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arisai Goldie

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Posted: 17 November 2012 at 7:54am | IP Logged


Edited by arisai - 20 July 2013 at 12:26pm

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norolim Goldie

Joined: 10 June 2012
Posts: 1436

Posted: 17 November 2012 at 8:04am | IP Logged

New character! Seems interesting, I want to know more. 

I like her character, Im actually torn between what to believe. Manorma seems too...surreal in a sense. With an upbringing like that, and also that attitude; her reactions kinda surprise me. Deeper thinking required here.

I like Gauri. There is mystery, of course. I'll just be patient and see where this heads. 

Edited by dreamyshadows - 18 November 2012 at 3:13pm
vgedin IF-Dazzler

Joined: 26 August 2012
Posts: 4772

Posted: 17 November 2012 at 8:07am | IP Logged

Wow! I have told you before, that your writing has this almost clinical precision to it - you're economic with words - not one word more, not one word less. You managed, in a single chapter - to convey almost everything significant about Manorama's life AND Akash's birth. And that is spectacular. Akash really didn't have a choice, did he ? Doomed right from his birth - "You're going to grow up to be just like your daddy."

The carefully constructed shields built over the past sixteen years were crumbling.

London Bridge is falling down.
Falling down.
Falling down.

London Bridge is falling down.

Brilliant, I say. But you've turned a Nursery Rhyme into a sounding like a death knell! 

You must be loyal to the Group.

She tilted her head to the side and waited for him to ask.

You must be loyal to your Family.

So, so beautiful...

You must be loyal to me!

"Will you marry me?"

Ouch! Mahinder is one of those men - completely in love; their lover is indispensable to them, self-sacrificing be damned. And Manorama - "that most dangerous combination of both astonishingly intelligent and devastatingly poor". Precision - this is it. Her silences speak volumes - they are more sensuous than her words. This chapter was dark, like the others in Tainted. But tell you what ? This was also incredibly sexy

Splendid, as usual. Now I'm off to see all the pretty pictures on the blog. I want to see Mano's dress! 

PS - Oh, and who is Gauri's first born ?

Edited by vgedin - 17 November 2012 at 11:11am

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meem17 Goldie

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Posted: 17 November 2012 at 9:17am | IP Logged
yay...i am first to comment...well the other before just res it...welll thanks for the good update...cant wait for more...hihihiBig smile 
...Pwincess... IF-Sizzlerz

Joined: 04 July 2010
Posts: 10897

Posted: 17 November 2012 at 9:21am | IP Logged
Loved the Chapter! My heart went out for Manorma for having to be a maid and letting go of her freedom at the age of 16. I also like Gauri and Mahinder's charachters. I think Akaash probabally grew up the way he was because he might have had to give up his childhood to be the saviour of Gauri's child and he didn't want that so he took this route. I dont know just a guess.
Maybe that's why he killed the children too because he had a bad childhood which led to him becoming this way so he didnt want the children to be like that.
ive requested permission on the blog. Username is pwincess1 on wordpress.

Edited by ...Pwincess... - 17 November 2012 at 9:22am

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TabbyJ. IF-Rockerz

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Posts: 5523

Posted: 17 November 2012 at 9:21am | IP Logged

this story just keeps getting better day by day!!!
so iss khusshi narrating this?

Edited by tabbyj - 17 November 2012 at 4:29pm
dumas IF-Stunnerz

Joined: 21 April 2006
Posts: 29515

Posted: 17 November 2012 at 9:21am | IP Logged
awesome  chapter wow poor  manorma at 16 she had to become a maid  letting go of her freedom and her dreams so she can stay alive  and then falling in love with a man knowing that he is and will only be the face for they family and he can be taken away anytime akaash probably grew up the way he was because he might have had to give up his childhood to be the savior of gauri's child and he and his family always had to sacrifice for her and her family now i understand in a weird way he save those kids awesome update beautifully done thanks for the pm

Edited by dumas - 17 November 2012 at 5:15pm
khusiarnav Goldie

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Posted: 17 November 2012 at 9:31am | IP Logged


U left me speechless!

One word... Beautiful!!!  Clap  Clap  Clap  Clap  Clap  Clap

Edited by khusiarnav - 17 November 2012 at 3:04pm

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