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NEW OS: Shot through the heart </3 (Page 5)

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Posted: 23 October 2012 at 3:22am | IP Logged
Sad story hai? Disapprove
Main nahi padh paungi.. Cry Baad mein bura lagta rehta hai.. incomplete-incomplete of sorts.. Ouch
I got your PM, and from "Ek Bheegi si Love Story" i know you write really well..Clap
But, sad kyu.. Shocked

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Posted: 23 October 2012 at 4:27am | IP Logged
Originally posted by cracked

wowww...this is such an excellent piece of wrtingClap 

especiallyy the part where arjun saw arohi ,,,, u have described it with such perfectionClap

Arjuns eyes lit up the moment he saw Arohi, standing at the entrance. He still could not hate her, or even be angry with her. Just one look and the longing in his eyes returned, softening his features and his heart. His gaze swept over her face hungrily, drinking in her beauty which he was devoid of, for the past one month. He had eyes only for her, completely ignoring the large male arm that she was clinging to.


infact the whole OS is just superbbbClap awesome description of expressionsClapClap
thanks dear... it was a very emotional one for me to write Smile will be putting up a sequel soon!

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Posted: 23 October 2012 at 4:29am | IP Logged
Originally posted by -sanju-

Sad story hai? Disapprove
Main nahi padh paungi.. Cry Baad mein bura lagta rehta hai.. incomplete-incomplete of sorts.. Ouch
I got your PM, and from "Ek Bheegi si Love Story" i know you write really well..Clap
But, sad kyu.. Shocked

padhle padhle! isska sequel is coming up Wink

its supposed to be sad sweetheart... i wanted to explain the pain of loss and helplessness! 
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Posted: 23 October 2012 at 4:48am | IP Logged
pls update the sequel soon will be waiting

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Posted: 23 October 2012 at 5:39am | IP Logged
Originally posted by cherry227

Originally posted by cracked

wowww...this is such an excellent piece of wrtingClap 

especiallyy the part where arjun saw arohi ,,,, u have described it with such perfectionClap

Arjuns eyes lit up the moment he saw Arohi, standing at the entrance. He still could not hate her, or even be angry with her. Just one look and the longing in his eyes returned, softening his features and his heart. His gaze swept over her face hungrily, drinking in her beauty which he was devoid of, for the past one month. He had eyes only for her, completely ignoring the large male arm that she was clinging to.


infact the whole OS is just superbbbClap awesome description of expressionsClapClap
thanks dear... it was a very emotional one for me to write Smile will be putting up a sequel soon!


oh thats great... i ll read it for sureBig smileBig smile

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Posted: 23 October 2012 at 6:14am | IP Logged
Originally posted by cherry227

Originally posted by -sanju-

Sad story hai? Disapprove
Main nahi padh paungi.. Cry Baad mein bura lagta rehta hai.. incomplete-incomplete of sorts.. Ouch
I got your PM, and from "Ek Bheegi si Love Story" i know you write really well..Clap
But, sad kyu.. Shocked

padhle padhle! isska sequel is coming up Wink

its supposed to be sad sweetheart... i wanted to explain the pain of loss and helplessness! 

kyu yaar! hum bechare bacche inn bade bade shabdo ke bojh ko nai jhel payenge.. Disapprove.. ROFL..

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Posted: 23 October 2012 at 11:10pm | IP Logged

I'm so sorry Sheetal I haven't commented sooner but I really need to ask where you've been hiding this talent!  You are such a greater writer.   The way you've described Arjun and Arohi's pain and my poor Arjun's anguish...just Amazing.  And I loved the concept..how creative to weave the story around the song.  So well written and I felt for Arjun more then anything.  I know Arohi thought what was she was doing was for him but couldn't she see that compared to her everything else was trivial to him.   

I loved this paragraph, it sent chills down my spine.

"Amongst the din of music and chatter. she could hear the tiny sound of a ring dropping on the wooden floor behind her. The clang of metal against wood was too small a noise to be noticed, but to Arohi it sounded like a door banged shut, bolted. To Arjun it was a gunshot, fired straight to his heart."  

Wow!  That was so well written, totally grabbed me.  The words were just so powerful...so final.

Can't wait to read more of your work.  Will comment soon on the other ones too.Smile


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Posted: 24 October 2012 at 2:17am | IP Logged
Originally posted by -sanju-

Originally posted by cherry227

Originally posted by -sanju-

Sad story hai? Disapprove
Main nahi padh paungi.. Cry Baad mein bura lagta rehta hai.. incomplete-incomplete of sorts.. Ouch
I got your PM, and from "Ek Bheegi si Love Story" i know you write really well..Clap
But, sad kyu.. Shocked

padhle padhle! isska sequel is coming up Wink

its supposed to be sad sweetheart... i wanted to explain the pain of loss and helplessness! 

kyu yaar! hum bechare bacche inn bade bade shabdo ke bojh ko nai jhel payenge.. Disapprove.. ROFL..
haha! LOL

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