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**The RaSiKri Poems Wishing Well** NOTE: on pg 33 (Page 26)

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Posted: 21 September 2012 at 6:40pm | IP Logged
loved these ones:

Yeh prashn yahan nahi rukta...

Yeh jata hai peedhiyon paar;

Har baar na Raghav aayenge...

Kintu honge Ravan hazaar.

 

Yaad rahe yeh sabko...

Samay ki chaun dhoop;

Har aurat mein base Siya...

Har aurat mein Kali ka roop.



n there should be a competition in your next hindi poem, 'boojho to jane' - no dictionary help will be given n the one who explains it first gets a date with . . . HC ofcourse ROFL

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Posted: 21 September 2012 at 10:20pm | IP Logged
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This sixth wish to be drawn out of the wishing well is that of Apz 

 

Wish Penny put in by Apz :Ram Sia Raavan Lanka comparative poem on RaghaVi's journey!


Omana penne 2.0   Hug
I hope these lines were able to describe the gist of the comparative story...  and this time the poem is a bit too long... No avis here as yet but then I do have a

detailed word help in the immediate next post LOL

 

Kalyug ka Ramayan

 

Parichay mera  "Samay"...

Aapka sutr dhaar;

Le chaloon aapko...

Beete yugon ke paar.

 

Maana hai sadiyon se ise...

Jeevan ka aadhar;

Ramayan is katha ki...

Khyati aparampaar.

 

Rushi Vyaas ki vaani...

Sri Ganesh ka lekh;

Tretayug ki is katha ke...

Paatr the anek.

 

Siya Ram ke is Ramayan mein...

Daanav bhi tha ek;

Raavan ke kukarm the...

Vibhinn aur atirek.

 

Kuch yugon baad fir...

Wohi katha dohrayi;

Tretayug to beet chuka tha...

Kalyug ki baari aayi.

 

Bhagya ke chall ne jeevan ko...

Ek aisa tha mod diya;

Viraj ke roop mein mila pati...

Manmohit hui Siya.

 

Ghruha pravesh kar jab rakhe...

Komal padh piya ghar mein;

Kya pata tha hoga raktpaath...

Jeevan yunhi kshanbhar mein.

 

 Usi din gyat hua use...

Mann mein vichalit thi jo shanka;

Kal jis Ayodhya ka abhaas hua...

Bhali bhanti thi who Lanka.

 

Fir us daanav ne...

Apna tha kuroop dikhaya;

Viraj ke antarmann mein...

Chipa tha Raavan ka saya.

 

Din pratidin Siya wahan...

Banddhi bani roti rahi;

Atyachar sahti rahi who magar...

Umeed ke moti pirote rahi.

 

 Us daanav ne kuchle har sapne...

Fir har disha se loota;

Saptapadi ka har vachan...

Nir arth nikla jhoota.

 

Kabtak sahti chupchap woh...

Sabr ka baandh fir toota;

Tyag diya is bandhan ko...

Jab jeevan ka moh choota.

 

Mukt kar swayam ko...

Ja pohonchi Ayodhya Siya;

Lekar ek naya asthitva...

Punah jeevan ka prarambh kiya.

 

Is Ayodhya nagari mein...

Praja leti jinka naam;

Nirbal ka bal bane ladte...

Is katha ke Raghav Ram.

 

Jab Siya ne har pal swayam ko...

Atyanth duvidha mein paya;

Raghupati Raghav prakat hue...

Niyati ki palatne kaya.

 

Raghav ke aashray mein Siya ka...

Dukhit mann shant soya;

Fir bhagya ne samay ke bhu mein...

Vyatha ka ek beej boya.

 

Is beej ki aisi vruddhi...

Viraj ke aagman se hui;

Fir us daanav ne rache...

Siya ko pane shadyantra kayi.

 

Raghav ke sang Siya ne...

Nidarta ka vastr ab odh liya;

Viraj ke har sheh ko usne...

