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Posted: 05 November 2012 at 12:28pm | IP Logged
OS: Rishtey

 Ram and Priya fight for Pihu… in court… Last day decision is to be made…

Once, it appears Ram might win.. while other moment it appears… Priya might win…

The court case had impacted pihu a lot… she was changed from a cheerful doll.. to a sad doll confused… now a days she didn't even talk to her happy and tiger…

She was confused… she was unhappy… she knew that her parents don't fight in front of her.. but they fight when they are alone… she had seen them fight when they were alone…

It's the D-day… Pihu took her dolls with her.. to the court… she was sitting with the dolls…

Before giving the decision… The judge asks.. pihu.. with whom does she want to live?

Judge: beta aap kiske saath rehna chahenge…? Aapke papa ke saath ya phir mumma ke saath?

Pihu looked at Priya and Ram… and then at Rajat and Cady… and then to judge…

Pihu: judge uncle.. main jinke saath kahungi… aap mujhe unke saath rehne ko kahenge…?

Judge: haan beta…

Pihu: agar main mumma kahu toh?

Judge: toh aap mumma ke saath rahenge…

Pihu: agar main papa kahu toh…?

Judge: toh aap papa ke saath rahenge…

Pihu thinks for a while and says.. mujhe naa… meri mumma aur papa ke saath rehna hai.. judge uncle…

Judge was dumbstruck by pihu's words… and so were ram and priya.. they both were looking at each other…

Pihu: pata hai judge uncle.. mumma kehti hai ke agar main papa ke saath Km me rahumgi toh main rich ho jaungi.. papa mujhe bahut pyar karenge aur mere saare wishes pure karenge… aue main bade ghar me rahungi aur happy happy rahungi…

Lekin… big house… happy house nahi hota na judge uncle…

Pata hai jab hum dubai me the hum chote house me rehte the.. main mumma aur golu uncle bahut happy happy the…

Pihu: ran to her chair.. and pulled.. happy and gave it to Ram and said… papa.. ye doll… aapne diya tha jab aap golu uncle the… aur dubai me the.. and we were happy at that time but yaha Mumbai me na hum happy nahi hai… mumma… aur aap sirf jhagda karte hai… she tells papa… ye happy ke saath baat karke… happy hojao naa.. aur mumma ke saath friendhip karlo naa… please… phir hum sab saath me rahenge.. dubai me… Mumbai me aap sirf jhagda karte ho…

Ram choked listening to Pihu's words…

Ram: in a choked voice… rockstar.. I promise.. main naa.. apaki mumma pe nahi chilaunga.. aap na.. mere saath rehne aajao..

Pihu: matlab aap mumma ke saath friendship karoge aur mumma ko aapke saath ghar lejaoge… phir hum teeno.. mumma ke room me rahenge… green world me…

Ram: just shook his head… and hugged pihu and looked at Priya and lowered his eyes.. indicating a no to his wish…

Priya understood the meaning… tears were rolling down her cheeks… she was broken…

Ram: pihu.. judge uncle se kaho ke aap papa ke saath rahoge…

Pihu: looked at priya… and then at Ram… and said papa… aap naa… golu uncle zyada ache the… aap naa.. papa nahi.. angry papa ho… mumma pe sirf… chilate ho…

Ram and priya were silent…

Judge: beta… aap batao.. aap kiske saath rahoge…?

Pihu crying.. mujhe… mere happy mumma papa ke saath rehna hai… fighting mumma papa ke saath nahi rehna hai… and runs off the court room…

Ram and priya… were looking at each other…

Priya: pihu

Ram: Rockstar

Both ram and Priya run behind pihu…

Pihu runs off… the court.. and runs on the road… when she is hit by the fast approaching car…

Priya screams… Pihu…

Ram screams… Rockstar…

Priya picks up.. Pihu… in her lap.. blood oozing out  from her head..

Priya: crying.. ram.. Ram… doctor ko bulayiye naa.. please… pihu ke sir se kitna khoon.. nikal raha hai…

Priya: pihu bacha… say something naa…

Ram calls ambulance…

In ambulance..

