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ArHi FF:3:The BEASTS and the BLEEDING ROSES (Page 33)

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Posted: 18 November 2012 at 2:43am | IP Logged
Originally posted by A_Soul

Feeling so good' Detective Master Shashi at his work' yes yes..

Thoroughly enjoyed their convo' it was more like an interrogation' Thumbs Up

Straight questions from both d sides, but answers were so diplomatic again from both d parties.. Words are chosen so wisely'both of them were so cautious for their real intentions didn't get revealed..

Loved it.. Loved it.. JUST loved it!!     

 

So Lin darling from one liner you have shifted to big big para with best pick up words and beautiful sentence formation'Nice!Smile

 

He had been unusually quick to temper, lately, after his return from the South Village night trip. Kushi's dismissal had both hurt and angered him and he was taking it out on his soldiers, barking orders now and then, making his rounds of inspection a suffocating effort for his subordinates

Finally!!

Gen Jha.. 'badi der kar di mehrbaan aate aate'' (shown ur face after long time.. I missed you!!). So how are you' oops, u r hurt' poor Gen wounded by his, no someone else's, medicine!!

U know, lin dear.. I was waiting to see Gen Jha's reaction and effect & impact of that direct 'NO'.. And here it comes.. But to be honest I thought you will give a separate chap for it or at least half of the chap'

 

He had even stopped writing to Kushi out of his annoyance with her but, gradually; he had started missing the warmth and innocence of her written expression.

Gen dear' her innocence is contagious, no one can remain same after meeting her once'


His yearning to desperately befriend her battled with the desolation of his uncured curse and he had hoped to prepare himself to meet her again.

Ooo desperate Gen'. r u sure, u wanna meet her? Do u think she will be same with you? And ya don't you dare to tell one more lie and try to get her sympathy'


But the change of plans in his battalion's agenda set things in a tumult and he cursed his General code, wishing suddenly he had not enrolled in an occupation that was intended to release his pent-up bestial vigor and make him forget he was a cursed being.

Thank you so much to the person whom so ever has changed the plan'

 

As he stood contemplating all this, his eyes fell on the petite framed painting propped upon his worktable. A tiny slit in the ceiling of the tent let the ray of the late afternoon sun fall upon the gentle face on the painting making its eyes sparkle with a celestial cheer and its sad smile shine with an overpowering tenderness.

No point for guessing.. without a doubt the painting is of Lady Jha.

Innvalo.. Get back to work.. Here comes the hidden saying/emotions'

Each highlighted group of words over here is saying something' can you hear that.. Something like..

And ray of afternoon sun is usually quite burning.. n here it has sparkled the eyes and tender the smile..

So if I take it as,

The ray of afternoon sun = Gen jha,

as burning ray is not good for tender skin = he is not good for lady Anjali

Sparkled the eyes and tender the smile = anjali always feels better n stay happy when ever her Gen jha is around..

Uff' can't think and explain more..

 

Lin darling' fab presentation' Wow!! I literary visualized it'

My question here is why there is sad smile in painting??

 

Looking at the face, he felt a pang inside of him but he was not affected by it. Yet, he found his fingers reaching for the painting and, lifting it, his eyes ran over the image but with no feelings welling inside of him.

Perfect depiction of his current situation.. he is not more affected by Lady Anjali due to affected by khushi' yet its togetherness of few years n the relationship they have shared which will bind him with her without any feeling for her..

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His hand was still upon the painting, about to be withdrawn, when the flap of the tent was suddenly opened, sunlight bursting into the shadowed side tent. Vigilant instinct turned him about, his hand on the sword sheathed with his belt, and his eyes fell on the face of the determined villager whose silhouette stood barring the light at the entrance of the tent, his shadow falling upon the General's face and upon his hand that was still on the painting.

Best portrayal' it's so easy n thrilling to visualize it!!

 

"I write to your daughter often as time permits me in my strenuous schedule. Do you think I would warm up to her if I had another woman legally waiting at hand for me?"

Lin darling' MAY I JUST SLAP HIM ONCE for this?

 

"But a man at constant strain in the battlefield could look for other resorts if his wife is not close enough."

