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Posted: 15 August 2012 at 9:28pm | IP Logged
Originally posted by shana0127

Originally posted by mahi0809

Hey Shana,
     Its a fabulous update. Loved it... might I say, I love the office scenes. Plzz add more of them in future. I had read it when you posted the update but forgot to unres my comment so thought of commenting on it properly now.

OOOHHH I just Lurvveee a jealous Uday EmbarrassedEmbarrassed, he becomes a sexy spicy-licious HOTTIE Blushing when he is jealous, but I was confused with something. You said that Uday hasn't indulged in bedding women in the past 1 yr?? Is that what you mean?.. cause in the last book in 1 year uday slept with over 50 women right of which he had contact info of only 50 so what happened that he hasn't slept with a woman in 1 year, must be a record for him na?... or am I totally reading it wrong?

And if I'm reading it right then how come Minakshi is happy with having her hands off Uday for a whole year?... yeh part kuch samajh nahi aaya... kindly clarify.


Looking towards more jealousy erupting updates in future with Uday jealous with Aman (though I know nothing's gonna happen with M and A as M's a totally devoted girlClap)... however, I would love to imagine Uday having a wrong impression as if Manya and Aman shared a kiss/ intimate moment like he saw something but interpreted something else and then understands what it feels to have lost what only belongs to you and what Manyata would've felt thinking of him being with all those women (may be schemed by Minaxshi)... want thim to feel the hurt for a little while of sharing something that one absolutely CAN'T share... like a life partner... and then it gets cleared with him breathing a sigh of relief.Wink So, can we see the high & mighty Yuvraj Udayveer Singh learning a lesson or two in morality/ moral ethics?... Would love to see that happen tooSmile.. tuning a bit of his imperfect side.

Can't wait to see the rave party and how it brings ManVeer even closer. Plus I can't wait to see Uday finding out who tampered the reports and how everything comes out in the open.Shocked

Plz plz plzz update soon Shana... this is one update... I am eagerly waiting to read.Big smile




Well in Book I he never knew Manyata loves him ,he was all in all bachelor spree so the case was different  .

Here in Book II he is a lover  who lost his his beloved and is a father but then a man too He does loose his balance may go squandering around but then its not necessary that he will sleep everyday with a new one.He has a big business to take care of Minakshi does try succeeds as well but not often dear.


Minakshi is his business partner they may share something more sometime but then he has no commitments.Dont worry will logically take up this issue in next update


Yes UV will find culprit Minakshi as well as scar and Manya being Mnayata but poor UV his way to his wife wont be so easy.

He will have to woo her again all anew .



I'm happy Uday will find out about the scar in the next chapter itself... there is no excessive dragging in your style of writing which is really commendable as it keeps the level of anticipation and interest heightened in the reader.

Now, he'll have to woo her after this Day Dreaming... this line just makes me day dream yaar, endless scenarios of magical moments... a reader's bliss of imaginative moments, but just one request... please don't make the wooing part easy on Uday's behalf. Manyata was never like an ordinary girl or an easy nut to crack... makes this hard for him plus keeping Manyata's feisty self alive.

Hope you'll update soon!!

P.S: Have you read Prachu's FF: Tum Miley?... It is FABULOUS!... Gives off a true DEK feel. Its a MUST READ if you haven't tried it yet.


Edited by mahi0809 - 16 August 2012 at 12:52am

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Posted: 15 August 2012 at 10:22pm | IP Logged
Originally posted by shana0127

Originally posted by xxDaydreameRxx

Yes I've seen that you can write romantic scenes beautifully and surely with each chapter you seem to get even better and better. But than there's something about this sequel - Wheels of Fortune - that has so much more than just hot romantic ManVeer scenes. To me, in this whole chap, it's that thing- what do you call it? - main idea? theme? whatever its is - that stood out. That theme that whatever Manya is for Uday is because of his connection with Manyata and that right there is so significant on its own. It's like Manyata is Uday's lifeline, and it just shows how desperately his heart wants to cling onto her. Honestly this chapter was beautifully done.
Loved reading Manya's shyness and then was completely amazed when she replied back to UV with so much attitude! Shocked I guess UV was right - Manya's like a wild mix of Yuvraani Manyata and Monia and quite honestly I'm loving her! Big smile
Also love that last lines you wrote about Manya carving a niche by being Manya not Manyata, again these kind of ideas are so symbolic and just amazing in the way you've blended them!
Again my comment may be a wierd blabber - I honestly dont know what it is Ermm, but well in short - You're doing a beautiful job! Big smile


