Hey Jiya
First of all I regret how i missed this story during the reign 2012,when i was one of the hyper active reader here..But people's says na better late than never so i am here,And i am gladly thankful to u for writing this n also giving me a chance to read this commendable work of Urs..The title name "Come n Heal me" itself has a big impact on a reader like me..I just loved it the way, it is from sharon to swayam "Come n heal me"..Now the concept was outstanding n much unique for me,I always wished to get read something about this track of Sharon going to delhi,And what would be the major events take place between the love life of SwaRon..So finally i got to read here..I must say u have such a huge imagination power..I just loved the begining of story where u showed mutiple emotional trails of characters like swayam,sharon and rey as a catalyst there..The whole story plot including ur way to execute ur particular track,handling over the characters and their emotional potrayel was just AMAZING means A-M-A-Z-I-N-G..I liked how u presented reyam's bond here..And trully Flashback part was heart wrenching,Swayam's POV was beautifully conveyed including his pain,his feelings n his wait for sharon.. Seriously it made me cry (Though i am hell not an emotional type of guy)..The letter idea was giving more grip to explain the pain of a Swayam..Honestly Great done..
Now the chapter 2 was heart touching+heart wrenching both..She is getting engaged n here he is in full pain..Honestly due to ur writing the pain of the character can be literally felt..Their sudden meet was beautifully written..I just loved ur individual pov description of Rey,Swayam and Sharon,Here the pain of sharon was heart wrenching..I just loved all the lines of this update to showcase the vulnerable sides of SwaRon..
The smile that he had been longing to see for years. Years? It felt like decades. No, maybe centuries. He froze. She looked so ethereal, and so much like a dream.
What had squeezed his heart in pain was the fact that she had never laughed like that when she was with him. He could never give her the same happiness. He had never seen her laugh so heartily, so openly, in front of anyone. He had never been able to have the right to whisper something to her that would make her blush.
Above one,I loved it totally
Chapter 3 was brilliant to the core..Woha I am still speechless,i dont have enough words to described the brilliance of this update..I was heavily heavyhearted after reading this chronicle piece of description..The whole atmosphere u showed was painful indeed but glad to see that it was not sharon engagement..Seriously u have penned down all the possible emotions so so beautifully..The complete sceneario between reyam,sharon and karan was painfully described..Here loved the way how rey made him understand n was helping him..Also i got to read small Sharon POV here n that was way too too amazing done..Then swayam dialouge delivery was perfectly apt but heart wrenching to read..Again Great Done..
Now Chapter 4 was literally a long deed for u,How u wrote..!!Its commendable dear.The update was fabulous offcource,just loved the way u showed SwaRon love,their pain,the sudden insecurities in the emotional battle,their confusion,their emotions,their care n feeling for each other, was beautifully penned down by u..It was quite painful deed yet so magical part..I really liked reyam convo here where rey tried to give him a look change n he was'nt ready to let go of his old hair style,This moment was so swayamish,A perfect loverboy..Then description of whole dance performance including SwaRon infinite eye lock followed by their emotional conversation by eyes was beautifully captured n was beautifuly penned..Honestly i loved the all dialouges here but sorry couldnt able to post as the whole update was fully mesmerizing..Here swayam's state of mind+heart was fully justified,loved the way he shown his concern for sharon after all what happened..Last the conversation between SwaRon was amazingly penned..Seriosuly again great Done..
Now the big shots is here in this update chapter 5 a+b..Wow i dont have enough words to express how i felt after reading both parts..I am just speechless as ur work is beyond appreciation but however i am trying my best to give u honest feedback here..The updates was literally a big trails of emotions n feelings of individual characters..In the begining read of part (a) i was not surprised by the sharon story as i could have expected something related to buisness loss or related to her dad but when i found that she is suffering from cancer,i was literally Dumbstruck..i never ever had imagined that..Cancer is a very pathetic
disease and the patient used to suffer all the vulnerable n hell moments of his life..Here Sharey confrontation n their convo was brilliantly penned..Throughout story u showed reyam bond but here Sharey part was outstanding..Rey as a character was awesome through out the league but here he surly deserved this confrontation..All the dialogues were crisp,to the exact point of inclination as per readers n somehow they contain huge impact on readers to went numb..In each single dialouge u showered us with thousands of emotion to rebate.SwaRon phone convo was emotionally beautiful,The way he tries her to convince her to fight together n to challenge destiny,the way he make her understand and answered her each reason in such an aweful manner..Swayam lines were outstanding..i just loved it..
Coming on to the second part,i was in big shock in the begining,As ur begining was hell scary,i was not fully prepared for sad end coz i never mind to read sad end but here,i hearlty wished them to be together as they already suffered a lot of pain and i really dont want them in pain any more.But after few moments,i was so relived to see sharon alive..Although the event was sad as swayam lost his mother but it contain a small packet of happiness in that As finally both getting the happiness both deserved from destiny..In short i loved the way u have beautifuly conveyed their 4 years journey of their reunion and the way they still fighting together against fate.I just loved it..Coming to the the rest of the part,i like swayam how he confronted sharon,his guilt and how he promised her that he would always be there as a support for her with a smile on his face..Trust me this moment is one of the most beautiful romantic moment here..Finally u ended here by giving such a blissfull end by giving SwaRon together..just fabulous..
This one is one of the best story on SwaRon i have ever read here..I was constantly reading this since a month ago after getting this SS link from u Jiya..U are just amazing writer,And now i can easily say,u are my one of the favorite writer of SwaRon,I cant wait to read ur other works..It was a sher delight as a reader to read this commendable piece of work..I am feeling much happy to appreciate u n ur work here..God Bless u dear and yeah keep writing and please dont forget to pm me..
P.S Thanx to the mod for reopening this thread again becoz of me,I am also thankful to u jiya for putting ur efforts in this process as i know u are quite inactive here..
Now i'll meet u on ur OS which u had sent me,I'll surly read n get back to u soon with my feedback..
P.P.S Sorry for the long comment,i wonder how i typed as i was fully engrossed in this master creation of urs..Offcource great work..
Cheers,
Prateek
Edited by prateek.007 - 9 years ago