Ram and priya hold pihu's hands…

Priya: Ram.. please… kuch kijiye.. mere pihu ko bachiayiye… please…

Ram: tears.. rolls down his eyes.. he recalls the wonderful moments.. spent with her.. he recollects.. pihu's words in court… he closes his eyes… when tear rolls down…

In hospital…

Ram: do whatever you want to .. save my angel.. my pihu… please…

After sometime…

Doctor: Mr. Kapoor.. pihu is critical… bahut saara khun beh gaya hai…

Ram: Doc… do whatever you want to please… jitna paisa chahiye.. le lijiye…

Doc: we are trying our level best.. sir…

Ram turns around.. and sees priya.. in temple… he goes to temple.. and says.. sab thik ho jaayega priya.. believe me… main duniya ka sabse acha doctor le aunga.. they will treat pihu.. priya…

Priya smiles and says.. kisse dilasa de rahe  hai Ram… mujhe yaa apne aap ko? Uaad hai 6 sal pehle.. bhi aapne aise hi jhoota waada kiya tha.. ke aap .. mujhe jail se bahar niklalenge…  lekin aap naakamiyaab the Ram…

Ram: priya… I was helpless… that was the worst part of my life…

Priya: kyun ram.. kyunki aapne.. mujhe kho diya? Kabhi mere baareme socha.. aapne…? Ye jaante hue ke mere pati zinda hai… mera parivaar.. zinda hai.. kaise… jee payi hoon… ram kapoor ki biwi jone ke bajaai bhi.. rent den eke liye rona padta tha mujhe…

Ram: who.. tumhari galti thi priya… tum khud.. dur hui thi humse..

Priya: nahi.. ram.. main khud nahi.. balki. Haalat ne dur kiya tha mujhe.. bilkul waise hi jaise haalat ne aapko majboor kiya… ye mane ke liye.. ke main mar  chuki hoon…

Ram: lekin.. maine tumhe zinda rakha yaha.. apne dil me… aur tumne.. hume.. jeete ji.. maar diya priya.. hamare rishte ko.. maar diya…

Priya: main aayi thi waapas ram.. main aayi thi… KM.. lekin.. sab waha KM me… meri 13th mana rahe the…  kaise.. main aapki zindagi narak banati… aaap tut gaye the.. mere jail jaane ke baad…  isliye socha mere marne ki khabar achi thi…

Ram: achi thi…? Tumne mere bachi ko mujhse dur rakha… ye acha tha?

Priya: call kiya tha aapko.. maine call kiya tha aapko dubai se…… 1 baar nahi.. pata  nahi kitne baar.. lekin aapne mere phone nahi uthaye… aur jab aapne.. phone uthaya.. tab aapko bolte hue suna… "aapke kaan ki baali achi hai" kaash aapne mujhse baat ki hoti ram… kash

Ram recalls.. the day… when he had told the lady in restaurant.. about the earring…

Ram: arre.. who main tumhare liye.. le raha tha… and wipes his sweat… and groans… hmmm.. uhhh

Priya: maana maine galti ki.. lekin… haalat ne mujhse who galti karwayi.. I ma sorry…

Ram: galti sirf tumhari nahi.. meri bhi hai priya.. maine.. sirf who kitaab.. landlide waali jagah pe dekhkar… maan liya.. ke meri priya.. mar gayi… duiniya ki maan.. li… jab mera dil nahi maan raha tha.. kaash.. maine yakeen nahi kiya hota.. kaash maine.. phone utha liya hota… kaash.. maine.. niharika ma ape itna.. andh vishwaas na kiya hota.. kaash me sid ke galtiyon ko andekha nahi karta… kash

Ayesha: comes running.. priya diii.. Ram jiju.. pihu.. pihu…

Priya: kya hua pihu ko.. ayesha

Ayesha: di.. she is critical.. she needs you both,…

They are about to leave…

When Ayesha says.. I am sorry dii and jiju.. I spoiled your life… and hands over.. divorce paper.. to ram.. and says.. I am sorry jiju… please take care of khush.. and leaves them forever… (I am not interested in explaining how ayesha.. changed.. plz… rehem karo mujhpar.. ;-) I leave it to CV's)

Both run towards the ICU…

Pihu was breathing with difficulty…

Ram; pihu beta.. aap chahte ho naa.. ke.. aap happy mumma ke saath rahoge.. dekho.. hum happy rahenge.. aur mumma aur papa saath rahenge aapke… rockstar.. jaldi thik ho jao.. beta…

Priya haan baby… tumhe kuch nahi.. hoga…  you will be alright.. baby..

