Originally posted by: aru_86dear don't think except ridzzi no one is excited for ur ff..the only thing is that you don't send pm so none is aware about ur update..
i read ur chapter 1 and promo and seriously you write very well..and enjoyed reading and worried about ginny's dream
Chapter 2 ( Kaisi ... Ye Kashmakash !!!!)
The Next Day ( Morning)
KING RANGERS SCHOOL , PUNE
rocky : ( siting in the clasroom & talking to ayush ) arey mohit
kahaan hain subaah se usse dekha nahi ,mr shinde ki class mein bhi nahi tha ??
gokul ( comes to them) mohit aaj school nahin aaya ( tells them & sits
besides rocky )
rocky : ( suprised ) par kyun ??
gokul: (confused) pata nahi yaar , kal mein usse baat kar raha tha , aur
beech main usne phone call kat kar liya!!! ( getting irritated )
ayush:( confused look on his face ) strange ??
rocky : strange toh hai !! mohit aise kabhi nahi karta toh...(thinking )
ayush( cuts in & says) chodna rocky , i guess uske dad bula rahe the canada
se !!!!!
rocky ( thinking & says , while gokul nodding in agreement ) haan yeh bhi
sakta hai!!!
deepika(with raavi) : hi rocky !!
rocky& ayush ( gokul just smiles at them) : hi deepika ,hi raavi
deepika : guys tum log aa rahe ho na party ke liye , mere farmhouse par hai
raat 7:00pm !!!
rocky & ayush: (smilingly):hum saab aayenge !!!
gokul:(nervous face ), raavi(asking with care ) kya hua gokul, any problem??
gokul: no, koi problem nahi hai ( fake sad smile)
students:good morining sir!!
(rocky,raavi &their friends take their seats)
raavi looking towards gokuls nervous face, he sees her & smiles (sadly)
raavi;(thinking) jarror kuch baat hai , par kya( confused) ??
AHLUWALIA HOUSE , PUNE
sweety: ( on phone) haan papaji ,aap aa rahe haina ??
papaji: haan puttar mein aa raha hoon. Sweety tum lucky ke saath uss business party mein jayo ,baccho ki fikar maat karo ( smilingly) .
sweety: theek hain papaji!!(smilingly) the door bell rings?.
Sweety:papaji mein aapse baad mein baat karti hoon, darwaze par pe koiaaya hain!!!
Sweety opens the door its lucky ji !!! lucky: hayee
itni garmi hain !!!( says jokingly & sits on th sofa )
Sweety goes n gets a glass of water ... sweety ji tells lucky ji '..
Sweety: maine papaji se baat kar li hai , woh aa rahe hain !!!!! lucky: (smilingly ) challo accha hua papakji maan gayye !!!
The phone bell rings
Lucky : (picks up the phone ) hello lucky ahluwalia speaking ( happily) '..hello , hello ( confused face ) & puts the phone down
Sweety: lucky ji thode dino se ye wrong number bula raha hain !!( telling her husband)
Lucky: lagta hai koi apne rishtedaar ko bula raha hain , par number lag nahi raha hoga !! ( telling his wife sweety)
Sweety : haan ye bhi ho sakta hain ( thinking suspiciously ) .
Part 2 ends
Chapter 3 (Ye Lamhe) Pune , Maharastra The next morning in Pune In an undisclosed location two people's shadow are seen talking to
each other. The first person says:- 1st person: tum ne sab imtezaam kar rakha hain (in a
cold manner) .koi gadbad nahi honi chahiye .(says theartheninglyto the 2nd
person ) 2nd person says: haan, maine sab imtezaam kar diya hain
.last time ke jaise koi gadbad nahi hogi . 1st person: good, very good (sly smile) (says to the 2nd
person) ab dekho main un logon ka kaisa haal banyoonguna. (Laughing loudly) the
second person smiles evily. xxx Scene shifts to classroom full of students ….. ginny is in her social studies class. The teacher is going on about
atmosphere& hemisphere .But like the rest of the students ginny is day dreaming.
