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Hello!

I'm new here, but I was actively involved in PRC and DV.  Someone suggested to me to post this story here, so I want to give it a shot. Its been posted on RTW as well. For my other work you guys should go and check that site out. 

I posted other stuff here, so if you guys are interested, see that too.


My RTMC FF- Life ke Side Effects


My MishKa two-shot- A Feeling called L.O.V.E


My HP FF- Unnamed (just called Girl Harry)

I wrote a story for Katha Ratna, but I couldn't finish it before the deadline. For those who don't know Katha Ratna is a contest on RTW. There were exams and trips coming in the way, so it really wasn't possible to finish it. Anyway, I think it was a good thing I didn't, because I think it wouldn't be accepted anyway. It didn't really fit into any of the themes of this year.  :P

Anyway, contest or no contest, I really wanted to write this story, as something quite similar happened to me, so its very close to my heart. I have to say, I'm happy with the story. It may not be my best piece of writing, but it sticks to the theme throughout (which is quite an accomplishment for me). 

This story is about forgiveness; ignoscentia is latin for 'forgiveness'.  Personally, i hold grudges for a long time, and its really hard for me to forgive someone. So, writing something like this was really fun for me, because there is forgiveness in this story. 

Anyway, I think I've babbled enough, so here is the preface to my story. Hope you guys like it, and please do comment, because without comments, I won't know if anyone's reading ;). Also this, for me, is an RTMC story'but really you can decide to chose anyone as the protagonists, its entirely up to you who you guys imagine the protagonists to be. 



Preface


Once upon a time, there lived three friends. Perhaps I should rephrase that; three best friends. There was Alya, (who was popularly known as Al) Sam(eer) (who had really only been referred to by his first name during his naamkaran) and Kabir (who was often called bubbles, much to his chagrin). They had grown up together, right from pre-school. Every waking moment of theirs was spent together, every memory spun together.

As it happens with everyone, they hit teenage, and the unthinkable happened. Alya and Sam started dating. And it felt no less than love-when they kissed, when they held hands, when they looked at each other across the room, that love struck grin plastered on their faces...Their dating didn't disrupt the trio's friendship; they were convinced that nothing was going to change. 

There comes a phase in every couple's life, when they start fighting intensely. Whether it's about what to eat or what their song is, the fights keep coming. The same happened with Al and Sam. They fought nearly day and night, completely forgetting the feeling of love that had been so persistent in the beginning. Everything went in a downwards spiral from them on. The fights increased, got more public. Eventually, even Kabir was pulled into the couple's verbal spats, and he did not like that.

Dark, dreary clouds of anger overshadowed their love for each other. They were wrapped in a tight cocoon, spun by their ire. It tightened with every fight, to the point that the three started suffocating. The only way out was to break free, and that's exactly what they did-Sam and Alya broke up (it was a mutual decision). 

There was just too much pent-up anger though, that they unleashed ruthlessly on each other. The fights didn't stop after the break-up, as they had adamantly believed it would. The boys, fed up, finally gave up. 

Gave up on the friendship that they had promised not to break. Perhaps I should rephrase that- they gave up on our friendship.  Our memories. Our bond. Our secrets...all carried away by the same winds that held the words spoken in fits of rage, and tender words spoken by a love-struck couple...puppy love more like. 

More than any of that, my two supposed best friends gave up on me. Left me, no, they abandoned me. Yes, I, Alya Bose, was ostracized and isolated by my two best friends. Kicked to the curb, and watched as I crumbled.


There we go'tell me what you guys thought. Will post the first chapter soon :)

Ana 
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Table of Contents:

Chapter 1- page 1

Chapter 2- page 2

Chapter 3- page 4

Chapter 4- page 5

Chapter 5- page 7

Chapter 6- page 10

Chapter 7- page 13

Chapter 8- page 15



Edited by AY_candy_luver - 20 September 2012 at 10:29am

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I find it a little weird that there are twenty seven views and no replies, but oh well. Here's the first chapter, for anyone that read the preface and is interested in reading the story (which I presume is not a lot of people). If no one comements I suppose it would be best to delete the post...

