Posted: 19 October 2012 at 11:41am | IP Logged
Originally posted by marauderPree,
Somehow I don't feel that sharing a long passionate kiss and knocking out a 12ft troll should be considered under same category . While second one would definitely win you friends but I would not be so sure about the first scenario. As per me its like a double edged sword - it could go either way, more likely the way in which the guy ( lets face it will guy who will be the facing the physical harm, girls will be mostly affected emotionally ) is gonna end up getting slapped or bitten up by sandals of not one but two girls.. But considering the basic characters of our protagonist and the situation of this story I guess this friendship is more or less possible here in this one shot.
When I read this OS I tried my level best to not like this OS. But I couldn't do so even though it was on the most unlikely pair of the show; the pair which give more sibling vibe than of a couple. To be honest KD had more chemistry with his harmonica and Panchi with her chocolates, than they both have with each other. But still the story was presented in such a sensible manner that one couldn't help but get engrossed in it. I'm sure after reading it ek baar to sabke dimag mein ye baat jarur aayi hogi what if something like this happens in the show?
Now coming to writing. I just love how you write KD's character in your OS's either this or other. No one makes him wear the basic essence of his character - 'sarcasm' better than you. And what's even better is that you give him a subtle sense of humour which is rarely seen in the show. For example while reading this I was LMAO when he was counting of reasons to beat the crap out of that guy. . Splendidly done. And coming to Miss Panchi Rastogi. My God what had you done to sweet bholi bhali Panchi. But I guess after last episode who knows we could see this version of Panchi too. I loved the edge you have given to her here. Her frustration her anger which is always bottled up has nicley been given an outlet in this OS. And her first initial conversation with KD was full on paisa vasool moment of this OS.
Now finally coming to he 'controversial' portion of this OS . Although I wouldn't want something even close like this on show but I wouldn't deny that it's plausible . Especially after the play of words by you creating the situation and expressing the emotions, actions and mental state of both. I guess this is called loosing oneself in the moment . Ingeniously penned . Then the final conversation. I had expected it to be one awkward one but I guess I liked this one better. But I have one confusion. What do you mean by ' But somehow in each of their brains, they were whizzing around as a
question.' . Don't tell me they actually harboured teeny tiny feeling for each other.
As usual splendid work Pree but I am certain I won't be reading it again.
P.S - BTW when are you updating Starting Anew ?
I guess this would be the least understood OS of mine, especially by you, since HP readers have a knack of reading emotions behind anything.
The reference. Do you know the feeling of being frustratingly stuck up in a feeling that doesn't seem to be fulfilled or move on? And do you know the mistakes you end up committing in that frustration? And when somehow it isn't such a huge problem it could've turned up into. It's as lucky as knocking out a mountain troll in your first year. Also as huge a feat.
Why would a guy get a slap if the girl was equally guilty? And why would he get a sandal from the other girl when it's not going to be disclosed?
I certainly don't understand why just because people imagine them as sibling-y they are so wary of the idea of intimate friends. And the kiss were, was plain physical with zero emotional level. I've indicated that at every moment of the OS.
She's not gaining something being bholi bhaali, I just gave her a moment to vent out all that's pent up. Thank you for liking something in the OS.
That sentence had nothing to do with PanSh. The reason they were questioning it was because they were questioning if they really liked RV and Kiya the much they thought and if so, was it really the correct thing to do considering their individual conditions.
Can you give me the reason for not wanting to read it again?
To reply honestly, I don't think I'm continuing Starting Anew. Or even as a matter of fact, write for some time.
Was nice hearing from you after so long.
P.S. Don't mind anything in here. You have just baffled me.