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Posted: 12 August 2012 at 11:39am | IP Logged
Hey poppy.. God job ya!!
I js loved d baby sittin part..
kria wid babies awwwieee :*
Kindly pm me abt ur next update!!
Grt work:)

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Posted: 12 August 2012 at 7:56pm | IP Logged
hey ya update yaar tis is not done pehle to itna achha 1st part dete ho aur ab 14 pgs ho gaye 2nd part k liye ab kitna tadpaoge... pls pls pls update

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Posted: 12 August 2012 at 7:57pm | IP Logged
god... itna achha update aur ab 2nd part do na pls pls pls

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Posted: 15 August 2012 at 11:38pm | IP Logged
awesome update...loved it

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Posted: 19 August 2012 at 1:56am | IP Logged
whare next part yaar...

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Posted: 19 August 2012 at 5:22am | IP Logged
Poppy isse kab update karegi? Tongue

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Posted: 19 August 2012 at 6:08am | IP Logged

Note: aaj mai note se shuru karungi i m so sorry my friend mujhe pata nahi how i forgot to to wish u i m really sorry belated Happy Birthday Shravani i knw i am a jerk i did not come online yesterday bohot busy hogayi thi i m so sorry Cry


Hey ppl how r u all update leke aagayi fir se dnt know how it is tum log padhke batao nd i m so sorry i dnt remember kisne pic manga tha i showed Priyal's pic in this as requested i m so sorry could not remember your name hope u all will like it start reading...


Kriya went and wrote her diary and drifted to sleep to welcome another sweet and wonderful day with kids. Two days passed too quick for here with her daily routine her day with kids writing diary on the 2nd day ni8 she received a call from Pari(Priyal's mom)

Pari : Hello' Kriya??

Kr : Haa may I know who is speaking??

Pari : Beta mai Pari Chopra bol rahi hu hum tumhare ghar aae the..

Kr : haa mam mai aapko hi call karne vali thi kal mai konse time pea au vaha??

Pari : Maine apne driver se baat kar lia hai kal vo tumhe subah 7 ko pic karne aajaega is it ok with u??

Kr : Mam mai kal khud aajaungi mujhe aadat hai aap kyu takleef le rahe ho.

Pari : Beta ye humare lie kya takleef ho sakta hai tum hamari beti ke saath uska khayal rakhne reh rahi ho tumhare lie hum itna to kar sakte hai ab mana mat karo kal 7 ko driver aajaega 1 month tak tum yahi rahogi so apna luggage pack kar lena ok ab so jao. Gud ni8.

Kr : Ok mam Gud ni8.

She wrote her diary packed her cloths and stuff and slept this was the first morning after months that she woke up peacefully without any hustle bustle she woke up at 6 got ready and was waiting for the driver to come.

The driver came exactly at 7 and they reach Chopra's Mansion at around 7:30 Kriya was received by Pari and Sandy.

Pari : Gud mrng beta.

Kriya : Gud mrng mam, gud mrng sir.

Sandy : Gud mrng Kriya.

All the servants come and stand in a line there

Pari introduces everyone by the work they do in their house like one of preparing food, one to go for market, driver, cleaner etc''. etc''.

Kriya : Mam aap bura na mane to mai kuch keh sakti hu??

Pari : haa beta bolo.

Kr : Mam kya Priyal aur mere lie mai khud khana bana sakti hu and ghar ke saare kaam mai kar dungi bazaar se saaman bhi leke aajaungi itne bade ghar mai sirf mai aur Priyal hi rahenge to mere paas bohot time rahega agar aapko koi aitraz nahi ho to ye sab mai kardungi.

Pari : I know tum ye sab kar sakti ho but..

Kr : Please mam trust me.

Pari : *with a smile* I do beta ok as u wish but Priyal aur tum yaha nahi kahi aur rahoge.

Kr : fir kaha??

Sandy : abhi hum tumhe vahi le jaa rahe hai chalo.

They go to an area where it was away from town the atmosphere there was pleasant it was there farm house the area was filled with greenery. They entered the house Priyal was in her room. Pari and Sandy showed her the entire farmhouse it was not that big but every room was spacious enough Kriya and Priyal's room were adjacent to each other. Pari knocked Priya's door.

Priyal : How's it??

Pari : Beta mai muma vo kriya didi aagayi hai me nd dad r leaving to airport.

Priyal : K happy journey I am busy in here.

Kriya : Priyal jaane se pehle mumy papa se ek baar milto lo.

Priyal : Excuse me mind ur business its my family matter.

Kriya just kept quiet.

Pari : beta Priyal aise hi hai hope u don't mind.

Kriya : *smiling* nahi aunty I dnt mind its totally fine with me.

Pari : Sry beta aise shaitaan ke paas tumhe chodke jaa rahe hai hum.

Kriya : Aunty bacche shaitaan ho tabhi maza aata hai aap fikar mat kijie aap shayad late ho rahe honge.

Sandy : Haa kriya hope Priyal doesn't trouble u much.

Kriya : No sir I m sure it wont be like that.

Pari : Beta tum dono ko bahar se kuch chahie ho to maine vaha table pe ramu ka number rakh dia hai vo leke aajaenge ok.

Kriya : Thnkq mam.

Pari n Sandy : Priyal beta bye hum jaldi vapas aajaenge.

Pari and Sandy leave to airport and the driver after leaving them at airport goes back to Chopra's manshion.

Coming back to Kriyal's (Kriya + Priyal) place

Priyal was still in her room Time 8:30 am

Kriya was near the dining table arranging things for Priyal to have her breakfast. Kriya goes to Priyal's room and knocks the door.

Priyal : Who's it??