Its not blabber dear its just that u pointed out something that others didnt

Yes UV is all set to get his Mnayata but poor Manya is all caught in , a girl who has been taught to be Manya is finding Yuvrani Mnayata tag on herself a bit suffocating and thats why in coming chapter she willtry to  run  from UV and all such things which will try to take her loved identity her loved dadaji and Manav from him whom he thinks are her real identity.

Its only UV who will make her realize who she actully is in his own ways.

I think u know his ways dont u Smile


Aww okay! Cant wait to read how the story plays out and especially cant wait for this rave party...any hints on whats gonna happen? Wink

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Posted: 16 August 2012 at 2:29am | IP Logged
Wow!! Shana

love the update..

oho!! Manya getting strong / bold day my day.. !! 
hai Manya ne UV chup kara diya..

Love the stair scene.. it was just awesomeee <3 haiii.. me drooling over tht scne.. cant stop imagining more :P :P :P 

Shana i wnat more such scenes plzzz 

hm.. Waiing for the Rave Party..
is it Manyaa to get drunk in the rave party ????

areyy.. minakshiii ne DNA reports cahneg karwadiya..
shaana aur kitna tarpaogi UV ko aur humey ?? 

Manya attracted towards UV... hmm..


Shana... i wnat UV to know the trust soooner plz..
i know tum un dono ko itni jaldi milaogi toh nahi..
but still UV ko tadapte nahi dekh sakti..

M ko paane k liey UV ko phir se pehle jaise tadapna hoga.. 
plzz do ocnt soon
muuuahhh <3 <3 <3 <3 <3 <3 <3 <3 <3 <3

CONT SOOON!! m waitinggg 



Edited by thejazzgal - 16 August 2012 at 2:31am

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Hey Shana,
      Lovely updateClap, u r a very good writer indeed, whatever was written was so good that I could imagine everythingWink, something clicked to me somethings dintSmile.

Analysis:

Part1 : Uday and his blessed instincts: Loved this partClap. In this part u have reasoned out why he doesn't believe the reports. It is just not his plain want to not believe the reports but his logic and instincts. This really worked for me, here it shows why UV is UV and why there cannot be any other UV. He is just matchless.

Part 2:Manya makes her place in office: The whole dress code thing was so well articulated, but felt so proud of UV when even he stared following the dress- code, not just for reducing the displeasure of his employees , but also as a token of his respect for Mrs Breganza's decision.Manya's office atmosphere was very well put shana Clap. You know Mrs Breganza is somewhat like my boss but my boss is also little more caring, so Mrs Breganza just clicks with meLOL.

Manya realizing that she has no right to judge UV, was very right and good, she decides to be strong here and I kind of believe that she would not judge him, but fails miserably in the following parts Confused.

Part 3: UV testing his intinct and yipeee he wins SillyDancingParty. shana what a master piece this part isClap. The whole UV manya secne in his cabin was awesome, the board meeting scene just bowled me over. Everything was done with so finess. loved itClap. UV testing his own instinct and making sure his heart is not overtakingg his maind was again fab work Clap. I bow down to u for this work. I so wished to see something like this. Thanku shana Hug

Part 4: Anya ka maha gyan and Manya hui parehsanROFL: Gosh the ishqzade song pareshan fits so well on Manya here LOLWink. Well again very well written Clap. The way Anya analyses things I really like it. And Manya very cutely thinking of adya the moment Anya suggests shopping was so natural and cute. It also shows how much adya has grown into her.

