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Arhi FF|Mohabat Door Jaane Na De| *Complete!* #3 (Page 92)

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Posted: 15 April 2013 at 2:05pm | IP Logged
stunning chapter sweetheart. I absolutely loved how arnav declared his right over khushi, that was beautiful

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Posted: 15 April 2013 at 10:25pm | IP Logged
Hi,
 I read the story in one go, sitting up the whole night yesterday. I loved it. You have created magic with words.

What can I say. No words.Clap



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Posted: 16 April 2013 at 12:03am | IP Logged
Lovely! Thnx for continuing this wonderful  story!!!!! Naughty Arnav is cute !!!

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Posted: 16 April 2013 at 12:38am | IP Logged
welcome back. though i would just tell u one thing. dont let one plagiarist rob ur loyal readers of the pleasure of reading ur work. as it is the updates are few and far in bw; yet enjoyable. the relationship of arshi portrayed is  beautiful

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Posted: 16 April 2013 at 7:30am | IP Logged
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I was in ArHi-land after reading the update. It was an absolutely indulgent...and swoon-worthy...definitely blush-worthy...also drool-worthy...and acidity (aka dhak dhak) inducing update. LOL Just the way I like it! Big smile

I think all of us know that feeling of guilt when there is something that you're supposed to do and you even want to do it, but this small part of your heart (often the dominant one Tongue) keeps wanting to do something else...or in this case, be with someone else. You feel guilty and selfish for thinking that way but then you can't control it. It was really cute how Khushi wanted to be with her Bauji but was disappointed that she would be staying away from Arnav! 

I really loved the small moment there, at the end of the first part, where Arnav backs her against his SUV. You always write such moments beautifully...without any traces of vulgarity and the same holds true for this particular update true but...yes, but...it was definitely hot, and if I'm not offending you then, sexy too! Wink And then you even managed to transform it into a cute and adorably funny one at the end of the scene!! How do you do it? Please remind me that you're for real! LOL

YES!! I'm definitely one of those who thought that ArHi's banter was abruptly cut off! Well, no, it wasn't abrupt...but tooo short!!! *wails* Tongue I want moreee...and fasttt! Ooo! It's going to get serious now? NICEEE!! Wink

Anjali's scene took me by surprise. Are you going to take unexpected turns? Something mysterious? Did you realise that I have high expectations? Am I putting pressure on you? Is that a yes? Oh, then I'm doing a good job! Evil Smile Hehehe! 

The precap or whatever you call it...I'm guessing it's Khushi! Well, I hope see! *fingers crossed*


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Kya? What more do you want? No! I'm not going to repeat that you're a brilliant writer...an absolute gem...your style is unique...there's perfection in every emotion you portray...etc etc. Ab hum thakk gayye baar baar bolte bolte. Aage se yeh understood hai! Wink


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Posted: 16 April 2013 at 2:23pm | IP Logged
awesome !!!! Thanks for coming Back :)

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Posted: 17 April 2013 at 1:53am | IP Logged
Originally posted by samba12

 Hello doe eyes,
Just read the whole ff in one shot ... am slightly cross-eyed, but would still like to post a comment. 

Thank you! The fact that you'd take the time and effort to comment REALLY means a lot to me!!

It was a compelling read because like several other readers I too was colossally disappointed by the so-called 'redemption track' which was such a damp squibb, so pathetic, it made a travesty of Khushi and Arnav and most of all of the credibility of their relationship.
So it was a pleasure to  read about Arnav's angst, his pain and suffering as he gets a glimpse of what she went through because of his rash, rage-driven and impetuous reactions. Balm for the soul...Very therapeutic :)

I'm so glad you feel that way! Redeeming Arnav and reestablishing Arhi's love were two of the biggest aims behind this story and I'm glad I got your approval for the way I went about it! So happy to hear that you enjoyed it! 


Too I enjoyed the different view points you let us have so we could appreciate in depth how each character responds to the unfolding events.


Again, thank you. IPK from the very beginning crafted a host of intriguing characters with so much potential - for instance Shashi Gupta. I was seriously hoping he would recover in the show, and spill the beans on Shyam - I don't know whether the CVs forgot about him, but that question just went unanswered in the show. So I'm very relieved and reassured you enjoyed the different character developments here!

When watching the serial I was struck by Sobti's abilty to express subtle feelings (when directed effectively - becasue there were tmes when he was just hamming and fooling around) and re-watched several bits just to focus on a particular scene, a certain interaction - a lift of the brow, a crinkling of the eyes, a tiny twitch of the lips - oh yes, very telling!. 
And you have verbalized these subtle expressions, so well. I could picture them and what's even better for an invetarate reader, can re-read them...and enjoy the images they conjure up over and over again! 