Pihu: mumma.. mujhe kuch nahi hoga.. main.. aapki… strong girl hoon naa… mumma… holds ram's and priya's hands..

2 years down the lane…

In hospital…

Ram is walking through the passage.. tensed.. wiping his sweat.. talking to himself.. rockstar… I am nervous…

Pihu: oh papa.. don't get nervous.. mumma is a strong girl…

Ram: I know that you are strong gorl.. and mumma.. is a strong girl… but I am not strong naa..

Pihu giggles…

Ram: pihu…

When Doctor.. comes in…

Doctor: Mubarak ho.. Mr. Kapoor.. ladka hua hai…

Ram: whoa.. thank you doctor..  and takes baby boy in his hand..

Pihu: looks at baby.. and says… my lil brother

Ram: doc: priya..?

Doc: she is fine… you can see her in some time…

In Hospital ward…

Priya on the bed… was tired…

Ram: thanks.. priya… for giving me this happiness…

Priya smiles…

When pihu says.. mumma.. papa.. was so afraid.. he was walking from, here to there… pata hai.. sabhi doctors , nurse aur warrd.. boy ko tang kiya.. he is so naughty and bad boy naa.. who mujhe bhi nervous kar rahe the… and giggles..

Priya looked at Ram.. and smiled.. and signaled at Pihu.. and said.. aapki beti hai.. chidane me.. ustaad hai…

Ram: so what.. mera beta aagaya na ab.. hum sab milke tumhari band bajayenge…

When pihu goes out to tell gud news to her daadi and chachu'z and nana and naani…

When ram and priya think about the flashback.. that it was pihu's accident that united them.. that made them talk and clear differences.. and fear of losing pihu.. made them realize that they were not kids to play with their lives… and spoil their future…

When Ram says… remember hum ghabra rahe the.. ke jab mere bache 18 ke honge tab main 60 ka Buddha ho jaunga… I was so wrong.. I am still young  and you are a beautiful… mother at 41 priya…

Priya aur aap … handsome dad at 51… and evergreen romantic…hubby..

----------------The End……………………

 Hi frnz,

i have tried to capture my views.. i changed from a tragic  end t happy end... hope you all like it... 

 Lucky

 

 

 

 

 

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Posted: 05 November 2012 at 12:42pm | IP Logged
Woww that was indeed cute...
i liked the ayesha part ... and last lines were awesome
mother at 41 father at 51 ..beautiful and romantic..
kithna pyarra OS hai ...

hmm you thought of ending with peehus death or what hmmm but i loved this ending ..
Thank you

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Posted: 05 November 2012 at 1:19pm | IP Logged
Amazing OS!!! Bahooth sahii hain and hope aise hee kuch hO and RaYa juldi hee ek hO jaye!  It would be awesome and hope your writings sae kuch seekhae CVs' and not turture us!!!

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Posted: 05 November 2012 at 3:52pm | IP Logged
That was so sweet and perfect update. The best part was the ending. One thing is clear that Only peehu can reunite raya.. Lets see what happen. Thank for writting this os.

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Posted: 05 November 2012 at 8:10pm | IP Logged
awww lucky di chalo baksh diya for Aayesha's parts but i loved this small FF hope RaYa unites soon in show too...can u plz post the tragic end of strory too really want to know what was it... plz... but this was even awesome...

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Posted: 05 November 2012 at 11:20pm | IP Logged
It's so cute, sometime I really think that if people talk then no misunderstandings will crop up but log baat hi nahi karte, agar baat karte toh divorce rate humare desh me itna nahi barta, common talk and come to a solution, divorce cannot be a solution, over here Peehu being the bridge, well done bachha, now in reality also make RaYa united, luved the concept, and end kings bohot pasand aya, keep up writing such stuffs

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Posted: 05 November 2012 at 11:31pm | IP Logged
Awww such a nice OS, good u didnt explain ayesha change of heart, i think nobody is interested in reading her side of storyLOL

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Posted: 05 November 2012 at 11:50pm | IP Logged
very nice os though i didnt like pihu's accident part but it lead to this duffers mature talk so i am fine n thanq

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