Part 5:Aman-Manya, outcome jealous Uday, and I love it EmbarrassedWink:  The whole jealouse uday was a treat for the readers Shana Clap. Thank u so much Hug. Loved every thing here. And the staricase part was just wow. Loved it. What I loved the most was UV's confidence in Manya being his princess. He doesn't need any proofs, he knows it. He knows that she will be his someday, but just not yet, and that is what makes him control himself. He also back off to not make manya regret later which again so very UV-ish. I so loved the whole UV character sketch in this chapter. It is like u added a new layer, a new dimension to his character.Clap

But here Manya disappointed me big timeConfused. I would have also wanted her to stop UV. She flowing in her want of desire was fair enough, anybody would melt in the arms of UV, but she should have composed herself first or atleast before UV. I expected her to be much stronger than this.But I guess, all this was needed, to shape her character so that she avoids UV in the coming  chapters.

Manya again decided to be strong and carve a niche as Manya was again good. Realization as hit her hard this time. But would eagerly wait to see what happens next. I would definitely want to see her loose herself to Uday againEmbarrassed, or most possibly do ahem ahem ...with him also, but the situation should be that emotional and intense and should demand that.(Like some guy acting fresh with her and UV saving her and she seeing him in diffrent light and something happens in the heat of the moment is doneThumbs Up) For me this staircase scene was hot and I enjoyed it as a reader, but while analysis the charcters I found it week in respect of Manya.


Things I missed: Unnati, Vijay, J, Jagat introduction. It is high time u show them now. I would atleast expect a phone call to adya from Komal or badimasa. Being her nani and dadi, they would talk to her atleast once a week right? Eagerly waiting to also see DS, the lady who made UV what he is. Uday-Manav bonding was also missing. Hope you show it in the comming chapters. And yes would love to see UV working hard to get Manya+Manyata

Lovelu update shana, thanks for the PM dear Hug. And sorry fro the late analysis






Edited by chitra_rao - 16 August 2012 at 9:23am
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Originally posted by chitra_rao

Hey Shana,
      Lovely updateClap, u r a very good writer indeed, whatever was written was so good that I could imagine everythingWink, something clicked to me somethings dintSmile.

Analysis:

Part1 : Uday and his blessed instincts: Loved this partClap. In this part u have reasoned out why he doesn't believe the reports. It is just not his plain want to not believe the reports but his logic and instincts. This really worked for me, here it shows why UV is UV and why there cannot be any other UV. He is just matchless.

Part 2:Manya makes her place in office: The whole dress code thing was so well articulated, but felt so proud of UV when even he stared following the dress- code, not just for reducing the displeasure of his employees , but also as a token of his respect for Mrs Breganza's decision.Manya's office atmosphere was very well put shana Clap. You know Mrs Breganza is somewhat like my boss but my boss is also little more caring, so Mrs Breganza just clicks with meLOL.

Manya realizing that she has no right to judge UV, was very right and good, she decides to be strong here and I kind of believe that she would not judge him, but fails miserably in the following parts Confused.

Part 3: UV testing his intinct and yipeee he wins SillyDancingParty. shana what a master piece this part isClap. The whole UV manya secne in his cabin was awesome, the board meeting scene just bowled me over. Everything was done with so finess. loved itClap. UV testing his own instinct and making sure his heart is not overtakingg his maind was again fab work Clap. I bow down to u for this work. I so wished to see something like this. Thanku shana Hug

Part 4: Anya ka maha gyan and Manya hui parehsanROFL: Gosh the ishqzade song pareshan fits so well on Manya here LOLWink. Well again very well written Clap. The way Anya analyses things I really like it. And Manya very cutely thinking of adya the moment Anya suggests shopping was so natural and cute. It also shows how much adya has grown into her.

Part 5:Aman-Manya, outcome jealous Uday, and I love it EmbarrassedWink:  The whole jealouse uday was a treat for the readers Shana Clap. Thank u so much Hug. Loved every thing here. And the staricase part was just wow. Loved it. What I loved the most was UV's confidence in Manya being his princess. He doesn't need any proofs, he knows it. He knows that she will be his someday, but just not yet, and that is what makes him control himself. He also back off to not make manya regret later which again so very UV-ish. I so loved the whole UV character sketch in this chapter. It is like u added a new layer, a new dimension to his character.Clap

But here Manya disappointed me big timeConfused. I would have also wanted her to stop UV. She flowing in her want of desire was fair enough, anybody would melt in the arms of UV, but she should have composed herself first or atleast before UV. I expected her to be much stronger than this.But I guess, all this was needed, to shape her character so that she avoids UV in the coming  chapters.