In ginny's dream:- " There is a white flash where the teachers voice fades and in that
white flash ginny hears a voice (bg tune…kaisa yeh raaz hai is going on ) ,mad
person in white clothes banging his/her head , the mad person has blood all
over his /her clothes and laughing hyseterically – saying Mad person : main sabko maar dalunga /dalungi , maine sabko maar
daala hain . main tumhe bhi maar dalunga/ dalungi The mad person comes towards ginny with a knife in his/her hand . he
/she run towards ginny with a knife , ginny is shocked but she cannot move but
before the mad person can attack ginny with the knife *another person * is attacked by the mad person. The knife is stuck in his stomach , he is bleeding and when he turns
around _______the white flash becomes
smaller and a voice is screaming " ginny, ginny , ginny ahluwalia ", ginny
wakes up from the daymare and looks up to see mrs singh who is looking angrily
at her . Mrs singh : ginny tum class mein sone aayi ho ya padne aayi ho!!!(
scolding ginny ) Ginny: ( embarrassed ) um
sorry ma'am !! Mrs singh : theek hain , agle baar class mein sona mat ( ginny nods
to mrs singh , mrs singh goes back to teaching ) Sam ,raashi& meenakshi look worriedly towards ginny while a
girl ( koel) who is smirking at ginny Koel under her breath says:- Koel: ginny sabse badi drama queen hai .bas attention chahiye
ladkon se ( smirkingly) The *boy * siting next to koel hears this and looks towards ginny
with a serious look . The bell rings : Mrs singh :aaj ke liye itna hi . aap sab mujhe kal subhe 9:30am
school courtyard mein mile kuch important news batanana hai . Students: yes ma'am ( everybody leaves the classroom ) Raashi: ( says)hmmm… kya important news batana hain ma'am ko .
maybe kal ya parso picnic ya trip ke liye jaana hoga( thinking excitedly and
leaves from there ) Xxx School stair case scene Gokul is thinking about something , practically staring into space
( bg tune tumhi batyao raabba from iss pyaar ko kya naam doon is going) Ayush : hey gokul , ( waking gokul from his thinking mode ) Gokul: hi ayush , rocky kahan hain ?? Ayush: ( says with a naughty
smile) rocky yaa raavi ???? Gokul: (gets shocked) raaavi, mujhe raavi se kya kaam hai??woh bas mere best friend ke
cousin sister hai!!! Ayush: bas best friend ki behen hai aur kuch nahi !!!yaar mere se
yeh baat chupaho mat , tum rocky aur mohit se ye baat chupate ho , par mujhe
pata hai ki tum raavi se kitna pyaar karte ho !! Gokul:( hides his feeling and says irritatedly): aisa kuch nahi
hain !!raavi ek acchi dost hai meri that's all !! mujhe apni friendship break
nahi karna rocky ke saath !! rocky ne mere liye kya kuch nahi kiya hai- mujhe
emotional support diya hai, mere saath hospital mein raat bhar ruka jab tak
papa nahi aaye . I cannot do this with him . ( says sadly) Ayush : hey im sorry gokul!!(gokul does not hear him , stands up
with sad face and leaves from there….) Ayush : (smiles )says : tumhein pata nahi gokul ki tum ne raavi ko apne dil mein ek alag jagah de di
hain , tum laak maana kar do par tumhe raavi se pyaar ho gaya hai . tum jitni
baar usssee door jayonge utna hi kareeb payogey
… Part 3 ends
Chapter 4
(Andheri Raat)
In the afternoon in ahluwalias house
The phone bell rings , sweety picks it up
Sweet: hello!!
Pinky : hello sweety di ,pinky
Sweety : ( smiles) pinky kuch zyada hi jaldi phone kar diya !!
Pinky : sorry di, waise raavi, raashi aur sunny kaise hai ??
Sweety: sab theek hain,aur masti kar rahe hain ( smilingly ) ek miniute mein unko bulati hoon !!raavi,raashi-sunny mummy ka phone hai
All the kids come happily
Sunny : mujhe mummy se pehle baat karna hai !!
Sweety: (smiles n says ) theek hain beta !!
After sunny and raashi talk and ask about papa
Xxx
Raavi : hello mummy ,papa aur aap kaise ho .singapore must be a very pretty place na ( smilingly)
pinky : (smiles)haan bahut acchi jagah hai, its very beautiful !! anways 2 hafte ke baad hum phir pune wapas aajayeyenge .
Raavi: wow mumma , jaldi wapas aana . waise papa kahan hai??
Pinky : beta papa Singapore HFCF BRANCH OFFICE mein hai . ab mein phone rakti hoon , bye my princess .