Maath ke rukh mein mod diya.

 

Par yeh daanav bhi kapti hai...

Har baar badalta mukh anek;

Paane apne Siya ko sadaiva...

Daanv fekha usne ek.

 

Ab yeh to kaal hi batayega...

Hoga kya is katha ka saar;

Vinaash kar Viraj ka...

Kya hoga Siya ka uddhar???

 

Yeh prashn yahan nahi rukta...

Yeh jata hai peedhiyon paar;

Har baar na Raghav aayenge...

Kintu honge Ravan hazaar.

 

Yaad rahe yeh sabko...

Samay ki chaun dhoop;

Har aurat mein base Siya...

Har aurat mein Kali ka roop.

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I know this poem is a way too long and out and out in Hindi... But i couldnt bring myself to write this poem in English... but then I have the word help for those of you who may find a few words confusing.

Please leave your impressions after you read it... It would surely make my day Day Dreaming

this is a beauty snehaStarStarStarStar

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Posted: 21 September 2012 at 10:32pm | IP Logged
and thanx for the glossary

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Posted: 22 September 2012 at 2:03am | IP Logged
Originally posted by _dkmystery_

wah wah wah... mast likha sis Hug
I think, school k baad 1st time itni sudh aur klisht hindi k darshan prapt hue hain mujhe Big smile

gr8 job by your 'team', now they deserve the weekend off.. plsss ROFL


Aaja Jhappi Pa le...Hug

ROFLROFL...Mahavidhyalay (college) ke baad shayad maine bhi ab jaakar pauranik hindi mein kavita likhi hai ROFLROFLROFL

Sis tu kabhi sudhregi nahi D'oh...sudharna bhi matt!!!!...

Main soch rahi thi agli poem teri wish ho...Siya Krish wali...but since "the team" is on leave as per ur wish... u'll have to wait!!!Evil SmileLOL

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Posted: 22 September 2012 at 2:06am | IP Logged
Originally posted by _dkmystery_

loved these ones:

Yeh prashn yahan nahi rukta...

Yeh jata hai peedhiyon paar;

Har baar na Raghav aayenge...

Kintu honge Ravan hazaar.

 

Yaad rahe yeh sabko...

Samay ki chaun dhoop;

Har aurat mein base Siya...

Har aurat mein Kali ka roop.



n there should be a competition in your next hindi poem, 'boojho to jane' - no dictionary help will be given n the one who explains it first gets a date with . . . HC ofcourse ROFL


Glad you loved those lines... My personal favorites too LOL...yeh lo...fir se same same LOL

Idea bura nahi hai LOL... that "boojho to  jane" made me go ROFL

Oye date with HC Shocked... to fir to main hi glossary na likhun??? ROFLROFL


Edited by The_Inner_Voice - 22 September 2012 at 2:14am

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Posted: 22 September 2012 at 2:07am | IP Logged
awesum work, nd as usual sara hua dimag se itna acha poem bahar aya hain...ClapROFL
praise HC/RAGHAV 4 dat...TongueROFL
hainn, koi shayar, to koi shikari, RAGHAV ne sabko kya kya nahi banaya hain..Day DreamingROFL

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Posted: 22 September 2012 at 2:09am | IP Logged
WOW Sneha di Hug I'm just at loss of words in praise of ur poetic excellence...ClapClap

Every word, every sentence has so much indepth meaning in it...i couldn't quote the words which touched me the most coz the whole poem is so beautifully written...i really wish i had ur talents Embarrassed

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Posted: 22 September 2012 at 2:12am | IP Logged
Originally posted by -vandy-

this is a beauty snehaStar


Thanks Di Hug... A four star!!!! ... ok now i'm like DancingLOL

Originally posted by -vandy-

and thanx for the glossary


You are welcome Di... Big smile



Edited by The_Inner_Voice - 22 September 2012 at 2:16am

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