Posted: 30 July 2012 at 1:56pm | IP Logged
Hi Shana , were do I start u keep ozzing such wonderful updates one after other that at times we are short of words. A brilliantly compiled chapter. I'm saying brillant coz here u are setting the base of Adya-Manva relationship which is of cute nok-jhok and innocence (Just wondering would Manva be a like a big brother to Adya, or just a mere friend).Plus in this chapter u r also showing the depth of want and happiness Adya is having towards her mom.
Comming to ur update:
Part 1: Adya and her encounter with her Mama: What a opening to the update shana , outstanding. U used my so called trump card Adya at the very beginning. The way u have put up the scene, Manya sleeping and Adya touching and feeling her to make sure she is no dream and a reality as suraj told her was just amazing. Manya's reaction to Adya and Adya hugging her Mom, calling Manya her mom all was rightly put. Part 2: Suraj Suraj is meenakshi naam ke andhera ko dur karne wala Suraj : I'm falling in love with this character. U better use this beautifully etched charachter to its full calliber in favor of Manya in ur future updates. I must give it to u for the whole Lalpari concept . That was innocent, refreshing and so enduring to here from litle Adya. A beautiful lie that she has been living, lie told to her by her elders to keep her mom alive for her sake.Just remarkable work here Shana, And suraj hating Minakshi was like icing on the cake
Part 3:Manya and Adya connection: Manya holding Adya in her arms,adya losing herself and finding solace in her moms arms , manya feeling her own flesh, recognizing her to be her own part was again well constructed.
Part 4: OOt and Chuhiya : Both of them are so adorable.What cool nick names. I was having a stupid smile on my face while reading their bantering to and fro. Good work again (here again u could use both of them to team up and bring Uday and Manya together against Minashi, it would a heck of a scene to read )
Part 5:Manya and Manav: Their brother sister bond is just like a sea for me, each time I dive I discover something new. Manav's Possessiveness, his fear of losing the only family he has in her, his anger over manya hugging adya, whereas so far she would hav just hugged him, his insecurity of losing his importance in manya's life to a small chuhiya was all very well built up.
Part6: facing the truth: Manya's reaction on finding her pictures in Uday's room was just magical for me. Her intial sock, then her slight happiness and losing herself in those pictures, recognizing the love shared by the two people in the pic, and then sudden realization that it cannot be her but her look-alike, was all very well complied, I could feel her every reaction. Part7: Manveer Manveer: Again very well written Shana. Their hesitation towards each other, their want and attraction towards each other, they trying so hard to pull back and hold back is so amazingly described. Bechare they cant hold back for long , coz they r Manveer. Manyata is a magnet to our Uday who has turned himself into iron. His effort of repelling from her on facts that would in future prove she is not mayata. but still the unexplained attraction towards her would be heck of a journey to be part of A wonderful Update Shana, update soon and thanks for the PM