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FF: Arhi: The way IPK should've been[Ch9/Sc3 pg99]

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Posted: 30 August 2012 at 11:12am | IP Logged

Hi All

This is my version of how IPKKND should have progressed from the night of the wedding. 

Rather than Arnav returning, this alternate universe has Arnav walking away from the wedding due to Dadi revealing the truth about Garima. Eventually the truth comes out followed by the redemption track of Arnav that we never got to see post the kidnapping.

I believe IPKKND lost a lot of viewers the night they showed Anjali's miscarriage. I too didn't like it. I always thought that Anjali's character could still be given an important role without having to resort to the cheapness of miscarriage and didi ki saut track. So this is my way of seeing IPKKND without the miscarriage.

You'll find the sister in Anjali that we all adored, you'll find the brainy ruthless businessman in Arnav that we fell in love with, you'll find strength in Khushi as opposed to being a doormat, you'll find Aakash and Payal ACTUALLY having a role to play, you'll find screen space for Shashi, Garima, Buaji, Nani, Mami and NK, you'll find a proper exit for Dadi and also many missing loops closing, and a much better farewell to one of the most badass villains of  all time Mr. Shyam Manohar Jha. You'll find Love, hate, drama, comedy, sadness and family moments... 

... in short, this is my humble attempt at recreating the world of IPKKND that we all loved!


UPDATE: I added a promo:


These are going to be a set of small posts (complete with dialogues in hindi and translations in English mentioned in a different color code). Each chapter will have 3 scenes. I try to update everyday. Each chapter will also have a precap, which will explain the finer aspects of the previous chapter ergo, chapter 1 doesn't have any precap Tongue

These chapters are written in the screenplay format i.e. mentioning scenes, settings and dialogues. Maximum enjoyment is guaranteed if you picturize the characters speaking these lines. Wink 

Please use the below INDEX to easily navigate between chapters and scenes.

Chapter 1 Scene 1 Page 1 (The D-Day)

Chapter 1 Scene 2 Page 1

Chapter 1 Scene 3 Page 2

Chapter 2 Scene 1 Page 2 (The half truth)

Chapter 2 Scene 2 Page 3

Chapter 2 Scene 3 Page 4

Chapter 3 Scene 1 Page 5(The confrontation)

Chapter 3 Scene 2 Page 6

Chapter 3 Scene 3 Page 7

Chapter 4 Scene 1 Page 9 (Let the games begin)

Chapter 4 Scene 2 Page 11

Chapter 4 Scene 3 Page 13

Chapter 5 Scene 1 Page 17(The domino effect)

Chapter 5 Scene 2 Page 20

Chapter 5 Scene 3 Page 23

Chapter 6 Scene 1 Page 27(What you see is what you get)

Chapter 6 Scene 2 Page 31

Chapter 6 Scene 3 Page 38

chapter 7 Scene 1 Page 42(Sugar and Spice)

Chapter 7 Scene 2 Page 49

Chapter 7 Scene 3 Page 55

Chapter 8 Scene 1 Page 62(Lord of the rings)

Chapter 8 Scene 2 Page 69

Chapter 8 Scene 3 Page 76

Chapter 9 Scene 1 Page 86 (King, Queen and a Jack(ass))

Chapter 9 Scene 2 Page 92

chapter 9 Scene 3 Page 99


THREAD TWO IS HERE http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=3207607

THREAD THREE IS HERE http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=3230321

THREAD FOUR IS HERE http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=3256614

THREAD FIVE IS HERE http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=3317193

If you wish to recieve updates as and when I update the story, please add me as a buddy so that I can PM you. Others who simply come here by chance, please feel free to exercise the like button or the reply button. Critique, comments etc, are most welcome.

Ok enough talk! The chapters start from the second post (look below).

Feedback would be nice Smile

Cheers!



Edited by smitzy - 13 December 2012 at 11:35am

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Posted: 30 August 2012 at 2:19pm | IP Logged

Please scroll down to read the English version

Chapter 1 : D-Day 

Scene 1

Khushi sat on the mandap decked in a beautiful red lehenga and sitting beside him was Arnav looking equally dashing in a golden cream sherwani.

"Tum khush ho?" he whispered so that only she could hear him.

There wasn't a need for her to answer as he could feel vibes of happiness emanating from her. She blushed and her nose turned red; an endearing sight for Arnav.

