2012 at 3:58am | IP Logged
lovely OS... thnkz 4 th pmSmile... update th nxt part of humsafar soon...

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Posted: 12 November 2012 at 4:16am | IP Logged
You say these are "random" os then I wonder how  a well-written perfect os would be according to you. Day Dreaming

This os totally had three wowies..
 a) Kashmir..(I love it, though I really didn't go there, but I wish I could go there someday)

b) Virat as an army man..(Are you planning to kill me?..You are one of the rare writers in this forum who with your description make Virat appear hotter than normal. You've different angle in making the male leads appear hotter. And this is swoon-worthy!

c) Of course, the interaction between VirMan..

I loved how you captured Kashmir and showed the difference between Manvi and high army officers..
You're a born prodigy in writing! If you keep writing os like these then I'm sure me and others would tell you to make a second part for every OS you writeLOL!

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