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Arhi FF|Mohabat Door Jaane Na De| *Complete!* #3 (Page 117)

-doe-eyes- Goldie

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Posted: 21 May 2013 at 9:19am | IP Logged
Originally posted by Viji79

Discovered this ff this morning and finished reading all the updates by evening. There are many things about this ff that has stunned me. First of all, the style of writing. When i cried for arnav, laughed with Khushi, blushed when arnav teased Khushi, laughed out when Akash sulked, cringed thinking of Shyam from arnav and Khushi's pov, I realised how powerful your writing is. 

Thank you!! I'm really glad you gave my FF a chance and have enjoyed it so far! IPKKND was a show full of powerful emotions and I try to portray that here as well, so I'm very, very happy you found my writing evocative :) Thank you!! 

The second thing was that the famous 'because I love you dammit' came later in the show and first in your ff. then, the way you have incorporated epic scene like dhadkanen ek ho jaate hain at very important place. 

Lol, I don't know if that was coincidence or not, but I got so excited when Arnav said 'Because I love you dammit!' with all the anger and passion I imagined him with :P And the dhak-dhak scene from Holi is one of my absolute favourites, and I was upset that they were both tipsy that time, so I'm really glad you liked the way it was incorporated here :) 

But what blew me away was the honesty and sincerity with which arnav's redemption was portrayed. Every word that depicted his turmoil, his guilt, his self unforgiving ness sliced through my heart as if I were arnav and I were going through the torture. Above all, I felt a sense of completeness, which I never got to see in the show. I am glad that I discovered another amazing writer on this forum.

Thank you so much! I'm very happy you thought so - the main theme of this story is probably Arnav's redemption, and he's a character that deserved to redeem himself, but that was left lacking in the show by the end. So it really means a lot to me that you think Arnav's redemption was portrayed well here :) 

Thank you so much for taking the time to read this, and for leaving such a wonderful comment! I'm very glad you read and enjoyed this so far :D 

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Posted: 21 May 2013 at 9:21am | IP Logged
Originally posted by NikitaM11

Loved the chapter! An so glad it was extra one! Can't wait for the talk they have with Anjali! Hope they actually get to and nothing goes wrong! Can't wait for the next update !!

Thank you! Glad you liked it :) As for the talk with Anjali - lets wait and watch :P Gotta maintain the suspense hehe
-doe-eyes- Goldie

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Posted: 21 May 2013 at 9:24am | IP Logged
Originally posted by jojo21

You're absolutely right you did incorporate a lot in this chapter, and I'm really grateful to you.  You in your 15! pages not only developed our characters relationship further, but you gave us more insight into Shyam's desperation and the fear that it creates amongst our characters.  While I loathe this character, he's so deliciously evil that you can't help want to see what he does next, but also want to see hour our protagonists get the best of him.  

On another note, I liked how you had Arnav talk to Khushi and reveal his feelings and how much it relieves that stress he's feeling and how Khushi reiterated that she is indeed his partner.  

Such a great chapter!

Thank you! I'm so glad you approve of the plot and character developments in this chapter - they were important to move the story along and I guess that's why it just kept getting longer and longer. I really happy you liked the progression and recognised all the vital details woven in here - especially about Shyam. His Dhaiyya Ho really has been missing for a while now, hasn't it? :p 

Also, very happy you liked Khushi supporting Arnav as his wife! It's been Arnav supporting Khushi so far but from now on, they'll learn to depend on each other :)

So happy you liked this! Thank you for reading and letting me know your thoughts! 
-doe-eyes- Goldie

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Posted: 21 May 2013 at 9:28am | IP Logged
Originally posted by vann

So they are moving onto a partnership mode - at equal footing. so glad that Khushi is able to draw out Arnav from 'me, the protector' mode. You capture his yearning and feelings so beautifully. I am just waiting for Anjili to act!!

Thank you! I'm happy you approve of Khushi reminding Arnav he doesn't always have to be the one to be depended on - it's an important milestone in their relationship, and they're learning to move side by side :) Anjali will act soon too - I wonder if she'll take you by surprise :P
Your PM always brightens the day. It would be brighter though if you updated Cul-de-sac too...that one is turning out to my absolute favourite. Just that the updates are so far between. please do something about that... Please please pretty please, update cul-de-sac.Smile

Aw, I'm sorry about the delays. Cul-de-sac is one my favourites to write too - but the thing is, it's probably more serious and symbolic than any of my other works and I want to be able to concentrate fully on it, which isn't possible in the little bits of free time I get between this and that. Next update will definitely be for that one, promise! 
-doe-eyes- Goldie

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Posted: 21 May 2013 at 9:34am | IP Logged
Originally posted by kbtr

Excellent! I love the new Kushi. I love how it is becoming so blatant that he cannot do without her. The direction the relationship as taken makes it obvious that they are becoming so dependent on one another. I cannot wait to see what happens when they actually see each other after this new found feeling. Yeah, want to know what he said! 
Thanks for the PM. 

Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed the increasing dependency of one for the other :) I'm actually quite looking forward to writing their next encounter, and shed more light on the previous one :P I'm happy that you like the progression and pace so far, and hope you'll enjoy the next update too! 

Thank you for reading and for sharing your views! 
-doe-eyes- Goldie

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Posted: 21 May 2013 at 9:43am | IP Logged
Originally posted by -LiveCrazily-

Sorry for late comment bit busy 
update is heart wrenching and emotional for me atleast 

they both live far from each other 
separate places 
separate room but same under sky under same stars and same moon 
they bound with each other strongly from when she fall in hsi arms first time 
that realize it later 
but still they ready to collect and move with their own unique bonding and love 
khushi always there for her arnav ji she doesn't want to add her in his responsibility list but she want to be share his happiness his woes his responsibility and most importantly his life 
i m looking forward how together they fight with evil its time arnav khushi stand with each other to fight and its not time for choices its time for togetherness  
thanks for giving long wali update 

You picked out the essence of their bond perfectly - that's what I wanted to show, how they're both at one with each other, even though they were in different places, so I'm really happy you spotted that and enjoyed it! And yes, Khushi doesn't just want to be her husband's responsibility but his equal and partner as well, and it's about time Arnav had someone to share his responsibilities with him :) Glad you liked that!

Thank you for reading and for leaving your views!! :) 
-doe-eyes- Goldie

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Posted: 21 May 2013 at 9:52am | IP Logged
Originally posted by Samyxx

Beautiful update...

I'm so happy that he shared everything with her...

Thank you! Glad you liked it :) 

Originally posted by pujajk

I loved the chapter! The role reversal was amazing - it really showed that both Khushi and Arnav are equal.

Glad you liked the chapter and the role reversal especially - thank you! 

Originally posted by hydsri

all updates are wonderful please update soon. forgot to post a reply after each update but I read all of them. 

Thank you! I'm happy you've liked the FF so far :) 

Originally posted by PixieFlame

Amazing update! :) 

Thank you! 
-doe-eyes- Goldie

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Posted: 21 May 2013 at 9:54am | IP Logged
Originally posted by dazzling_glory

Update was very nice 
khushi knows that she will have to be arnav's support when it comes to anjali and arnav is determined to keep shyam away from khushi
please continue soon

Glad you liked it! Thank you for reading and reviewing!! :) 

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