This story had promise but its been executed poorly, it's a written story not a text message for goodness sake!! Aside from the text like writing you also need an editor...do you even proof read before posting? Its even worse when you are writing mature content so poorly. I'm sorry if this sounds harsh but this kind of amateurism and sloppiness makes the difference between readers choosing to read or not and in this case it's definitely NOT which is a shame when the story could be good.😡
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