"I'm guessing that means yes," he whispered again, a mischievous tone creeping into his voice.

How well he knew her.

Khushi smiled and peeked sideways at her husband, well soon-to-be husband. They shared a look; shyness in Khushi's eyes and a content happiness in Arnav's. Finally it was happening! After a year of trials, misunderstandings and tests of fate, the beautiful day of their union had come.

"Ab var aur kanya phere lene ke liye khade ho jayein," panditji requested.

Arnav stood up and offered his hand to help Khushi. She smiled faintly, always a gentleman, my darling Arnavji.

Naniji was smiling at them fondly; Anjali was talking to the other pandit about other needs for the next pooja; NK was fumbling with his videocam trying to get the best possible angle for his shooting; Aakash and Payal were sitting hand in hand in the background, reminiscing about their wedding day with a smile on their faces; Buaji was sitting close to Khushi with tears in her eyes.

"Humein pata tha!" suddenly the sharp tone of Subhadra Devi echoed across the hall, drowning panditji's chants.

An abrupt silence descended as if all the sounds had been turned off. Even the panditji stopped his chanting. Every set of eyes snapped to attention towards the source of this commotion. Dadiji was standing with her back to the mandap, facing the main entrance. Apprehensive eyes bore confusion now. Khushi and Arnav shared another look; this time confusion evident in her eyes and a faint irritation in his. Finally, Naniji called out to her softly.

"Sumi? Ka hui gawa? Ye sab ka chalat hai?"

Subhadra Devi turned around slowly, her eyebrows arched up and a look of utmost contempt in her eyes. "Tum issi se kyun nai pooch leti Deviyani?" and she pointed at someone towards the main door.

A cowering figure came into the light with her head bowed down and tears streaking down the cheeks. As the crowd of spectators took in her appearance,  Arnav heard a sharp gasp beside him. He looked sideways to find Khushi staring at the distance, her eyes wide open in shock.

"Khushi, tum theek ho?" he quickly muttered. But he couldn't grab her attention as she continued staring.

"Amma?"


Scene 2

"Sumi ye sab ka hui raha hai?" Nani repeats, trying to comprehend what new drama was about to unfold.

"Deviyani, humne aapse pehle bhi kaha tha na? Hum apne ateet se bhaag nahin sakte. Aur khaas kar tab, jab ateet ke saaye barsaat ke badlon ke tarah sar par mandraa rahe hon."

Confusion deepens, but now Arnav looks plain irritated that Dadi can't seem to control herself and launches into rants at the most awkward of times. They are about to take the phere for crying out loud. Buaji rushes to Garima to comfort her.

"Arre, Garima! Kaa hua tumhe Nandkishore, aur tum aise kaahe ro rahi ho?" she flusters concernedly. Khushi makes a hasty movement to run to her mother as well, but is stopped as her dupatta is tied to a pink angvastram draped around Arnav's shoulder .

"Iske parivar ne aaj tak sirf aapko hi nahin Arnav, hum sab ko dhoke mein rakha hai," thunders Dadiji again pointing at Garima, as an explanation. "Haqeeqat ko apne dikhavati masoomiyat ke parde mein chupa ke rakha hai - "

"Dadi!" Arnav shouts. "Aap aisa kaise keh sakti hain?"

"Keh sakte hain. Aur kehna zaroori hai Arnav. Kyunki sachai se aap koson door hain!"countered Dadi.

"Kaisi sachai? Kaun si sachai?" Arnav is visibly angry now. Khushi grabs his arm in an attempt to restrain him. He glances sideways at her. Her eyes coax him to keep calm. Dadi resumes.

"Jis din se aapne humein Garima ke bare mein bataya tha, usi din se usse milne ki ichha thi. Jaante hain kyun? Kyunki aapke pitaji jis kaaran apna ghar, apni patni, yahan tak ki apne bachhon ko chod ke chale gaye the, us kaaran ka naam Garima tha!!"

Loud gasps fill the room. The Raizada family look astounded but only Naniji, Anjali and Arnav can completely comprehend the exact meaning of Dadiji's monologue. Arnav's look morphes from absolute anger into utter shock. 

"Kya?" Khushi looks stunned. 

However, Dadiji waits for a moment before delivering the final nail on the coffin.

