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**The RaSiKri Poems Wishing Well** NOTE: on pg 33 (Page 28)

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Posted: 22 September 2012 at 5:55am | IP Logged

Originally posted by iqbalslover

yaar the list of detailed words is too long naROFL
hahhaa i am soo sorry but i always mess up with names, ask divya. she knows the historyROFL
utha liya fone, hello ji how r you, kya kar rahi ho?


Rabdi Shocked... that was long because the poem was long D'oh ...chal chod!!!
ROFL

Uimaaa... ek aur manal!!!!
ROFL


Oye you said i should call u when I need mithai... n u ask main kya kar rahi hoon?...Dhatt!D'oh

RABDI!!!!! tu seedhe tareeke se samjhegi ya fir jalebi ki tarah gol gol ghoomegi???Ermm
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Posted: 22 September 2012 at 6:39am | IP Logged
Originally posted by The_Inner_Voice


Originally posted by iqbalslover

yaar the list of detailed words is too long naROFL
hahhaa i am soo sorry but i always mess up with names, ask divya. she knows the historyROFL
utha liya fone, hello ji how r you, kya kar rahi ho?


Rabdi Shocked... that was long because the poem was long D'oh ...chal chod!!!
ROFL

Uimaaa... ek aur manal!!!!
ROFL


Oye you said i should call u when I need mithai... n u ask main kya kar rahi hoon?...Dhatt!D'oh

RABDI!!!!! tu seedhe tareeke se samjhegi ya fir jalebi ki tarah gol gol ghoomegi???Ermm
ROFL
ROFLoye even manalwa is better than meLOL
oppps i forgots, u wanna eat me?ROFL 
i wont make ghomefy ike jalebi but here is jalebi for u

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Posted: 22 September 2012 at 6:44am | IP Logged
@ Rabdi:  Awww... thanks a ton Rabdi Hug for the jalebis... yum yum!!... Dil khush kar ditta yaara!!!

n haan agar tera naam mujhe kisi mithai ki yaad dilaye to kyun nahi  khaungi LOL


Edited by The_Inner_Voice - 22 September 2012 at 6:45am

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Posted: 22 September 2012 at 6:59am | IP Logged
Originally posted by The_Inner_Voice

@ Rabdi:  Awww... thanks a ton Rabdi Hug for the jalebis... yum yum!!... Dil khush kar ditta yaara!!!

n haan agar tera naam mujhe kisi mithai ki yaad dilaye to kyun nahi  khaungi LOL
aww u r welcome *jumbo hug*
for a change u r allowed to eat meLOL
PS: i love jalebis manEmbarrassed

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Posted: 22 September 2012 at 7:02am | IP Logged
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This sixth wish to be drawn out of the wishing well is that of Apz 

 

Wish Penny put in by Apz :Ram Sia Raavan Lanka comparative poem on RaghaVi's journey!


Omana penne 2.0   Hug
I hope these lines were able to describe the gist of the comparative story...  and this time the poem is a bit too long... No avis here as yet but then I do have a

detailed word help in the immediate next post LOL

 

Kalyug ka Ramayan

 

Parichay mera  "Samay"...

Aapka sutr dhaar;

Le chaloon aapko...

Beete yugon ke paar.

 

Maana hai sadiyon se ise...

Jeevan ka aadhar;

Ramayan is katha ki...

Khyati aparampaar.

 

Rushi Vyaas ki vaani...

Sri Ganesh ka lekh;

Tretayug ki is katha ke...

Paatr the anek.

 

Siya Ram ke is Ramayan mein...

Daanav bhi tha ek;

Raavan ke kukarm the...

Vibhinn aur atirek.

 

Kuch yugon baad fir...

Wohi katha dohrayi;

Tretayug to beet chuka tha...

Kalyug ki baari aayi.

 

Bhagya ke chall ne jeevan ko...

Ek aisa tha mod diya;

Viraj ke roop mein mila pati...

Manmohit hui Siya.

 

Ghruha pravesh kar jab rakhe...

Komal padh piya ghar mein;

Kya pata tha hoga raktpaath...

Jeevan yunhi kshanbhar mein.

 

 Usi din gyat hua use...

Mann mein vichalit thi jo shanka;

Kal jis Ayodhya ka abhaas hua...

Bhali bhanti thi who Lanka.

 

Fir us daanav ne...

Apna tha kuroop dikhaya;

Viraj ke antarmann mein...

Chipa tha Raavan ka saya.

 

Din pratidin Siya wahan...

Banddhi bani roti rahi;

Atyachar sahti rahi who magar...

