Adi Sir BDay STORY CONTEST -- **RESULTS on pg 16** - Page 17

Finished another story !!! 😃
ENTRY 1
Though some point i feel some similarity with your style but i really do not expect Entry 1 is yours...as i am sure about Entry 6...
First of all i would like to congratulate for writing 2 stories...👏
Secondly it is quite different Story from you...you tried your best to write something different & for me you are quite successful in it...👏

"Vivek: Sir, keunke serjent suri ke sath ye ghatna police force ki joining mein hui thi tou police nay unhein pension jaari ker di..."
As far i know (may be i m wrong) pension is given to all the govt employees after their retirement so there is no link with Serjent Suri's accident...

Another point - we know that Abhijeet sir forgot his past totally then how he know about Sergent Suri ?? I mean how can he know about Police academy's incident ?? 😕

You used Ins Samaddar & Zorawar proper way though i am confused why Sergent Suri whisper 'eagle' ? 😕

Anyway good story...its better one than Entry 6...😊

Originally posted by: Shagnika

I have done the least amount of research in that case 😆

BTW, I am deleting my entry (entry 2) for now... because of some personal reasons. I might be posting it back sometime later. Thanks to all those who have read the story and liked it and also for giving the precious reviews 😃

Edited by visrom - 11 years ago

Yup Shagz... Even I wanna know how many people voted it.. I don;t think there were more than 5 ...

Originally posted by: debasree04

Finished another story !!! 😃
ENTRY 1
Though some point i feel some similarity with your style but i really do not expect Entry 1 is yours...as i am sure about Entry 6...
First of all i would like to congratulate for writing 2 stories...👏
Secondly it is quite different Story from you...you tried your best to write something different & for me you are quite successful in it...👏

"Vivek: Sir, keunke serjent suri ke sath ye ghatna police force ki joining mein hui thi tou police nay unhein pension jaari ker di..."
As far i know (may be i m wrong) pension is given to all the govt employees after their retirement so there is no link with Serjent Suri's accident...

Another point - we know that Abhijeet sir forgot his past totally then how he know about Sergent Suri ?? I mean how can he know about Police academy's incident ?? 😕

You used Ins Samaddar & Zorawar proper way though i am confused why Sergent Suri whisper 'eagle' ? 😕

Anyway good story...its better one than Entry 6...😊

There were 7 votes in total !! I expected even less actually.. I will give my reviews. My college has started so could not be online all day. Will give my reviews this week someday !

Originally posted by: debasree04

I read Story 2...
Shagnika...really wonderful story...i enjoyed it throughout...fast paced story...i like DEAGLE part...
I have not found any loopholes except that Short circuit & i think there is one typing error also
"Vivek: Sir, maine Koogle mein jaake us code ko search kia to initially mujhe kuch nahi mil raha tha... To maine us code ke do hisse mein divide kiya - SVD 59 IE aur doosra hissa 65-123. Tab jaake mujhe pata chala ki SVD 59 ek type ka rifle ka code hai sir."
I think "IE" will be with 65-123...
Otherwise everything is so perfect...wonderfully used the theme...Story is Abhijeet centris...some dialogues are too good...give wonderful space to Vivek & Purvi...overall i liked it...

Thank You Deba di 😃 Yeah, I know the short circuit error 😳 

Originally posted by: Shagnika

There were 7 votes in total !! !

Kya kar sakte hain !! I expected even less initially. I extended the time till the evening and thats why got 2 more people voting ! or else it was 5 . 

Originally posted by: Shagnika

Kya kar sakte hain !! I expected even less initially. I extended the time till the evening and thats why got 2 more people voting ! or else it was 5 . 

Hmm... And when will you post your story? I am waiting ... Even Mallika ! Where is she? I was waiting for you people's stories. Post it na !