Raavi:bye mummy ( raavi keeps the phone down and head towards upstairs , but the phone bell rings again)
Sweety(in kitchen) raavi beta, phone uthao do (to raavi)
Raavi:haan mausiji ( smiling)
Raavi picks up the phone which was still ringing
Raavi: hello !?
Person: (says) mujhe aaj raat 8:30pm milo GRANSEN HILL RD HIGHWAY KE pass aur der maat karna ( the person cuts the call before raavi can say anything ). Raavi is shocked and confused .
Sweety : (from the kitchen) kaun tha beta ??( to raavi)
Raavi: mausi koi wrong number wala hai ( she was still confused as to who that stranger was , who had told her to meet him/her near gransen hill rd highway)( leaves from there)
Sweety : (under her breath)uff in wrong number waalon ka kuch karna padega ( thinking)
Xxx
In the evening around 6:30-7:00pm
Sweety and lucky get ready and go while nanu/papaji stays at their place .
Nanu: ( to the kids sunny ,raashi and raavi) ab sweety and lucky gayye hain party ke liye ,ginny shriya ke ghar gayyi hain aur rocky dostoon ke saath gayya hain . par ye rocky puttar ka phone lag nahi raha usse ginny ko pickup karna tha par ye rocky .ab kaun jayeyga ginny ko pick up karne ke liye. Shriya toh Gransen Hill Rd, Antop Hill wahaan rehti hai woh jo Highway ke pass hain '..
Raavi: ( thinking ) agar mein wahan jayoon jahan woh stranger bula raha tha toh mujhe pata chalega ki woh mere saath prank khel raha hai ya sacchi mein milna chahata hai
Raavi : ( says) nanu , mein ginny ko pick up kar lungi Antop Hill se . aur aggar raaste mein rocky mill gayya toh use bhi pick up karlungi ( smilingly)
Nanu: par akele beta , mein bhi atta hoon saath mein !!!
Raavi: nahi nanu , aggar aap jayoyge to raashi aur sunny ghar mein akele ho jayenge .
Nanu : theek hai puttar , phone toh hain na !!
Raavi : haan nanu, mein jaldi jati hoon lagta hai bada sa toofan aanewala hai ''
1st person: toofan nahi andhi aanewala hai un logon ki zindagi mein ( talking on the phone coldly) .woh log kya sochte hain bala tal gayyi hain , par un logon par itni badi musibaat aanewala hain ki unki saath pushton yaad rakehgi ( laughing cruelly) .
2nd person : ( on the phone) don't worry sarkar aisa hi hoga ( smirking evilly )
Scene shifts '..
Rocky, ayush and gokul are talking/ walking on the road ( its evening time and its raining ) . suddenly they see two boys arguing with a boy . the two boys start beating the first boy with hockey sticks the boy turns around and it is mohit who is bleeding badly >. Rocky, ayush and gokul are shocked .they run towards mohit .
The boy named shivam says :-
Shivam:ye fattichar tunhara dost hai kya ( mocks with an evil grin)
Ayush : oye fattichar kisko bola , teri toh ( getting angry and rolling up his sleeves)
Rocky : chill ayush , in raaste ke gunde ke mooh nahi lagte hai ( saying sarcastically)
Shivam : oye gunde kisko bola tu !!!
Hooded friend : oye , tumhara dost yaar fattichar hai, tha aur hamesha rahega . aur tum log toh usse zyada ho ( laughing cruelly)
Rocky : hum log.. tum log gunde ho ,the aur hamesha rahoge , im sure laadikiyaan ghass bhi nahi deti hongi ( shoots back at them)
Hooded friend and shivam cant take this insult and come towards them with hockey sticks both the boys group look angrily at each other .scene freezes ''.
Raavi and ginny are coming back from shriya's house when raavi says
Raavi : ginny mujhe kuch batanana hai tumhe
Ginny : ( curious look ) kya raavi di ??
Raavi tells her in flashback mode about the phone incident
Ginny : di mujhe nahi lagta hai ki ye koi prank hai . chalk e dekte hai!! ( advises raavi )
Raavi: ( says ) theek hai !!!
Scene ends '.
Part 4 ends
Precap : the promo 1 scene rain fight scene between shiv ' hooded friend & rocky , ayush gokul and mohit . ginny screaming , all shocked '.
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