"Khushi ki maasi ' Garima hi woh kaaran hain ki aaj aapki maa zinda nai hain Arnav," Dadi's final words echo all around RM and around Arnav's ears. Dadiji chose her words carefully as she had knew the impact those words would have on Arnav's soul.

The silence is now peppered with hushed conversations among the guests who are, no doubt, digesting the latest piece of scandal. Arnav bows down his head and closes his eyes for a brief instant. However, when the moment gets over and his eyes open, he's not the same Arnav anymore. Khushi tears her eyes from Garima to look at Arnav, now a scared look haunting her face.

His eyes do not leave Garima's face as he slowly removes Khushi's hand from his arm. She stares down at her this action as if in slow motion, a heady feeling of fear spiking through her veins. She looks up at Arnav's face, silently imploring him, Arnavji ek baar meri taraf dekhiye, bas ek baar...

The pandit chooses that very moment to announce, "Mahoorat nikla ja raha hai. Pheron ki vidhi shuru karein?"

Arnav is still staring at Garima as he seethes at the pandit, " Panditji, ab yahan koi phere nai honge."

Shock is written on everyone's faces. Khushi notices the angry eyes, the cold indifference in his touch, the determined rigidity in his body; this is the face which she had hoped she'd never see again, the face of Arnav Singh Raizada back in all his glory.

He removes the pink angvastram from his shoulder and drops it to the floor. He steps back and starts to get off the mandap when Khushi grabs his hand again. This time begging him to stay, her tearful eyes hold a question in them. He looks at her for an instant before releasing her grasp and makes his way towards the main door. He pauses as he reaches Garima to give her a venomous stare.

"Arnav bitwa hamari baat to - " Garima mumbles but Arnav doesn't stop to listen to her and walks out the main door.

Khushi falls to her knees on the mandap crying uncontrollably.


NEXT SCENE (click)


CHAPTER1 Scene1 and 2 with English Subtitles :P

Scene 1

Khushi sat on the mandap decked in a beautiful red lehenga and sitting beside him was Arnav looking equally dashing in a golden cream sherwani.

"Are you happy?" he whispered so that only she could hear him.

There wasn't a need for her to answer as he could feel vibes of happiness emanating from her. She blushed and her nose turned red; an endearing sight for Arnav.

"I'm guessing that means yes," he whispered again, a mischievous tone creeping into his voice.

How well he knew her.

Khushi smiled and peeked sideways at her husband, well soon-to-be husband. They shared a look; shyness in Khushi's eyes and a content happiness in Arnav's. Finally it was happening! After a year of trials, misunderstandings and tests of fate, the beautiful day of their union had come.

"Now the groom and bride please stand up for the phere," panditji requested.

Arnav stood up and offered his hand to help Khushi. She smiled faintly, always a gentleman, my darling Arnavji.

Naniji was smiling at them fondly; Anjali was talking to the other pandit about other needs for the next pooja; NK was fumbling with his videocam trying to get the best possible angle for his shooting; Aakash and Payal were sitting hand in hand in the background, reminiscing about their wedding day with a smile on their faces; Buaji was sitting close to Khushi with tears in her eyes.

"I KNEW IT!" suddenly the sharp tone of Subhadra Devi echoed across the hall, drowning panditji's chants.

An abrupt silence descended as if all the sounds had been turned off. Even the panditji stopped his chanting. Every set of eyes snapped to attention towards the source of this commotion. Dadiji was standing with her back to the mandap, facing the main entrance. Apprehensive eyes bore confusion now. Khushi and Arnav shared another look; this time confusion evident in her eyes and a faint irritation in his. Finally, Naniji called out to her softly.

"Sumi? What happened? What is happening?"

Subhadra Devi turned around slowly, her eyebrows arched up and a look of utmost contempt in her eyes. "Why don't you ask her, Deviyani?" and she pointed at someone towards the main door.

A cowering figure came into the light with her head bowed down and tears streaking down the cheeks. As the crowd of spectators took in her appearance,  Arnav heard a sharp gasp beside him. He looked sideways to find Khushi staring at the distance, her eyes wide open in shock.

"Khushi, are you alright?" he quickly muttered. But he couldn't grab her attention as she continued staring.

"Amma?"


Scene 2

"Sumi what is all this?" Nani repeats, trying to comprehend what new drama was about to unfold.

"Deviyani, I told you before as well. We can't run from our past. And especially when the past hovers on our heads like dark sinuous clouds."