Kriya : Priyal mai Kriya tumhare lie breakfast ready kar dia hai.

Priyal : Can't u just leave me alone for some time.

Kriya : Sorry for disturbing but Priyal u should not neglect food.

Priyal : I am 12 years old an I know what to do and what not to plz can u leave me alone now.

Kriya : Ok but have your breakfast soon I will be around if u need any help do call me.

Priyal : *self talks* what the hell does she think of herself koi mujhe chain se rehne nahi dega kya arrghh'' priyal calm down

Kriya did not get any reply so she kept herself busy in scanning the entire house and searching for vegetables to prepare for their lunch.

Time 9:30 but still Priyal did not come out of her room this was making kriya more restless.

Kriya : *self talk* kya karu jau ki nahi abhi tak priyal ne breakfast nahi kia aur room ke andar akelie hai she might be feeling too lonely kya karu.

Priyal : *in her room* god mom dad ne ye kiske saath chod dia mujhe agghh ab isko kaise jhelu.

Kriya : *outside Priyal's room* kitni pyaari bacchi hogi room mai akeli hai shayad mumy papa ko bohot miss kar rahi hogi.

Priyal : *inside* mom dad ko jaana tha vo gaye but y the hell is this girl here.

Kriya : *outside* thank god sir aur mam ne mujhe yaha iske saath rakha varna Priyal kaise reh paati.

Priyal : *inside* ab pata nahi kaha hai aur kya kar rahi hai let me see.

Kriya : *outside* I think mujhe ab door knock karna hi padega varna vo ro bhi sakti hai lonely rehne ke vajah se.

(Guys yaha u can understand the situation)

Kriya lifts her hand to knock the door while Priyal too comes to open the door Kriya was about to knock but Priyal opened the door


Priyal :


 


ye meri fav hai i just love her dance nd iss SS mai Priyal(avneet) bhi dancer hai

Priyal opens the door Kriya stood there with her hand lifted to knock seeing Priyal she dropped her hand.

Priyal gave her a disgusting look and dashed out of her room went to dining table and started eating her breakfast without even caring about Kriya.

Kriya : *self talks* Priyal kitni cute hai shayad vo mujhse free nahi feel kar rahi hai koi baat nahi.

Kriya also joins her and starts eating looking at Priyal but Priyal didn't even look at her kriya thought to take the 1st step.

Kriya : Gud Mrng Priyal.

Priyal : *fake smile* Gud mrng.

Kriya : I am Kriya tumhe mera naam pata nahi hoga shayad.

Priyal : *thinking* god can't she keep quiet

Priyal : Hi Kriya.

Kriya : *hearty smile* aaj ka kya plan hai.

Priyal : to sit in my room.

Kriya : Won't u get bored sitting alone there,

Priyal : U dnt need to worry I know how to keep myself occupied.

Saying this she left from there without finishing her breakfast and slammed her door behind her.(she just slammed it did not lock it)

Kriya : lagta hai priyal kisise jaldi nahi milti Universji plz aap mera help kardo plz see that vo apne room mai safe rahe usse kaise mana na hai vo sab mai dekhlungi bus aap uska khayal rakhna.

Kriya kept herself busy in preparing lunch for them as she doesn't know what Priyal likes she came out of the kitchen room and reached the landline phone where she found a phonebook about which Pari told her she called Chopra's cook to ask abt her likes and dislikes after knowing them she made a list what all she will need for this month and called Ramu kaka for bringing those items mean while she kept checking Priyal in between Ramu kaka brought all the items and Kriya prepared Mutter paneer for their lunch as it was Priyal's fav. dish she went to call Priyal for lunch.

*Inside Priyal's room*

Kriya was shocked to see her room it was so messed up but her room was sooo gud one side she had all her soft toys arranged towards her left her bed in centre and all over her room, dancers pics were plastered on the walls her PC was towards her ri8 which was not shut downed it had dancing girls wallpaper Kriya understood that Priyal loved dance but priyal was not in her room she moved forward where she found a small room it was rehearsal hall Priyal was not dancing but she was sitting near the window looking out. Kriya could understand that she was thinking about something she didn't want to disturb her but she had to disturb her thoughts as too much thinking can even harm.

Kriya : Priyal..

No response

Kriya : *a bit louder* Priyal tum yaha??

Priyal looked at her : How the hell did u get in here.

Kriya : vo Priyal tum room mai nahi thi to tumhe dhundte mai yaha tak aagayi.

Priyal : I said get out of here.

Kriya doesn't say anything and goes out and waits for her near the door(pura out vale door ke paas) Priyal after sometime comes and sees her still standing there.

Priyal : what do u want know??

Kriya : Priyal I am really sorry mujhe nahi pata tha ki vo tumhare lie special place hai mai bas tumhe lunch kelie bulane ayi thi.

Priyal : Dekho jab mujhe khane ka mann karega tab mai kha lungi mai utni bhi choti nahi hu I can look after myself.

Kriya : Priyal I am so sorry tumhara gussa khane pe mat utaro.

Priyal : This is enough can't u get it 1st thing mujhe tum pasand nahi ho nd 2nd mujhe majboori ke vajah se tumhare paas rehna pad raha hai plz let me be myself.

Kriya : Priyal abhi I think tumhe thoda rest lena chahie mai tumhare lie wait karungi thodi der aaram se baito.

Kriya leaves from there Priyal *thinking* ahhh I just can't tolerate her anymore

Kriya waits for Priyal near dining table till 3 waiting for her she sleeps there itself


Aaj ke update mai itna hi hope u liked it i know utna kuch nahi tha but still if u liked it like button click karo and leave your comments all type of comments are welcomed...





Edited by ShravniC - 19 August 2012 at 8:21am

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