Chapter 1-The drama Project

Alya's POV (point of view)

 

"Hey! I'm Jay." An overly enthusiastic boy beamed widely at me, as he plopped himself in the seat next to mine.

 

"Oh great, another person who thinks that there's nothing wrong with the world." I grumbled, rolling my eyes.

 

"I'm sorry, I didn't catch your name..." He asked brightly, either being too dense to notice my pointed eye-roll, or choosing to ignore it.

 

"Alya." I offered, without a friendly smile.

 

Honestly, I was not in the mood...not to say that I was ever in the mood, and now I was forced to do this stupid project with someone who (in the words of Colbie Caillait) shined brighter than the sun.

 

You see, we were assigned partners for this huge project, which apparently counted for half your grade in drama. My crazy drama teacher had read about a new technique to hone your acting skills. Some crap about knowing everything there is to know about your partner before working on a scene. In other words, we were forced to spill our secrets to a complete stranger, and present it in front of the class.

 

"So...Alya, what do you like doing?" Chirped up the undying ball of sunshine. Ugh, he sickened me...with all his smiling and being nice and...just...bleh!

 

"Nothing...really..." I replied, shrugging. I added the last part because I realized I was being unnecessarily harsh to the guy. I didn't even know him, and I was judging him already.

 

Although I could hazard a guess; he was either in a struggling boy band or one of those 'hot-nerds'. Wait a minute...that hair, it was incredibly familiar. There was just something about the way he flipped it...and that hint of a green in his eyes...Yep, I was pretty sure of it, I'd seen him somewhere before.

 

"I've seen you before." I stated blandly, more to myself than to him.

 

"We go to the same school...I wouldn't be surprised if we passed each other in the hallway." He said with a slight chuckle. I scowled. So 'hot nerd' it was.

 

"Anyway, are you free today after-school?" He asked, again, completely ignoring my scowl.

 

"And the purpose of asking this question is...?" I asked, raising my eyebrows suspiciously at him.

 

"Well, my band's practicing after-school, so we could hang out and get to know more about each other.' He replied, completely unabashed. I marveled at his ability to maneuver through my pointed insults, with great ease, might I add. Usually people were completely thrown off by it, and either offended or scared of me.

 

"Your band?!" I asked incredulously.

 

"Yep, do you wanna come see us play?" He asked. I realized he was part of a struggling boy band and was a hot nerd. Watch out lady's, this guy's a catch.

 

"I can think of no better way to spend my afternoon." I replied, my tongue laced with sarcasm, somehow managing to refrain myself from rolling my eyes.

 

"Great! So... I'll see you at five?" He asked, his eyes brightening, smiling. Clearly, he did not understand the concept of sarcasm. I was about to introduce him to it, but looking at his wide smile...

 

"Okay..." I answered with a sigh, nodding and dropping my gaze from his over-enthusiastic frame. Very conveniently (for me) the bell rang right at that moment. I got up hastily, grabbing my bag and started to walk away, when Jay grabbed me by the arm.

 

"Here's the address to my house. At five, okay?" He slipped a piece of paper in my hand, as I nodded and walked away.

 

"Tweny-four, Defense Colony..." I muttered, putting the paper in my pocket, knowing that it would be forgotten.

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Twenty-four, Defense Road...Scribbled in an almost illegible scrawl, in shiny black ink. It was staring straight at me. I didn't particularly know why. It was very simple. I had decided to not waste my Friday and stay at home. It was best to spare my ears the torture of hearing a bunch of half-talented, struggling musicians.

 

What was more, from Jay's behaviour, I could safely presume that his songs were going to be happy. And there was nothing I hated more than listening to happy songs. Oh wait, scratch that. Nothing more than listening to a group of kids my age 'trying' to make music that they think people will like, just so they can climb the social ladder towards popularly.

