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Poem: Why me??

Jennymyola Goldie
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Posted: 30 August 2012 at 9:33pm | IP Logged
Here is a creation of mine which I wrote sitting in my clinics posting as there were not many patients to see...
Seeing the suffering of so many people in the world, I thought of writing a poem from the viewpoints of different people like a child, an elder sibling, a teen, a professional, a person trying to prove his innocence, victims of domestic abuse, terrorism and dowry and the like. It's just a random thought that came to mind and I penned down a few lines. So here goes...
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Why Me??
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Crimson drops spout from the gash
on my finger - a tiny accident
I cry in pain, my tears in vain
as i wonder - why me?
.
Little brother and me, so cheerfully
have fun making a mess
When Mother scolds, my heart can't hold
as i wonder - why me?
.
The world in full gear, so rapidly
changing and morphing everyday
Competition tough, my path is rough
as i wonder - why me?
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A hectic day, my breath away
Full of deadlines and requests
My back bent, exhausted and spent
as i wonder - why me?
.
Allies and advocates abandon me
as i struggle alone
No respite, only bruise and spite
as i wonder - why me?
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No love can i expect from him
but drunk thrashings and whips
I shiver in dread, my kids in bed
as i wonder - why me?
.
My pretty home blasted apart
Shrapnel and death around me
What i valued most, I have all lost
as i wonder - why me?
.
My greedy in-laws have gone away
Left me with shattered bridal dreams
I feel so hollow, unending sorrow
as i wonder - why me?
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But i realize that I SURVIVED!
My experiences have only strengthened me
I lift my face, with joy and peace
'Coz now i know 'Why me?'
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Do let me know, how you liked it? This is my first writing on I-F, so I'm apprehensive on how it will be recieved. Your response, positive or critical, will be encouraging for my further work. Do comment or like. *biting nails nervously*

Edited by Jennymyola - 31 August 2012 at 2:24am

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Posted: 30 August 2012 at 10:31pm | IP Logged
I like this poem, simply because it can be related with anyone:)
Very very decent poemClap

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Posted: 31 August 2012 at 2:31am | IP Logged
Simple, neat, easy to understand.

And I cold relate myself to it! Nice job! :)

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Posted: 31 August 2012 at 3:25am | IP Logged
aww it was cute! Sweet and simple. I liked it..

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Posted: 31 August 2012 at 11:24pm | IP Logged
Originally posted by Clever.Foxxy

I like this poem, simply because it can be related with anyone:)
Very very decent poemClap

Originally posted by --Siva--

Simple, neat, easy to understand.

And I cold relate myself to it! Nice job! :)

Thank you so much! I'm glad that you related to it. I believe that it enhances the soul of the poem, if you are able to even feel it while reading or listening to it... :)
Originally posted by --peehu--

aww it was cute! Sweet and simple. I liked it..

Thanks dear. I'm motivated to write more poems now... :)
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Posted: 31 August 2012 at 11:29pm | IP Logged
Any critical comments/suggestions, friends? Would love to hear...

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Posted: 03 September 2012 at 12:01am | IP Logged
I loved it.. and I could relate to everything... and yes, it does strengthen you every time you survive an ordeal.. can you please tell CVs that.. maybe then they might try to make Anjali stronger!

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Posted: 03 September 2012 at 5:39am | IP Logged
Originally posted by boreddamsel

I loved it.. and I could relate to everything... and yes, it does strengthen you every time you survive an ordeal.. can you please tell CVs that.. maybe then they might try to make Anjali stronger!

so true...

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