Umeed ke moti pirote rahi.

 

 Us daanav ne kuchle har sapne...

Fir har disha se loota;

Saptapadi ka har vachan...

Nir arth nikla jhoota.

 

Kabtak sahti chupchap woh...

Sabr ka baandh fir toota;

Tyag diya is bandhan ko...

Jab jeevan ka moh choota.

 

Mukt kar swayam ko...

Ja pohonchi Ayodhya Siya;

Lekar ek naya asthitva...

Punah jeevan ka prarambh kiya.

 

Is Ayodhya nagari mein...

Praja leti jinka naam;

Nirbal ka bal bane ladte...

Is katha ke Raghav Ram.

 

Jab Siya ne har pal swayam ko...

Atyanth duvidha mein paya;

Raghupati Raghav prakat hue...

Niyati ki palatne kaya.

 

Raghav ke aashray mein Siya ka...

Dukhit mann shant soya;

Fir bhagya ne samay ke bhu mein...

Vyatha ka ek beej boya.

 

Is beej ki aisi vruddhi...

Viraj ke aagman se hui;

Fir us daanav ne rache...

Siya ko pane shadyantra kayi.

 

Raghav ke sang Siya ne...

Nidarta ka vastr ab odh liya;

Viraj ke har sheh ko usne...

Maath ke rukh mein mod diya.

 

Par yeh daanav bhi kapti hai...

Har baar badalta mukh anek;

Paane apne Siya ko sadaiva...

Daanv fekha usne ek.

 

Ab yeh to kaal hi batayega...

Hoga kya is katha ka saar;

Vinaash kar Viraj ka...

Kya hoga Siya ka uddhar???

 

Yeh prashn yahan nahi rukta...

Yeh jata hai peedhiyon paar;

Har baar na Raghav aayenge...

Kintu honge Ravan hazaar.

 

Yaad rahe yeh sabko...

Samay ki chaun dhoop;

Har aurat mein base Siya...

Har aurat mein Kali ka roop.

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I know this poem is a way too long and out and out in Hindi... But i couldnt bring myself to write this poem in English... but then I have the word help for those of you who may find a few words confusing.

Please leave your impressions after you read it... It would surely make my day Day Dreaming


Thnak u so so so much Sneha chechiHugi LOVED itEmbarrassedu have penned sia's story beautifully...so inactive these days...Ouch anyways this was a treat for meParty

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Posted: 22 September 2012 at 7:07am | IP Logged
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Sneha.. just how do u manage it buddy!!!! Beautiful!

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Posted: 22 September 2012 at 7:12am | IP Logged
Originally posted by ..Apz..


Thnak u so so so much Sneha chechiHugi LOVED itEmbarrassedu have penned sia's story beautifully...so inactive these days...Ouch anyways this was a treat for meParty


Omane  2.0 Hug

I so so so much happy like the way you are for loving it Big smile... Glad that it reached out to you...and you found it relevant to the gist of the show if not the current tracks...

This was a penny put in so long ago... .. Glad that I could make this wish come true Wink

Somehow couldn't get myself to write it with the crap they have been shoving down our throats from past few weeks... but then yesterday i was like... I better write it before they stoop a level further and I loose the muse of writing this poem forever... Thus I have ended it not their idea of a woman as they plan to show... but rather on my own perception of womanhood.



P.S: Prithvi looks so Day Dreaming in ur siggie... and I know he'll rock!!!...waiting for the flick!!!!


Edited by The_Inner_Voice - 22 September 2012 at 7:14am

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Posted: 22 September 2012 at 7:37am | IP Logged
Originally posted by The_Inner_Voice

Originally posted by ..Apz..


Thnak u so so so much Sneha chechiHugi LOVED itEmbarrassedu have penned sia's story beautifully...so inactive these days...Ouch anyways this was a treat for meParty


Omane  2.0 Hug

I so so so much happy like the way you are for loving it Big smile... Glad that it reached out to you...and you found it relevant to the gist of the show if not the current tracks...

This was a penny put in so long ago... .. Glad that I could make this wish come true Wink

Somehow couldn't get myself to write it with the crap they have been shoving down our throats from past few weeks... but then yesterday i was like... I better write it before they stoop a level further and I loose the muse of writing this poem forever... Thus I have ended it not their idea of a woman as they plan to show... but rather on my own perception of womanhood.



P.S: Prithvi looks so Day Dreaming in ur siggie... and I know he'll rock!!!...waiting for the flick!!!!

even am  not happy with the showOuchbut ur poem is such a beautyEmbarrassed Yes...the movie will rockParty...aiyyaaWink

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