 

So, in reality, there was no reason for me to go...Except, of course, because my drama grade depended on it. And I could not afford to get another C on my report. My sister would, indefinitely and very cruelly murder me. She had assured me of it at the start of the term.

 

"Fine, you win." I said to the crumpled up piece of paper, realizing a little too late that I had to be totally mad to be talking to an inanimate object. Oh well, it was fun to be insane.

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Hey!

It is really sad to see how devoid of activity this forum is. What's even more sad is that some of the writings posted here are sheer brilliance. And yet, nobody bothers to read or comment. Confused Do not be disheartened, though. SmileAnd do not ever compare the quality of your writing with the number of likes/comments. 

Coming to the story, I think you are off to a flying start! Wink The concept of this story is very intriguing. And I just loved chapter one. It is extremely well written. It gives away but does not give away too much and hence, gets the reader very excited to read the next part of the story. I would love to see how you continue from this point.

I do not know if you are going to post chapter two here. But I will give you a piece of advice-do not give up on this story, even if you don't receive a lot of feedback. If you do post, though, do not forget to PM me. Embarrassed

Great job! 

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Originally posted by LoveToLaugh

Hey!

It is really sad to see how devoid of activity this forum is. What's even more sad is that some of the writings posted here are sheer brilliance. And yet, nobody bothers to read or comment. Confused Do not be disheartened, though. SmileAnd do not ever compare the quality of your writing with the number of likes/comments. 

Coming to the story, I think you are off to a flying start! Wink The concept of this story is very intriguing. And I just loved chapter one. It is extremely well written. It gives away but does not give away too much and hence, gets the reader very excited to read the next part of the story. I would love to see how you continue from this point.

I do not know if you are going to post chapter two here. But I will give you a piece of advice-do not give up on this story, even if you don't receive a lot of feedback. If you do post, though, do not forget to PM me. Embarrassed

Great job! 


Aww!! You have no idea how much your comment means to me! It literally warmed my heart. I was feeling all tingly inside. So thank you very much! :) I haven't given up on this story. As I've said before, the concept is very dear to my heart, so fear not, this will continueWink

I try not to be disheartened, but if I work so hard on something, I hope to get some sort of a response. But…well, such is life. I'm learning to not be very upset with the lack of a response. I will post the second chapter soon, and won't forget to PM you. 

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Hey there! 
So I have been a silent reader of your story, sorry I didn't bother to comment before because of my sheer laziness and net being slow. But had to comment after the first chapter. It was really good, you are an excellent writer and the way of telling story is intriguing. :)

I know how it feels when you post something and do not get a single response, have been there but have gotten used to it now. LOL
But don't give up, comments do come at times late so keep posting and please continue. :)

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Found it!Hey ana!its disha from RTW Tongue I finally found writer's corner,pm'ed you in RTW a while back asking bout the link :P 

anyhoo,you already know my views on the ff!you're simply epic! <3

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Originally posted by Ameres

Hey there! 
So I have been a silent reader of your story, sorry I didn't bother to comment before because of my sheer laziness and net being slow. But had to comment after the first chapter. It was really good, you are an excellent writer and the way of telling story is intriguing. :)

I know how it feels when you post something and do not get a single response, have been there but have gotten used to it now. LOL
But don't give up, comments do come at times late so keep posting and please continue. :)

Thanks so much for your comment :). Its alright, I am slowly learning to get over the fact that people don't comment either Embarrassed
Not quite there yet…but just a short distance to cover. Don't worry, I love this story too much to abandon it. And I will post it here if people are interested Big smile

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Originally posted by disha15

Found it!Hey ana!its disha from RTW Tongue I finally found writer's corner,pm'ed you in RTW a while back asking bout the link :P 

anyhoo,you already know my views on the ff!you're simply epic! <3

Hey stranger :). 
Haha! I just saw it on RTW right now. I'm so sorry I didn't reply, you must think I'm a horrible person. Aww thanks so muc Disha, that's really sweet :D <3

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