*will be back with long reply *
EDIT: I'm BACK muahaha
I don't believe this! This is yourr FIRST ever OS ?! Are you sure,? No ways babes! it's more than amazing for first time !
You described everythingg so beautifully! i can't describe how happy i am right noww, the hug scene was so well written!
haha i liked how adi complained to nanaji like a little child, aww i can tottally imagine adi baba's cute puppy face !
When i read the part where he was beating Mr mehra .. i was literally shouting at my laptop sayin "YES C'MON ADI, don't spare him! show this Mr Mehra what happens if someone messes with YOUR pankhuri !" so..yeahh i got a little TOO excited about it.. it was almost like i was watching it instead of reading.. i don't know what will happen to me when i actually see this scene in the real show !
After that the hug was splendid (wow old fashioned word haha) loved the way you described his reaction when pankhuri was crying on his shoulders! AWW that was cute! i was hugging my laptop screen (no joke!) ah man, the feelings and emotions you protrayed for adi's character was too good ! I hope to see something along like that in the show!
The BEST part was
he went to check up on her and she was having nightmare..!
Overall i would rate - 9/10 ...because i wanted adi to give a small kiss on pankhuri's forehead
AHH honestly, This is absolutely brilliant ! Damn you girl, your writing is amazing, then why were you hiding this talent till now?!
I wanted to ask someone to write their hug scene and here.. you gave me more than i even expected ! So thankyouu for this !
And now the only option you have is to CONTINUE ASAP.I am dying to read if adi will actually confess that he loves her.. if you do that, you will find me in heaven.
I can't praise you enough ! I think that's all i want to say for now..
Edited by Poojaa_P - 17 September 2012 at 10:19am