Manya again decided to be strong and carve a niche as Manya was again good. Realization as hit her hard this time. But would eagerly wait to see what happens next. I would definitely want to see her loose herself to Uday againEmbarrassed, or most possibly do ahem ahem ...with him also, but the situation should be that emotional and intense and should demand that.(Like some guy acting fresh with her and UV saving her and she seeing him in diffrent light and something happens in the heat of the moment is doneThumbs Up) For me this staircase scene was hot and I enjoyed it as a reader, but while analysis the charcters I found it week in respect of Manya.


Things I missed: Unnati, Vijay, J, Jagat introduction. It is high time u show them now. I would atleast expect a phone call to adya from Komal or badimasa. Being her nani and dadi, they would talk to her atleast once a week right? Eagerly waiting to also see DS, the lady who made UV what he is. Uday-Manav bonding was also missing. Hope you show it in the comming chapters. And yes would love to see UV working hard to get Manya+Manyata

Lovelu update shana, thanks for the PM dear Hug. And sorry fro the late analysis






Well dear cant give everything in one chapter u know that very well.

As per character of Manya well the girl did put up a strong fight verbally and physically as well she did try to shove him off .But then deep within she is all UVs ,dont know of other girls but Mnaya already belongs to him her mind may play games with her but her heart and body are all honestly on UVs side.

Yes she is making herself strong as its mind that is strongest but what can we do to heart that is so frail and emotional...

 Dill par koi zor nahin behna  fisla to fisla  ,
 samjho gaye kaam se



Aise he nahi Menka ne Vishwamitra ko pataya tha

aur aise he nahi Shivji ne gusse me Kaam Dev ko bhasm kiya tha ...

Shivji knew how smart Kamdev aka heart of human  is thats why even bechre bhagwan decided to kill it off
......Dill fislne se pahle he dill ko he maar dala Ouch
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Posted: 16 August 2012 at 10:50am | IP Logged
Originally posted by shana0127

Originally posted by chitra_rao

Hey Shana,
      Lovely updateClap, u r a very good writer indeed, whatever was written was so good that I could imagine everythingWink, something clicked to me somethings dintSmile.

Analysis:

Part1 : Uday and his blessed instincts: Loved this partClap. In this part u have reasoned out why he doesn't believe the reports. It is just not his plain want to not believe the reports but his logic and instincts. This really worked for me, here it shows why UV is UV and why there cannot be any other UV. He is just matchless.

Part 2:Manya makes her place in office: The whole dress code thing was so well articulated, but felt so proud of UV when even he stared following the dress- code, not just for reducing the displeasure of his employees , but also as a token of his respect for Mrs Breganza's decision.Manya's office atmosphere was very well put shana Clap. You know Mrs Breganza is somewhat like my boss but my boss is also little more caring, so Mrs Breganza just clicks with meLOL.

Manya realizing that she has no right to judge UV, was very right and good, she decides to be strong here and I kind of believe that she would not judge him, but fails miserably in the following parts Confused.

Part 3: UV testing his intinct and yipeee he wins SillyDancingParty. shana what a master piece this part isClap. The whole UV manya secne in his cabin was awesome, the board meeting scene just bowled me over. Everything was done with so finess. loved itClap. UV testing his own instinct and making sure his heart is not overtakingg his maind was again fab work Clap. I bow down to u for this work. I so wished to see something like this. Thanku shana Hug

Part 4: Anya ka maha gyan and Manya hui parehsanROFL: Gosh the ishqzade song pareshan fits so well on Manya here LOLWink. Well again very well written Clap. The way Anya analyses things I really like it. And Manya very cutely thinking of adya the moment Anya suggests shopping was so natural and cute. It also shows how much adya has grown into her.

