OS - Pani Da Rang Vekh Ke Ankhiya Jo Hanjur Udd de - Page 3

Great work dev
continue writing and i coincidently heard dis sond in d morning
it goes goes wid situation in OS:)

Dev, nice thinking... I just had a hard time reading it as English wasn't proper.. Sorry, I just like to read things that are smooth and I don't have to scratch my brain a lot. Don't take it the wrong way. 😃 

dev i agree with pujee and supriyaaa

Originally posted by: EkSapnoKiPari

In starting itself you have made two mistakes and as i went on reading their were lots more!

what i saw was completely unexpectable

if you were a national writer you could have illustrated way better pankhu's reaction

I'm now living alone here in london as doing job as Architect

english is incorrect here!

Take no offence please. Its just making me wonder are you really a national writer.

You said we are allowed to criticize so I'm criticizing

I fully agree with this, and I too had troubles fathoming everything.

Originally posted by: EkSapnoKiPari

In starting itself you have made two mistakes and as i went on reading their were lots more!

what i saw was completely unexpectable

if you were a national writer you could have illustrated way better pankhu's reaction

I'm now living alone here in london as doing job as Architect

english is incorrect here!

Take no offence please. Its just making me wonder are you really a national writer.

You said we are allowed to criticize so I'm criticizing

Edited by payalibm - 11 years ago

Dev, your imagination is quite good but please make your OS more sweet and fine to the readers, would love if you rectify some of the mistakes. 

Background tunes are good choices Dev

Please do not take my word to heart Dev but it seems you have written this quite hurriedly and in the process made some mistakes, would love to see a bigger and better OS from you. Take time and expose your talent. 

Originally posted by: SAIBALROUTH

Dev, your imagination is quite good but please make your OS more sweet and fine to the readers, would love if you rectify some of the mistakes.