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I loved every bit of it and how you wrote, it!
Reserving, as its the end will write my size comment at least, or bit more.
EDITED!
I wanted it to seep in.
I would just say, when you are comfortable enough, write a novel, thats it!
Coming to this FF, I have been active in the 2nd half of this ff and given u all feedbacks, cos I understood abt it later, which means I have to still, go through some of your earlier chapters, which I will go through soon.
Coming to the final part, Sharon trying to behave as an elder sister, perfect. Their bond is apt.
I love the way you bring out emotions with so much ease and make normal things seem so beautiful.
I like the family thing and open ended..thing.
Sharon throwing stones at window, funny, then she takes him to a date, cool. Taking control...
Love the way you described nature, enough said.
I loved the way she tells abt the scarf thing and apologised.
I also like the cake part and the quick kiss.
Now the way Swayam's emotions r potrayed and about his eyes changing so much, take a bow woman!! I have not seen any writing where his emotions are so beautifully described and the way his eyes speak volumes.
I loved the way, he makes her confess her love, and laughs later.
I love the naughty, understanding, practical bond they share.
Now, srsly the PETA thing cracked me up, but so true, poor puppy. But an adorable gift.
The way you ended the kiss was apt, and the last line, beautiful.
PS I loved the quote u made at the start.
Finally they both deserved each other, and they understood it, :)
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