Thank you!! To a large extent the way I write and describe things is always an attempt to convey the dozen different emotions I saw and felt or thought of when watching the show, so I've always tried to bring that out on paper (well, on screen I suppose). It's a tribute to Barun and the cast of IPK for their brilliant, heart-wrenching acting, because they are the ones that urge me to delve deep into a scene :) I'm thrilled and humbled that you think I'm these scenes justice! Thank you!

Words matter! Well for me they do. So must add that I thoroughly delight in your use of words. Words, expressions, cadences, - all. Not to forget the alliteration, the building of intensity, the nuances delcately captured. ... Love it all. :)
And then there's the internal monologs... both Arnav's and Khushi's - you've managed to retain their essential natures even as you give us a detailed account of their thought processes - tortuous, harrowing, grim, confused, gobsmacked, awe-struck,  the list goes on...but you know what I mean and you do such a wonderful job of it!

Oh, thank you, thank you!!! I'm literally giddy now :P Words really matter to me too, and I'm incredibly fond of evocative imagery - plus, my favourite branch of literature is poetry :P So you have no idea how MUCH it means to me that you liked the literary devices which went into crafting this piece, and enjoyed the monologues and alliteration and so on...thank you!!!! 

Thank you. Two days ago I had no idea you existed. Over the past two days I've enjoyed the product of your imagination, your thoughts and I'm just glad you share your writng with us.
More power to you...

BTW - I share the literature background...and so enjoy your quotes as well - a bonus it would seem :)

Thank you sooo very much!!! I'm thrilled to find another literature-loving soul out there, and so immensely pleased and honoured that you enjoyed my work!!

Thank you once more,
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Posted: 17 April 2013 at 2:06am | IP Logged
Originally posted by avantika_2012

Day Dreaming
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Day Dreaming
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I was in ArHi-land after reading the update. 
If you look round carefully, I'm sure you'll find me floating around there too...as it happens I spend most of my time wandering in Arhi-land :P 

It was an absolutely indulgent...and swoon-worthy...definitely blush-worthy...also drool-worthy...and acidity (aka dhak dhak) inducing update. LOL Just the way I like it! Big smile

Thank you! Thank you! Thank you!!!!! That was what I was going for, so thank you, thank you, thank you!! 

I think all of us know that feeling of guilt when there is something that you're supposed to do and you even want to do it, but this small part of your heart (often the dominant one Tongue) keeps wanting to do something else...or in this case, be with someone else. You feel guilty and selfish for thinking that way but then you can't control it. It was really cute how Khushi wanted to be with her Bauji but was disappointed that she would be staying away from Arnav! 

*grinning like a fool* Yes! That's what I was trying to describe, and I am so RELIEVED reading this and seeing you agree! It's like you've read my mind (Again!!) and took the words right out of my mouth (Again!!) 

I really loved the small moment there, at the end of the first part, where Arnav backs her against his SUV. You always write such moments beautifully...without any traces of vulgarity (thank you - vulgarity and I are not the best of friends and I live in perpetual fear of going too far :P ) and the same holds true for this particular update true but...yes, but...it was definitely hot, and if I'm not offending you then, sexy too! Wink (*grins broadly* Nope, not offended at all :P It was sort of the intention, since things are getting serious after all, but since such scenes are still experimental territory for me, I'm actually glad you thought so!)  And then you even managed to transform it into a cute and adorably funny one at the end of the scene!! How do you do it? Please remind me that you're for real! LOL (Kya karoon? Khushi and Arnav are like that, nah - hot and intense one moment and cute and adorable the next! Hope the switch worked :D) 

YES!! I'm definitely one of those who thought that ArHi's banter was abruptly cut off! Well, no, it wasn't abrupt...but tooo short!!! *wails* Tongue I want moreee...and fasttt! Ooo! It's going to get serious now? NICEEE!! Wink

Lol - I'm working on :D But is it weird for me to be happy that you want more? Coz it kind of makes me feel I'm doing my job right :P 

Anjali's scene took me by surprise. Are you going to take unexpected turns? Something mysterious? Did you realise that I have high expectations? Am I putting pressure on you? Is that a yes? Oh, then I'm doing a good job! Evil Smile Hehehe! 

Anjali...can't reveal much yet. But - oh dear. High expectations?? ***Pressure***fans oneself nervously*** What have I gotten myself into?? :S :P 

The precap or whatever you call it...I'm guessing it's Khushi! Well, I hope see! *fingers crossed*

We'll see! Soon I hope! 


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Kya? What more do you want? No! I'm not going to repeat that you're a brilliant writer...an absolute gem...your style is unique...there's perfection in every emotion you portray...etc etc. Ab hum thakk gayye baar baar bolte bolte. Aage se yeh understood hai! Wink

*blush*blush*blush*blush*blush* 

If you're not careful my feet may never touch the ground again! 

But THANK YOU!!! Have I reminded you recently that you're a sweetheart?! *hugs*

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