Part 5:Aman-Manya, outcome jealous Uday, and I love it EmbarrassedWink:  The whole jealouse uday was a treat for the readers Shana Clap. Thank u so much Hug. Loved every thing here. And the staricase part was just wow. Loved it. What I loved the most was UV's confidence in Manya being his princess. He doesn't need any proofs, he knows it. He knows that she will be his someday, but just not yet, and that is what makes him control himself. He also back off to not make manya regret later which again so very UV-ish. I so loved the whole UV character sketch in this chapter. It is like u added a new layer, a new dimension to his character.Clap

But here Manya disappointed me big timeConfused. I would have also wanted her to stop UV. She flowing in her want of desire was fair enough, anybody would melt in the arms of UV, but she should have composed herself first or atleast before UV. I expected her to be much stronger than this.But I guess, all this was needed, to shape her character so that she avoids UV in the coming  chapters.

Manya again decided to be strong and carve a niche as Manya was again good. Realization as hit her hard this time. But would eagerly wait to see what happens next. I would definitely want to see her loose herself to Uday againEmbarrassed, or most possibly do ahem ahem ...with him also, but the situation should be that emotional and intense and should demand that.(Like some guy acting fresh with her and UV saving her and she seeing him in diffrent light and something happens in the heat of the moment is doneThumbs Up) For me this staircase scene was hot and I enjoyed it as a reader, but while analysis the charcters I found it week in respect of Manya.


Things I missed: Unnati, Vijay, J, Jagat introduction. It is high time u show them now. I would atleast expect a phone call to adya from Komal or badimasa. Being her nani and dadi, they would talk to her atleast once a week right? Eagerly waiting to also see DS, the lady who made UV what he is. Uday-Manav bonding was also missing. Hope you show it in the comming chapters. And yes would love to see UV working hard to get Manya+Manyata

Lovelu update shana, thanks for the PM dear Hug. And sorry fro the late analysis






Well dear cant give everything in one chapter u know that very well.

As per character of Manya well the girl did put up a strong fight verbally and physically as well she did try to shove him off .But then deep within she is all UVs ,dont know of other girls but Mnaya already belongs to him her mind may play games with her but her heart and body are all honestly on UVs side.

Yes she is making herself strong as its mind that is strongest but what can we do to heart that is so frail and emotional...

 Dill par koi zor nahin behna  fisla to fisla  ,
 samjho gaye kaam se



Aise he nahi Menka ne Vishwamitra ko pataya tha

aur aise he nahi Shivji ne gusse me Kaam Dev ko bhasm kiya tha ...

Shivji knew how smart Kamdev aka heart of human  is thats why even bechre bhagwan decided to kill it off
......Dill fislne se pahle he dill ko he maar dala Ouch

no no I dont want any of this to happen here LOL,Though I'm a very strong Shiv bhakth, I want the dil also intact and the two dilwale (manveer) also intactROFL. Well nice justification for Manya losing herself in Uday.Tongue well what next, now I know of some really wierd things that happen in Rave party can we expect that masala also here Wink


Edited by chitra_rao - 16 August 2012 at 10:51am
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Originally posted by chitra_rao

Originally posted by shana0127



Well dear cant give everything in one chapter u know that very well.

As per character of Manya well the girl did put up a strong fight verbally and physically as well she did try to shove him off .But then deep within she is all UVs ,dont know of other girls but Mnaya already belongs to him her mind may play games with her but her heart and body are all honestly on UVs side.

Yes she is making herself strong as its mind that is strongest but what can we do to heart that is so frail and emotional...

 Dill par koi zor nahin behna  fisla to fisla  ,
 samjho gaye kaam se



Aise he nahi Menka ne Vishwamitra ko pataya tha

aur aise he nahi Shivji ne gusse me Kaam Dev ko bhasm kiya tha ...

Shivji knew how smart Kamdev aka heart of human  is thats why even bechre bhagwan decided to kill it off
......Dill fislne se pahle he dill ko he maar dala Ouch

no no I dont want any of this to happen here LOL,Though I'm a very strong Shiv bhakth, I want the dil also intact and the two dilwale (manveer) also intactROFL. Well nice justification for Manya losing herself in Uday.Tongue well what next, now I know of some really wierd things that happen in Rave party can we expect that masala also here Wink


Chal acha hai dono shiv bhaktan saath milin hain ek mai aur ak tu dono mile ...aage ka gaana hum dono ke liye bilkul nahi hai LOL

Yes will put some that masala where Minakshi will play reverse cupid for first time Wink

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