WOOOWWOOWW' no need to slap him' Shashi has done it so well without raising the hand!!

Undoubtedly this goes for Best SLAP, opps.., Dialogue of the update!!

 LOLClap

"I assure you sir, then, that I mean her no harm," said the soldier

Really?? I have a doubt!!!


I can say that it is only with worthy intentions that I seek her friendship."

Ya sure Gen' worthy intentions, but only for YOUSELF!!

So true...Clap

away from the horrid land of pain and misery. And doubtful deceit.

Lin'.How? I mean how you do always finish the update so wonderfully'

Here, land of pain and misery, in first sight look like talking about battle field only.. but no it also talk about the land of his life, his heart' which has pain and misery due course!

And the later part.. d dishonesty.. ya he knows very well that he was dishonest to Master Shashi..and so he is doubtful whether his dishonesty worked on him or not!!


Song of the update:

[keep looking at this place will comeback with it soon]


Oh I didn't mention about how is the update at start'. Do you think I need to!!

Enjoy

H

Soul 

 
Nice analysis dear soul... loved reading it. Smile

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Posted: 18 November 2012 at 3:05am | IP Logged
Originally posted by shass

Absolutely LOVED dis update lin.. i dnt knw wht else to say,as u kp raising da bar fr ur self..n i kp getting short of words.. nw dis is one such update dat i wud luv to read n prefer ovr ne romance update or evn ''crab hunting''..ne day..LOL
Two men !!.. Master Shashi Gupta n Gen.S.M. Jha.. one wise n othr cunning.. each to his own advantage.. but BOTH determined,though reasons vary.. come face to face.. in a casual meeting,wch is ruled by silences... silence dat whispers of awkwardness,distrust n suspicion.. followed by words dat confirms their doubts n add to their uneasiness.. one prefers cordiality n clears his intentions..othr immediately hides behind one of his many masks!! chooses to steer his way thru flattery.. but da wise one sees thru da lies.. da cunning gets intimidated, insecure!!
Both recognize eachothr.. both get alert.. bt wisdom has a li'l upper hand ovr da Slyness.. bt , da cunning is aftr all, practiced in his art..he's an old player! ..so he gvs it one more try..da master hits whr his doubts nag him da most.. asks of his marriage..denied wth cordiality.. asks of his ''leisure''..denied wth insecurity.. asks abt da picture..denied wth anothr lie.. Master's wisdom saw thru it all.. Da Gen's try, on being smarter.. his failure at it n irritation..n finally a lie n coldness !! no1 wud evr turn his sister's picture down on a table n try to draw da attention away frm it.. there it all stinks !! da Gen is clever enuf to undrstnd it n dismisses him eagerly..
What outstanding piece of writing dear lin.. da subtlety with wch u bring these two ppl n their actions in da light..Beautiful !! ..ClapClapClap
A cunning man,master at his own game..N a wise father,who's love fr his daughter knws no limit.. hits n  cracks ,da General's hard n deceitful mask n sees thru it..whtevr little he sees, he feels uncomfortable abt it..leaves da General,considering him a ''Potential Threat'' to his scheme/agenda !!
i hear muffled sounds of war drums in da distance... Question is who will Destiny favour???
After all..

''"Wars and all related to them, one can never be sure of," stated the young envoy, "When it will begin, when it will end, who will die and who will remain...''"

PS;
  • loved loved..

'''wishing suddenly he had not enrolled in an occupation that was intended to release his pent-up bestial vigor and make him forget he was a cursed being.'''

it spoke volumes abt da General..Thumbs Up

  • i wntd to say dis fr a long time nw.. n i thnk tody's da best time.. i alws luvd da fact dat nani ddnt meet da Gen alot n whtevr li'l she knws of him,is frm othrs n perhaps hr own heart's wounds wr hr sole focus at da time.. othrwise her wisdom wud hv also seen thru him.. lucky General !!