Confusion deepens, but now Arnav looks plain irritated that Dadi can't seem to control herself and launches into rants at the most awkward of times. They are about to take the phere for crying out loud. Buaji rushes to Garima to comfort her.

"Arre, Garima! what happened to you Nandkishore, why are you crying?" she flusters concernedly. Khushi makes a hasty movement to run to her mother as well, but is stopped as her dupatta is tied to a pink angvastram draped around Arnav's shoulder .

"her family has kept not only you but all of us in the dark, Arnav," thunders Dadiji again pointing at Garima, as an explanation. "tried to hide their lies behind the curtains of make-belief innocence - "

"Dadi!" Arnav shouts. "How can you speak that way?"

"I can. And it is important, Arnav. Because you are miles away from the truth!"countered Dadi.

"What truth are you talking about?" Arnav is visibly angry now. Khushi grabs his arm in an attempt to restrain him. He glances sideways at her. Her eyes coax him to keep calm. Dadi resumes.

"Since the day you mentioned Garima's name to me I've been desperate to meet her. Do you know why? Because the reason why your father left his home, his wife and his kids, that reason's name was also Garima!!"

Loud gasps fill the room. The Raizada family look astounded but only Naniji, Anjali and Arnav can completely comprehend the exact meaning of Dadiji's monologue. Arnav's look morphes from absolute anger into utter shock. 

"What?" Khushi looks stunned. 

However, Dadiji waits for a moment before delivering the final nail on the coffin.

"Khushi's aunt - Garima is the reason why your mother isn't alive today Arnav," Dadi's final words echo all around RM and around Arnav's ears. Dadiji chose her words carefully as she had knew the impact those words would have on Arnav's soul.

The silence is now peppered with hushed conversations among the guests who are, no doubt, digesting the latest piece of scandal. Arnav bows down his head and closes his eyes for a brief instant. However, when the moment gets over and his eyes open, he's not the same Arnav anymore. Khushi tears her eyes from Garima to look at Arnav, now a scared look haunting her face.

His eyes do not leave Garima's face as he slowly removes Khushi's hand from his arm. She stares down at her this action as if in slow motion, a heady feeling of fear spiking through her veins. She looks up at Arnav's face, silently imploring him, Arnavji look at me, please just once look at me...

The pandit chooses that very moment to announce, "The auspicious time is passing us by. Should we start the rites of the phere?"

Arnav is still staring at Garima as he seethes at the pandit, " Panditji, there won't be any phere taking place now."

Shock is written on everyone's faces. Khushi notices the angry eyes, the cold indifference in his touch, the determined rigidity in his body; this is the face which she had hoped she'd never see again, the face of Arnav Singh Raizada back in all his glory.

He removes the pink angvastram from his shoulder and drops it to the floor. He steps back and starts to get off the mandap when Khushi grabs his hand again. This time begging him to stay, her tearful eyes hold a question in them. He looks at her for an instant before releasing her grasp and makes his way towards the main door. He pauses as he reaches Garima to give her a venomous stare.

"Arnav please listen to me - " Garima mumbles but Arnav doesn't stop to listen to her and walks out the main door.

Khushi falls to her knees on the mandap crying uncontrollably.


NEXT SCENE (click)



Edited by smitzy - 12 September 2012 at 5:04pm

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Posted: 30 August 2012 at 2:34pm | IP Logged
v intresting dear keep it up
can u send me pm pls pls
do no feel botherd
asr always do as as he did now left the house with his suv
what up next

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Posted: 30 August 2012 at 2:40pm | IP Logged
Thanks Saima!

Well, The scene 3 is going to be up shortly.. My creativity is on a peak now seeing all the negativity on the show Cry

I'll be putting up 3 scenes in each chapter so just hold on to your horsesSmile

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Posted: 30 August 2012 at 2:40pm | IP Logged
holy cow...nooo...please continue sooon dear...add me to your pms/buddy list for future pms...buddy req sent...thnx...

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Posted: 30 August 2012 at 2:45pm | IP Logged
I can totally see this happening! Hes gona be raging when the "truth" comes to light.Can not wait to read part 3!Smile

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Posted: 30 August 2012 at 3:09pm | IP Logged
Thanks for the likes ladies Smile

Work in progress for the Scene 3 Wink
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woooww...its awesum..plz PM me whn u update

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