Posted:
11 years ago
Story 4
I would say.. Its a nice simple Khooni story.. Totally the one which is perfect to be aired as a part of the show. π You brought in the concept of death lilly... π and nice to see someone research for the story in this domain rather than the technology side π and also made Tji make a mistake π Bechaari..
I think you are a new writer.. and if you are .. then I would say. ... keep going with your stories... and please don;t let your research for story get distracted or diverted by people hereπ (including meπ) keep your story research on areas like herb..trees .. animals.. and something from the nature... because at the end of the day this is what is shown in real CID.. all the hi-fi techie stuff we write here is for our fun.. which will never make it to the real CID caseπ
There are no loopholes in your story as such... πits only that you made it a little quick... those boy friends and Rivals' where Sachin and others were interrogating,.. try to add twists there .. You clearly pictured that CID suspected 5-6 people.. πbut if you add twists to those characters you yourselves will see your story growing and getting intriguing...Every character in the story should have a motive to commit the crime π thats my funda π
Anyways.. Lots of gyan.. π So...all in all .. Great job.. and let me tell you its really nice to read a story which doesn't require me to remember all those complicated techie stuff π gives a CID script reading feeling π