PPS;

Dear Plagiarizer,

since dis chp ws dedicated to u..i feel obliged to dedicate dis vry spot to u tday.. altho u r so NOT worth it !! had u chosen to b part of dis journey wth us,lyk rest of us CACs.. i wud hv been da first one to welcome u n love u n wud hv admired ur taste.. but u chose to b a THIEF, CHEATER N HYPOCRITE.. but most of all, u chose to disrespect n hurt sum1 who's extremely dear to me. let me warn u, i DNT FORGV PPL WHO TRY TO HARM MY OWN !!! whethr its a ''gentler phase'' or a ''drastic phase''..u will NOT find my friend alone in it !! b wise n ''LAY OFF'' !!!





 
Brilliant dear shass, nice insight on both characters. Loved reading it... Smile
 
@ PPS... i believe in action than words. Dont waste ur words on such unworthy people. Do you really think anyone with conscience will do such things? Again, if they dont have a clear conscience then they wont be bothered by our words. So better we take some severe action to stop the person and solve the issue.

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Posted: 18 November 2012 at 4:21am | IP Logged
loved the update..really very good...keep it up..please do update soon..Smile

 & a question  who plagiarized the story???Angry


Edited by Surya.Ravi - 18 November 2012 at 4:22am

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Posted: 18 November 2012 at 5:28am | IP Logged
My comment edited with the SONG of the update.. on page 31..
If you guys wanna check it out...!! Smile

hey and i can see two new 'like'rs of my comment.. vrinda-95 and Aura7
thank you girls...all of you 

Special mention to Aura... 
I have observe that u come in INN only in absence of Lin... not fair dear.. dont stop it afterwards, we all love to have u here... (sorry if my observation is wrong)

N ya i love the profile pic u hv set... pic of such a confident n self made lady whose life is full of colors though i could feel some kind of pain on her face...
when ever i read ur name, i actully visualize you like that lady... 

Thank you very much for sending, no not pigeon but a Eclectus PARROT with the update
this is just bec it goes so well with ur profile pic n imaginary personality i have...!! Smile


Great Colorful Parrot


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Posted: 18 November 2012 at 5:59am | IP Logged
Arre yaar! Why cant people just appreciate other people's talent!!!!! I have lost far too many good authors to plagiarizing! I am super pissed at these idjits!!!! Just read and appreciate! WHY steal thats not even yours!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! AngryAngry

The Update: The lies keep falling out of Shyam's mouth! Some day it will bite him in the a**! 
The best part about it was when he picked up the frame and admitted that he felt nothing at all... I am assuming that was Anjali's picture.

Another piece of Mr. Jha in the puzzle.

Aura, thanks a ton for the PM and for updating the story. :)

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Posted: 18 November 2012 at 7:30am | IP Logged
okie ... late again!! 
but nevermind ... better late than never!! 

@Aura: Thanks 'cup cake'!! for passing it out to us!! Monkey Emoticons

@Lin... Girl!! i adore u for making this effort to help us going ... given the current state of mind ... i really really depend on the FFs ... yes i am talking abt the Show fiasco... 
Sweetheart ... i truly hope u r not compromising on the time supposed to be spent with ur parents... 
u have been generous enough in giving us 2 updates already... Monkey Emoticon Cici

Now for the chapter

@Comrades...Hmmph!! honestly the most hatred one so far!! A must for the story i know .. yet i cant help it ... just cant stand the mention if this char called Gen. Jha...(Sorry Lin!Monkey Emoticon
I really thot of skipping it totally ... but gud i read it ... coz i hate him all the more now!!Monkey Emoticons

@Gen.Jha... U BETTER STAY AWAY from my poor Khushi!! Monkey Icon
@Gen. Jha... i really hope the war end with u ... Monkey Icon
@Gen. Jha... i have no more time time to waste on u... so take a hike! Monkey Icon

@Shashi... Master Gupta... Dont fall for his words... please dont ... Monkey Emoticon

@Shashi... I really really hope u will use ur mind and take proper decisions...Monkey Icon

Note: this is serious so no monkey business below  ...
@Lin... 'plagiarism' - Now this is really going overboard... whats with ppl man i do not understand!! this is the 5th case i am hearing in the week!! whoever it is ... pls stop doing it... stealing is never a good thing to do... 
I do understand ur stance Lin... but my sincere suggestion will be to move it out to a blog... and provide access to the comrades... i know this may involve tedious admin job... but i am sure some of us here can help you out...  

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