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You were wrong''hum woh nahin jo dar jaye waada kar ke muqar jaye..now i know how to extract a timely comment from u
Rose rose rose''''wow!!3 times Rose, was it that good? Now I understand what was missing but you didnt tell me that something was missing , sometimes it's necessary to create ripples in a silent ocean..hmm right, that update is that ripple..yeah may be it was the right time to bring in a twist or jolt to move the story ahead , after reading this update I realized that all the previous 11 chapters were just establishing the story, of course there have been developments like the two bonding together..yes this ff is actually slow if compared to my previous ones ..here things will build up gradually, but still kahani toh ab shuru hui hai, it was never about how they fall in love, it's about, the destiny of that love!!..bingo! Okay the opening scene''''the absence of dutta was quite appropriate but I hope that someday he's there, not only witnessing their baby but also the mixed emotions first time parents go through, which nakusha went through..your wish is under consideration ''that makes me remember clap for you very good move''..what supriya witnessed was happiness or may be euphoria even but naku witnessed mixed emotion, which cannot be termed or categorized, it can only be felt '.happy you could feel those emotions ..thanks a lot.I love how you make sure through these little things the biological mother stays distinguished from the 'ummm I don't know what term to use for supriya..lol ..even i am trying to figure out what should i call sups,..okay what I loved next or say have been loving from the very first beginning''you as a narrator always justify supriya..thank u thank u aish , honestly you are the only one who doesn't pounce on sups ... what i am trying to show is that she is imperfect for dutta ...she is simply not meant for her because both of them are quite different from the other..agreed she has shades of grey but had she been a hardcore ruthless gangster's wife like anna then she would have been a perfect wife..i think i have told u this before, then you throw a circumstance where the readers only start expecting her to act negative (thanks to the brilliant characterization of yours)..thanks so much for the appreciation''and nobody blames you that in order to justify the extra marital affair,you have created a negative character..there has to be some justification for an extra marital affair ..lack of compatibility came to my mind hence using it. The complication in the pregnancy came as a biggest blow to me..lol..u r not the only one who can give shocks'.was not expecting it, seriously'..and I can well imagine how fruitfull it's gonna be for the leads relationship bonding and by the help this one development you can weave the story in a way that no body will throw you out of the forum....we shall see that
And the next shock, he asked what the doctor said, plz ek baar toh sirf dutta aur nakusha ka check up session plan karo '.there is time for that ..relax n wait patiently.and oh my my'..he doesn't get irritated at her inquiries!!.he is getting used to it..But seriously what followed next bring down all my sympathies for nakusha''this cunning woman she knows how kind hearted my sweetu is'that's why that's why'..now this was missing in your comments ..lol..she proposed that college idea'.in order to be mahan in my sweetu eyes'and I don't understand why supriya was shocked when dutta supported nakusha'.mera aisa danveer pati hota toh main toh chill marti...no seriously that's understandable the reaction from supriya was quite expected''.but what I loved was imaging him engrossed in the work uff that hard look he has while doing that and when his commanding voice intervened supriya'uff my heart's beating fast.
The CD sequence''.. well it was expected that he'll have a second experience only but it was lovely, the way you have described his reactions the graphic details of his gestures is brilliant. I didn't understand what supriya ment when she said one down one more to go?..she had succeeded in diverting his mind now it was nakusha's turn so sent her to drink milk
Okay the next scene'.i loved the fact that their first proper conversation happened at the background of twilight..wow what an observation''this is how their feelings for the baby is not very bright not too dark either''okay a lot has changed she avoides sitting with her he ivites her to sit'great, yahi din dekhna baaki reh gaya tha!!
Wow'.beautifully worded the baby indeed is a "dard ki nishani" ..i am glad that your confusion as to who spoke those words cleared out and hey I quite liked the way dutta took a pause before using the word "bhook" he's like that too sophisticated in his talks and very shareef..yeah very shareef ''okay fine I'll have to agree it's only nakusha who can sooth her, it's not that others..yeah even u don't stand a chance ..remember ..don't try but it's he who only prefers to hear her'.ab hum kya kahein kya karein jab dil baatein karne lage'..aww'the reason he gave for wanting a girl child, heart touching'''.quite contrastive if asked from nakusha she'll never want a girl child due to her profession and he wants a girl because of his profession..she will go with what her sahab wants ..'..the last gesture''.awww'thats how people like dutta are if they care for someone the only thing they care is that person'..and wahi hua jo sadiyon se do pyaar karne walo ke saath hota aaya hai'..villan ki entry'''.but I'm looking forward how you handle this'.now when supriya has an eye on them how will you arrange lovey dovey moments for us'.and how exactly supriya gonna handle her defeat that too against someone like nakusha'''and what's making me die'is what did the doctor said,,,,,andI know what your answer going to be !!!
Waiting eagerly for the next installment ..thanks a lot dear (oh! I'm saying this after ages)
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